|Reviews for Three Years At Sea|
| Reader P chapter 7 . 9/7/2010
pretty awesome how this fic is coming along. In your past 3 chapters, your description of the cold really comes out as a good element of writing (ur writing overall it great here!)
Good job, keep it up!
| SeasideFantasy chapter 7 . 9/7/2010
Gosh, I just love your story. You stick so close to the story and keep the characters so in character it almost feels like canon.
I can't wait for the next update!
| AnnaAza chapter 7 . 9/5/2010
Aw poor Zuko. You did his feelings about the guys in the bath house perfectly! And I never actually thought about the money, supplies, and everything to keep Zuko, the crew, and his ship running! So great job on everything!
| DreamSprite chapter 6 . 9/1/2010
I've always wanted to write something like this. You've done an amazing job so far and I can't wait to read more!
| Stingmon chapter 6 . 8/31/2010
First of all, thanks a lot for answering my last review! I don't really know why, but I was touched that you took the trouble to write some of it in French (your French is pretty good, too; but you don't have to say "vous" to me, I still feel too young for that _) Also, it's very brave of you to want to rewrite the first chapter. This is great.
Now, concerning the chapter. Zuko is as always very in character, completely immature and yet inspiring. I love seeing him fight against the cold and his own exhaustion.
Geez, in a way I feel quite useless right now because I don't have any critic to make. Your description of Zuko's fragmented memory of his banishment was particularly clever. It's simple and poetic, and it really made me feel what Zuko might have felt, too numb to understand what was going on, focusing on little things like that razor.
Do you really think his head was shaved off as a symbol of his disgrace, though? If that's the case, why did they let him keep his ponytail? I thought part of his hair had just been burnt when his father scarred him, and that it couldn't grow back for some time, so Zuko had to shave most of it to not look like a complete fool. And then he got used to it and just kept it like that? I guess my version doesn't make much sense either...
I also like how you explain why Zuko isn't afraid of fire. The sentence "It wasn't the fire's fault, either." is so cute.
In fact, even that flashback about Mai was good, and God knows I usually can't stand Maiko (Even after the finale, I'm convinced that their love story will come to an end exactly as soon as Zuko will learn that Mai doesn't mind letting her baby brother DIE before her eyes. And if he never figures it out, then it's so. Much. Worse.) I just thought your Mai was a bit too proactive in this chapter to really be in character. But maybe her apathy just got worse with time...
Hem. Sorry for the little rant? I'm really looking forward to your next chapter. I'm also wondering how long this fanfiction is going to be. Will we get to see Zuko go to the Air temples? What about the Spirit World? I have had ideas of fanfictions taking place during those three years, in which Zuko would want to go to the Spirit World and whether ask spirits where the Avatar is, or ask for concrete proofs of his death (I even made up the theory that he initially got the Blue Spirit mask in the hope of talking to Koh without losing his face). I love spirits...
A long review yet again. I hope you enjoyed it!
| Metella chapter 4 . 8/31/2010
"Quietly, he came up behind Zuko, snatched the prince's belt right off his waist, and tied it around his eyes—an impromptu blindfold."
I thought Toph invented that method?
I wonder why Zuko never used his dao swords while fighting. (I have a theory that there is a negative stigma attached to benders using "normal" weapons in the Fire Nation, i.e., you're not a good bender if you use them. That would explain why none of the firebenders fought during the eclipse- because literally none of them learned any other weapons because they though it was pointless.)
| Metella chapter 1 . 8/31/2010
"and your allies in the Earth Kingdom and Water Tribes…"
What? Ozai has allies in the Water Tribes? I very much doubt that. Earth Kingdom *maybe* . . .
| storm-of-insanity chapter 6 . 8/30/2010
I loved every moment of this! You have fantastic skills and I love your style of writing. Iroh and Zuko are completely in character and I adore how you've portrayed their relationship. I also like how you've kept the balance of making Zuko's life suck without it being over dramatic / suicidal as so many Zuko banishment fics are. The backstory with Jeong Jeong (sp?) is a nice touch (especially JJ's letter to Iroh) and Azula's brief cameo was and excellent detail that you added. Speaking of details, I'm very impressed by the way you've used them to flesh out your story and add to the depth of it. Your theory of the differences between the Fire Nation style of leadership and the other nations is very convincing and I accept it as my canon :D
Well done with this story so far and I look forward to the next update. I've added your story to my C2 so many more fans of Zuko and Iroh can enjoy this!
ps, you should definity get a copy of Zuko's Story. It's the most amazing thing EVER!
| mandy347m chapter 6 . 8/29/2010
Always happy to see this updated. :)
| wolfdefender01 chapter 6 . 8/29/2010
awww... soooooo cute!
