|Reviews for A Guide to Not Making Your Tribute Suck|
| Guest chapter 2 . 6/5/2011
I need to tell you, I have three friends who have pale skin, black hair and blue eyes.
| Waffling Time chapter 1 . 6/3/2011
Hey, I thought you seemed like you deserved a flame after you asked so nicely, even though I actually think it's hilarious.
But my characters can't DIE! They're the amazing-est things EVER, how could I make them bloodbaths, like, ever?
YOU SUCK, I HOPE YOUR TRIBUTES BURN IN HELL WITH THEIR FAULTS AND THEIR UGLINESS!
Like the flame? :D
| FullOfHunger chapter 1 . 6/2/2011
Awesome, and very funny, despite you saying it wouldnt be. And very helpful, too.
And one thing to add: there are tributes from other districts that are exactly like Katniss, whos "father was killed by peacekeepers" and a "girly but brave younger sister she volunteers for". I know this because Ive been submitted one.
Also for tributes tokens, beware Katniss-copy-cats, like 'pin with a humming bird on it" or "a bird mounted to a ring and used as an earring".
To all carbon-copy-katniss tributes: we see through you!
Anyway, good guide.
You should continue it!
Dont stop beleving! Or writing!
| Giratina chapter 3 . 5/9/2011
Very good guide as a collective. Admittedly, I'm a newbie to the whole Hunger Games scene, but even I can see that a lot of the Tributes being put up are... concerning, to say the least. (I live forever in fear of Rei Mitsuki Tanaka.) However, I do have some minor nitpicks I'd like to point out.
Firstly, your point about the Districts. It's legitimate overall, but I don't think that the example you gave was very good. After all, as Katniss said herself in the first Hunger Games, the kids from Twelve HAVE no training down in the mines. They start at eighteen. Even though eighteen-year-olds are eligible for the Games (and likely have the most entries), they're still very much rookies, and everyone else pretty much needs a different thing to do in Twelve out of necessity.
Also, the position of Gamemaker as narrator. You have NO IDEA how much I want to make Eldritch my narrator in Cirque de la Pain. But there's just one problem: the Gamemakers, uerr, make the game. So realistically they would know what is happening in the game. And they would also know what's happening in the future. Trying to write the entire story from the position of any Gamemaker would more likely than not be monumentally awkward, because you want them to seem like they know what's going on... without telling the readers what's going to happen at the final five and whatnot. Plus, an indifferent Gamemaker as narrator would sap a lot of the drama of the good moments.
Third, the names. 'No real names'? Let's see here... Finnick. Caesar. Johanna. Brutus. Cecilia. Gale (real name, yes). There are no shortage of names we have found in history or modern society. Not everyone has normal names, but not everyone has the thinly-disguised tech names of District Three or the job corruption names of District Twelve, either.
| ZebraZoink chapter 3 . 5/3/2011
Nice! You've helped me round my tribute submitting skills, and I thank you for that. I'd just like to point out that a lot of tribute's are named after nature because they're like that in the book. (Rue, Katniss, Thresh, Primrose, etc.) But many are related to their personalities (Cato, Peeta, etc.)
| EvieRain chapter 1 . 5/1/2011
I loved this. Guess what two other things that annoy me are?
PEOPLE FROM A CAREER DISTRICT THAT AREN'T CAREERS/DON'T WANT TO BE ALLIES WITH CAREERS. If they are from a career district, they volunteer. Simple as that. Because if they were reaped, someone else would volunteer for them.
And there are all these "careers" who, under alliances, put "NOT CAREERS". If you don't want them to be allies with careers, don't put them in a career district.
Oh yeah, and basically the opposite of this problem: CAREERS WHO AREN'T FROM A CAREER DISTRICT AND WANT TO BE ALLIES WITH CAREERS. I've seen submissions that say: "She's one of the few careers outside of a career district." PEOPLE DIE. The only reason's you'd be a career is if you were from a career district. Okay?
And plus, I've seen SO MANY submissions of people from District 9 or whatever who want to be allies with careers. The careers will take one extra ally, max. And only if they're super-talented.
OH, ONE MORE THING. NOT EVERYONE CAN MAKE IT TO THE TOP THREE. In an average SYOT, not including bloodbaths, usually 3/4 of the tributes under preferred death put something like: "late games, around top five, if at all?" NOT EVERYONE CAN MAKE IT FAR. DEAL WITH IT. It especially annoys me when they aren't even careers, they're these weak twelve year olds who got a two in training and seem like they should be a bloodbath... and the author puts "late games, if at all" under preferred death.
Those were just a few things you didn't say much about. Oh, and once (I only saw this once, not a big thing) someone entered a tribute but didn't fill out the personality part of the form. Seriously?
Anyway, good points, good writing, I enjoyed it.
| Harmlessly Weird chapter 3 . 4/28/2011
Wow. I was looking at the reviews for a different SYOT that I submitted the D1 girl to and found that someone had submitted her before me. Here is that person's:
Appearance:Tall with a tan body and sea green eyes you can drown long golden blond hair that goes halfway down her back in body is slender with curves that causes men too stare.
Personality:She is like the ice queen she thinks shes the best out of will break a guys heart and hurt girls by ruining there her own family treats her like a queen.
