Reviews for Dobby's Return
excessivelyperky chapter 25 . 2/3
Well, it sounds like the diary really is locked up-but what other artifact did Pansy pass to Draco? Then again, Snape as Head of House could always have a surprise inspection and pretend to be shocked at the Playwitch magazines, and confiscate whatever he finds that looks suspicious to him (after casting 'finite' at everything in sight).

Dobby seems to be working really hard, poor elf!
excessivelyperky chapter 24 . 1/31
Oh, let me guess, Pansy just got a *that* needs Banishing!
domsijohn chapter 25 . 1/14
Harry should forbids dobby from hurting himself period
domsijohn chapter 1 . 1/14
I do hope harry doesn't get with ginny
excessivelyperky chapter 23 . 9/16/2016
What a delightful Christmas for everyone! And I'm glad that Dobby had fun as well.
AJ Granger chapter 25 . 9/9/2016
Cute story. Would like to see more. I actually remember seeing this before and reading some of it.
MattKennedy chapter 25 . 8/22/2016
Very cool story! :)
azulkan2 chapter 25 . 6/6/2016
Great you are still working on it.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 25 . 5/25/2016
The wards of Hogwarts ought to reject Dark objects, but of course they don't or Ginny would never have been able to take the diary to Hogwarts. If an incident like that occurs and the Headmaster doesn't upgrade the wards then he deserves a bit of discrediting.

This has been a much more enjoyable read than most time travel fics. Dobby has his own unique perspective. He's powerless enough that he has to be ingenious about how he thwarts threats to Harry. I appreciate the careful spelling and grammar. It's too bad you've stopped work on it, you've left it on a cliffhanger. I don't favorite stories that are abandoned on cliffies.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 22 . 5/25/2016
No need to apologize for not bashing Ron. I only like Ron!bashing when Hermione comes in for her fair share as well. They're both obnoxious in their own way. But there are way too many stories where the author wants to degrade Ron and do a make-over on Hermione and pair her with Harry.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 5 . 5/24/2016
So Hermione is against stealing, but not against copying copyrighted books. And she's only against stealing when she 's not angry at the owner. She's got a very flexible sense of right and wrong! I'm not saying she's OOC here, she's right in line with canon. Rules go out the window when she really wants to do something.
PaC chapter 11 . 12/27/2015
Despite the changes, the canon training wheels, slash canon plot paths are still too much in play to not be rather boring.

It seemed early on, that there was a lot of contradiction about Dobby being in service or NOT to House Malfoy. Canon "clothes giving" is crap, IMO, and should in any fanfic, be REMADE as some sort of symbolic act at the most, but NOT how one exiles an elf from enslavement to a House.

Lots of filler and trivia.
Dobby IMO could use a makeover REBOOT improvement from canon He doesn't need a huge boost, like say, Kathryn518's super attack bodyguard elf Dobby persona in her StarWars Xover fic. But a few baby steps at least, in that direction, departing from your still SO canon meek babble speaking Dobby, would add some improvement to your more boring conflicted, too canon IMO Dobby.

No explanation or reason Dobby is so worried about hiding how he knows shit, and keeping his time travel shit secret, WHY? No explanation is forthcoming why this is necessary..

I tired and hoped but feel it is time to quit the fic, that it just is not interesting enough for me to continue. Should this fic be in haitus, perhaps you might consider my complaints to do some editing, make some changes to Dobby and to the plot being more changed up than still using canon so often for the story plotline, upon returning to writing this story..
PaC chapter 1 . 12/27/2015
Two years no updates, so it's not extremely apparently guaranteed abandoned.
But I'll assume it might not be a dead never to be completed fic. I'll not write long reviews to encourage improvement or changes since it might be DOA and waste of my time, but mostly suggest small shit, LIKE Hedwig here, left locked up. Dobby should care about master Harry's owl, and if Harry was too dumb to ask, Dobby should have offered to unlock Hedwig's cage. Hell, a non-emasculated Harry should bend or break open Hedwig's cage. I laugh how a "caged boy", a kid locked up in a cupboard, would later even OWN a cage or allow his owl to be locked up.
IMO, by end of second year, Harry would have lost all fear of the Dursleys, NOT be intimidated by them or the so called underage magic crap. And he was best suited for Slythering, LOL. AND there are enchanted objects he could purchase AND potions one would think should exist, to use on the Dursleys if needed. THE ONLY fic I've seen bother with potions, is Belial's Brightest Witchj in Darkest House fic. I've seen a handful of Harry making enchanted objects, often using runes on objects that work like a pre-loaded spell in a wand would, for those rare fics that have actual "loaded wands" as if wands can have spells loaded up like bullets in a gun, which is a bit silly IMO, not very intuitive or consistent with canon wand shit.
Anyway, caged owls dragged around in cages is IDIOTIC, instead of just letting them effing fly to Hogwarts. And either Harry IMO would get rid of the cage, or have it transfigured into a perch, AND break [cut with bolt cutters or hack saw] the cage open if Vernon put a lock on it. NO WHERE do I read Hedwig having a bloody perch, WHY, considering Fawks has a perch, sure, caging a phoenix without anti-phoenix-fire-travel ward shit of some kind is a bit dumb, but why all fanfics I've read copy the "caged owl" crap of canon I'll always roll my eyes about.
excessivelyperky chapter 22 . 11/21/2015
Oh, yes, I’m sure Sirius and Remus are telling Harry all about the fun they had with Snivvy, too. After all, nearly murdering a Slytherin is *always* hilarious, right? I’m sure they’re starting with the milder pranks, to gauge his interest, and then lead into the really fun stuff (especially Sirius when he gets drunk).

And the Trio will love it, sadly enough (and since Dobby only remembers Snape as the Evil Headmaster, will think those stories are funny, too).
Charlie0925 chapter 25 . 11/17/2015
Gosh I am LOVING THIS AMAZING FIC! Just wish there was more of it! ;o)
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