|Reviews for Discussions|
| Gingerbreadcake chapter 1 . 3/26
Very goon n fluffy and don't mind but I can't see Edward believing Bella cuz of a definition in a dictionary...
Also as we're doing story writing in the school, here are some useful pointers which I think ur story lacks:
Adjectives: his pale, white hand
Adverbs: he scoffed, not believing me
Using vivid verbs like he gobbled up,etc,etc
But on the whole... Very sweet n fluffy
| paulineta chapter 1 . 1/1/2011
It's not crappy, it's pretty and very lovely. Adn Edward is such a cheater!
But a cute, lovely cheater, that is...
I really liked it
| Kelly Cvetkova chapter 1 . 12/14/2010
I cant believe it i have read this story before. and i didnt even bother to go to your profile. man was i an idiot. (palm to face) keep up the awesome writing