Chosen/Volunteer (If volunteered, please explain why)?:Volunttered because her father incouraged her too
Opinion about the Hunger Games?:There great and she can get more attention then ever if shes in them.
Strengths:Hand to Hand combat,most weapons,tree climbing
Weaknesses:Unknown plants,Hunger,curing injuries
When do you think is a realistic/reasonable time for them to die during the Games?:When way over half of the contestants are gone and the careers split up
Family/Friends:Rick Star a man with black hair and sea green eyes old hunger games victor (Father) Miranda Star women with blond hair and chocolate brown eyes (Mother) Twinkle Star 7 year old girl with whispy blond hair and sea green eyes (sister)
Background Information?:She grew up with her father training fall in love with her all the time and she has lots of friends.
Token?:Golden necklace with blue green red and white jewels.
Meanwhile, here is mine:
Name: Tonerra Tawney
Nickname: Error Message (computers always seem to freeze up around her and “error” sounds sort of like the end of her name)
Appearance: Black hair, faint freckles across a strong nose, inquisitive green eyes, a tan, a delicate build, pianist’s fingers
Personality: Sarcastic and witty. Not exactly in a mean way. She’s quiet at school and in public but at home and stuff she’s chatty. She has a knack for twisting words into playful insults. She’s easy to anger. At home. In public she projects that shy-girl-with-little-to-say feel.
Opinion about the Hunger Games?: Whatever. As long as they’re there I’m gonna win them.
Any romance/alliances?: Maybe. An alliance. No romance.
Strengths: Speed and dexterity. Her seamstress mother taught her basic sewing, so she can stitch a wound.
Weaknesses: Fear of heights and trees. She doesn’t like boys very much. Her constant swinging between quiet and sociable makes her unfavorable with sponsors, who feel like she’s trying to manipulate them.
She’d die in the middle, maybe around where Rue died.
Kena – Mom – District One’s seamstress, usually working.
Sphinx – Dad – boisterous and loud. More involved than Kena. Not that she wasn’t involved with her kids.
Garnet and Peridot – twin younger siblings. Normal sibling rivalry. They’re twelve. Tonerra is a little frightened they’ll get picked but they got accepted in Career training.
Background Information?: None. Nothing horribly tragic in life. She applied for Career training but wasn’t accepted because of her build.
Token?: Yes, a lace collar that her mother made that she says her stylist can sew onto the outfit in the Launch Room
Other: Her stylist’s name is Juno Moneta. But she goes by Mona.
| LadyMahfuza chapter 3 . 4/24/2011
You are brilliant. -gives cookie-
| Bloodbender Mackenzie chapter 3 . 4/24/2011
This has helped me a lot. I used to do a few things, like try to make my Tribute beautiful...but now I see I guess that pisses a lot of people off...so I think I'll change that now. I'm going to try and refer back to this as much as possibly with every tribute I make.
| OhSoVeryLovely chapter 1 . 4/21/2011
Haha lol XD This was so true! Although i'm pretty sure i'm guilty of doing some of those things...
| GrossGirl18 chapter 3 . 4/10/2011
I find this to be an epic win. Ans now I'm going to go on a rant about a character I created today, and then ask your opinion. Just because I can.
She's 13, with no chest or body form whatsoever. (She hasn't hit puberty.) She wears thick glasses, has thick, short, bob-with-bangs hair. The glasses have tape on the nose, and her eyes are also dark brown. Her mom IS dead, and her father IS somewhat of a morphling addict. She's from 6, and I decided that 6 is going to be the place where they make dyes and stuff. So she knows all about plants, she can paint/camouflage, and she happens to be very handy with a short knife and shears. She's manipulative and a deadly because she has something to fight for- her little brother, Mark, who she adores. Her strategy is to pretend to be your friend and then kill you off with some kind of poisonous plant. Her name is Lily because her mother loved the water lilies that grew in the pond nearby, which is how she learned to swim. She can climb trees because she sometimes had to in order to collect flowers for dying. She's fast, but not strong. Very smart and strategic, but the only weapons she has are her wits, the plants, and a short knife, because where the heck could you use a pair of shears in the Hunger Games?
So, Now i'm going to ask you your opinion, and expect you to answer me back. Amazing how much we reviewers expect from you, huh?
| marlenajo chapter 1 . 4/10/2011
I totally agree. This was hysterical! I love it :)
| Rex915 chapter 1 . 4/8/2011
Haha, that was awesome! A cookie for you. (::)
| GlimmerIcewood chapter 1 . 4/2/2011
Okay, first of all...
Some big, mean Career dude runs across poor helpless (Z). He's about to stab her, but then decides not to, on the basis of, "Well gee, she sure is purty," pausing then eloquently adding, "Hurr durr durr."
That , made me laugh. ALOT!
Every point you put in here makes absolute and complete sense. I've seen tributes from the most random district have super skills.
For one, I seen a small twelve year old tribute who could throw knives, hit a target, then make them come back to her. Seriously? Sometimes people make they're tributes life a little different, but at least their personalities and looks are semi-normal.
Overall, this made me laugh alot, and it's all true!
| Arcticmist chapter 3 . 3/28/2011
Great adivce I agree with all of your points.