Love Zuko! plz update soooooooon!
plz the world will fall into turmoil if you don't update!
| Zolarix Aster chapter 6 . 8/29/2010
By the way, I made a drawing of your "seeing snow for the first time" scene from last chapter. It's not done, or even good, but I thought I'd let you know that your story has in-process fan-art.
"He didn't care about music night."
*singsong* Someone's in de-nial!
| AnnaAza chapter 6 . 8/29/2010
Aw poor Zuko. I love how you describe the nights on his ship.
| mandy347m chapter 5 . 8/28/2010
Favorited! I loved how you described Zuko's recovery, touching on something I'd wondered about for a long time - his eyesight. The descriptions with the swords were beautiful, and the characters' voices sound authentic. :)
| Stingmon chapter 5 . 8/21/2010
Geez, I just added your stories to my favorites instead of reviewing it. I need a brain. Well the story is great, so I'll just add it to my alert list while I'm at it. :-)
I'm really surprised that you didn't more reviews: your descriptions are beautiful, and the way you portray Zuko is very moving. I especially liked the way you described the snow and Zuko's wonderment upon seeing it for the first time.
As for the critic: I'll start with the first chapter, since you were unsure about it. It's true that portraying Ozai is really difficult, because how are we to understand his actions? It seems like he banished his son out of spite, yet who feels the need to disfigure someone he despises? I like to think that, to do something so downright cruel, he must have acted out of either hatred or fear. However, it's also hard to see why he would hate or fear his own son enough to try and destroy him.
So since the chapter is from Iroh's point of view, I think it's just as well you made Ozai look impenetrable, making decisions and changing his mind without us really getting why.
No, I think what was wrong with this scene was Iroh. He sounds as if he knew about Ursa's murdering their father, and threatens Ozai with that knowledge in order to force him to give Zuko a ship. That doesn't make sense: if he really knows that much, then he could also prove that Ozai isn't the rightful heir and thus reclaim his throne. Why doesn't he do it? As the Firelord, he could let Zuko stay and even stop the war while he's at it! The threat just confuses the reader, and I don't think you needed that to make Zuko have his ship.
I also think Iroh was too angry in that scene, and not shocked enough: from what we know in the series, the loss (or torture, in this case) of someone dear to him seems to drain him of his strengh more than anything. It's an interesting flaw in someone as powerful as him, and I was a bit disappointed that you didn't make use of it: it would explain why, in the end, he couldn't do much for his nephew when he really needed his help.
But all that is only my opinion, in the end (I can't stand perfect characters and always give them as many flaws as canon will let me :-).) And aside from that first chapter, there is only one thing that perhaps deserves a critic: most of the story is told from Zuko's perspective, and it's very touching. Yet there is one thing that you never really mentioned: does Zuko actually believe the Avatar still exists? In the flashback that takes place in the Air temple, he rather seems to believe that he will run after a ghost all his life long. All that he really hopes is proving his zeal and obedience to his father. In this story, I think it would be interesting to make him doubt of his goal's existence, at least a little.
So that makes two flaws in five chapters: I'd say your story is pretty damn good. I'm really curious about what will happen next, and whether they really will spend the whole winter trapped in the ice. The problem he faces are very different from the actual series, and it's great.
I'm looking forward to the next chapter. I also hope I was able to give a constructive criticism like you wanted (I'm sorry if my english was sometimes difficult to understand. I'm French and all out of practice, so constructive criticism of my review will be welcome if you feel like it! :-))
| Pirate Ninjas of the Abyss chapter 4 . 8/20/2010
I like it, you never see people writing about Zuko before the Avatar comes into the picture. Its really enjoyable reading abot his earlier adventures. Plus the characters are written beautifully. People seem to forget he was sailing the world for 3 years before he found the Avatar. Plus I always wondered what happened when he searched the Northern Air Temple and found those refugees there. I wonder if Zuko will find a little romance on his journeys, Lol, hey his Uncles always pressuring him.