Reviews for Thunderstorm
P.A.W.07 chapter 1 . 5/28/2015
That last line was kind of heart breaking. Great short!
Illaeshin chapter 1 . 12/14/2014
Came across this one a while ago, don't know why I didn't favorite it then. That last line though . . . _ Foreshadowing much. Well done.
PurpleArmadillo chapter 1 . 2/21/2013
Great charaterisations and descriptions! Touching too, and I love that you elaborated on a small mission in the game's storyline.
DarkEcoFreak chapter 1 . 1/16/2013
Ah the irony of that last lineā€¦ love it! That was great!
meltinglacier chapter 1 . 6/12/2011
Awww, it's so cute! I like this whole idea of Big Jak cuddling up with Little Jak. And I like all those little hints that they're the same person that you peppered the story with. Also, having the guards say things that are in the game was a nice touch. And that last line was so funny. Ah, the irony.
White Cherry Rose chapter 1 . 12/9/2010
holy crap! that is just toooooooooo AmaZiNG to

discribe, luv how u didnt make the characters

seem off/ unlike themselves. i wish u could have

wrote a second part to this!

these Jak/lil' Jak storys r hard to write (& 4 me hard 2 find 4 sum reson)

i no u've herd this a billion times but im gonna

make it a billion...and 1!



PleAsE check out: From One World to The Next
Didi chapter 1 . 9/17/2010
ME LOVE! Ya got a fan. Now to read "A Matter of Time"story. Mysterious Angel-05 says it's I'll be the judge of that. -_-
Dark Eco Monster chapter 1 . 9/17/2010
Awe! And here everybody thought Jak has no soft side. Only his younger self and Daxter can do that. LoL!. Love the story.
Emily chapter 1 . 9/17/2010
LOVED! Just so sweet!
Yami Dragoness of Dark chapter 1 . 8/16/2010
Oooooooh the irony of that last statement. Very well done, it was cute :) poor little Jak er...Mar, he's scared stiff. -hugs kid-
M-Angel 05 chapter 1 . 8/14/2010
Loved it. Are you gonna continue it or is this it?
Starstreak 777 chapter 1 . 8/11/2010
Sorry, Jak, but he will end up like you! He is you!

Good story! Simple and soothing, I like it.
LeiaOrganicSolo chapter 1 . 8/11/2010
Interaction between Jak and his younger self is always cool, but yours was amazing. The mention of deja vu, the ending, it was just awesome! Keep it up.
EcoSeeker247 chapter 1 . 8/11/2010
Wow, this was good! I remember that mission in the game. XD But seriously, great writing, everyone's in character, and I loved the ending! Keep up the good work!
Vandenberg chapter 1 . 8/10/2010
Great job in writing this up. Your characterisation of everyone was pretty believable and you are positively /evil/ for putting in that little twist at the end. :'(

I hope you keep writing! On an unrelated note: god dammit, now I'm addicted to Jak and Daxter fics again... I hope there are a few new ones to read. _"

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