This is so far amazing I love it you should be an author I'm like hooked lol

You didn't pay much attention to detail when reading the book did you because Chloe hates basements

I thought this was super cute. I really liked the new characters.

So sad u ended it
Seriously though do u live in Ohio too cause I'm almost suprised I didnt right this myself
Then again great female insane minds think alike

If u want proper grammar you would say " And this is Chloe and Derek." When kit was introducing them.

So if you could just give me the address to this house, that'd be great because these people sound just like me and my friends. And oh lordy... Simon on the trampoline.. I was just imagining it and its really hard to contain my laughter throughout this chapter when its like 3 am. And it was SO not the crappiest chapter ever... it was awesome. *internet hug and high five*

THIS IS JUST FUNNNY I LOVE IT. DEREK CRYIED AWWWWWWWW! I WILL KILL THE BRITISH DUDE.

There house is best. There are alot of inside jokes in this, ha she own

So cute yet funny I love this.

This was so funny. I love that he has to go shirt less yummy

I love this it was realy funny. The house is cool.

pleazz keep going its awesome and i love it

it was okay...but it felt a bit unnatural. like tori saying "yay" or going through a weirdness tutorial? idk just didn't seem something people would do you know? you did have some good moments though!

not bad so far, but i would suggest not putting in little author notes in the middle of the story...its distracting/annoying and a bit unprofessional...other than that i think your characterization is decent for the most part :)

wheres the next chapter?