|Reviews for To Save the Queen|
| Jhallel chapter 1 . 2/19
I just blasted through the whole fic. Like, I stayed up until 5 am this morning to read this. Very good.
| OpalAegis chapter 44 . 1/13
I just finised this story for a second time. I still love it. If you need help with thag edit I'm offering. Its partly self serving though, I'm hoping assistance would get the sequel updated faster. ..I'm always checking for the newesg hpdate on To Die for the Republic. Well if tk reread the first bit of TDFTD. Impatiently yours as always Opal Aegis.
| White Ivy chapter 44 . 12/23/2013
Great fic! I really enjoyed getting to know the handmaidens - especially Sabe. :)
| Wendy chapter 44 . 9/21/2013
This must be the tenth time I've read this (: I love it so much and your other story is great as well :) thank you for sharing your amazing writing skills,thank you for writing this :) it's truly one of the best things I have read :)
| Sarah chapter 1 . 8/27/2013
You are such an incredible writer,I'm so glad I've found this story,It's amazing how well you have developed the characters,and the way Sabé acts and thinks is just genius :) I have read this so many times,yet I never get bored,and now I'm reading the prequel which is also fantastic :) One word:Amazing :)
| NouvelleNouveau chapter 44 . 7/25/2013
Holy cow. I don't have words that aren't like, swearing and things and ff.n frowns on that in general.
It was awesome. Totally awesome. I'm not a big fan of handmaiden fics in any way shape or form, especially Sabé/Obi-Wan but dang. New favorite. This has just jumped to the top of my list. I love Sabé's voice and your style and the story and pretty much just everything. It is beautiful and fun and fantastic and I am going to start the sequel right now.
But yeah. 10/10. Would recommend.
| Freefan1412 chapter 44 . 7/8/2013
This was very interesting. I have never actually put much thought into the troubles the handmaidens have to go through. The stress about something as unimportant (which, if you write it like this, it really isn't) as choosing the right dress to wear. This point of view certainly puts things into perspective.
I enjoyed reading it am going straight to the sequel. :)
| Vana Jedi chapter 1 . 3/27/2013
It's a very good beginning, I think. Writing a story about one of the handmaidens is difficult in my eyes (Force knows I've tried it, and didn't get anywhere), so I commend you. I also commend you on your grammar and spelling, as I didn't notice any mistakes.
It's a little confusing at times, but I could easily pick up on what was going on. Sabé's 'friend' speaks a little strangely, as you include a lot of dashes and ellipses (the three dots: ...) when she speaks. I'm guessing that's intentional, but from a purely stylistic standpoint, I would avoid overusing them because it breaks up her speech too much. Of course you should keep most of them in, but try to make sure you don't drag a sentence of dialogue on forever.
I think you might be misunderstood in a place-it seems like you think Sabé was the handmaiden who acted as a double for Amidala and died in Zam Wesell's attack on the ship. That was actually Cordé, another handmaiden. You might've already known this and disregarded it, or I just misread something, in which case this doesn't apply. You can disregard it; it was just a random fact that I just wanted to bring your attention to.
Sabé doesn't have any characterisation in the movies, really, so here you have a good chance to flesh her out more. Unfortunately, that's one of my problems. She's got little development. I know it is only the first chapter, but I'd keep her personality in mind. She seems very one-dimensional, as you're not showing us any of her inner thoughts or any subtle things she does that could display emotion. You simply inform us that she feels one way or another (to be more accurate, Sabé informs us, as it is in first person after all).
My favorite personality test is this. Describe her to me using quotes from what you've published. The quotes cannot be merely informative (e.g.: "I am easily angered") and you may not reference appearance, species, family, age, occupation, or any powers. If you can do this, you're in the clear.
Overall, I think it's a very good story. I think that for the future you should keep in mind a definite personality for Sabé and not stray too much from it. I would also work on indirect characterisation. I like what I've seen of the plot, and I also enjoy some of the descriptions you have. You're good with dialogue and that's a neat talent.
May the Force be with you,
Member of Critics United
| Guest chapter 27 . 3/21/2013
Is anikin going to turn to the dark side in revenge of the sith?
| hop-out-of-kin chapter 44 . 1/31/2013
You really have a gift for writing stories! It feels like you're breathing life into them, if it makes sense. XD I haven't enjoyed such a good story in a long time, and while I thought Padme was awesome in the films, I had never given much thought to her handmaidens before, and now I realize what brave people they must have been. Sabe's really amazing, along with her friends. Whenever I watch the film, now, I can pretend they're exactly as you wrote, and I believe it makes it much more enjoyable.
| Cat In the Cupboard chapter 1 . 1/31/2013
I could go on and on about how good this story is, but instead I'll just say that The Phantom Menace is now a lot more interesting now that I know all this was going on in the background. :)
| The Agent of Fire chapter 44 . 1/22/2013
This story was amazing. I've always been kind of fascinated by the Handmaidens as well, and I like them even more after reading this story. It was well written, the plot flowed easily and was never really boring, there were serious parts but there were also genuinely funny parts, and I think you made Sabé a really great character. Actually, all the Handmaidens are pretty great in this story. Even the ones we don't see much of. The main ones each had some kind of background or personality trait that made them stand out, which can be kind of hard to do when you have five different Handmaidens (plus a queen and two Jedi) to focus on.
Anyway, amazing job. I'll totally be checking out the sequel.
I do have one question though... I have a rough idea, but I don't know for sure. How do you pronounce Eirtaé's name? I think I have the others right (Saw-bay, Raw-bay, Saw-chay, Yawn-ay...) but I don't know if hers is "air-tay", "ear-tay", "eye-er-tay", or something totally different.
| not paranoid enough chapter 44 . 1/17/2013
Amazing story! And it wasn't slow at all; slow implies boring and pointless. This was good :D
| pregar chapter 44 . 12/16/2012
Really well written, for a fanfiction. I especially like the pacing, the tempo of this story, it just flows from start to the very end.
Your handmaidens are great, you could put more spotlight on others if you are going to write sequel, only Eirtaé and Wicaté have some solid definition in my mind.
Sabé is of course very likeable. Though I have an urge to frown when she goes on on some tirade... but... girls sometimes do that, don't they?
All in all, this is one of the better stories I've read here.
| Mararsi chapter 44 . 12/9/2012
Woot! Great story, good writing, great characterization, enjoyable characters. Really an all-around enjoyable story, especially given the detriment of trying to stay rather canon, which usually turns interesting premises into dull, lifeless stories.
Thanks for all the hard work, I'm psyched for the sequel!