|Reviews for Crippled Clock Work|
| CrimsonOkami chapter 1 . 3/28
Girl, LET ME TELL YOU SOMETHIN'!
This is the one of the best pieces of fanfic I've read in ANY fandom, and I assure you that I have read a metric shit ton of fanfiction within the last decade.
First of all, I just got back into Star Ocean 3 merely a week ago - hadn't played the bitch in over ten years but decided to boot her up with my disabled, elderly PS2 on a whim and I am GLAD I did because I became sucked in through the glory that is Albel, and by extension -Albel/Fayt.
When I first played this game, I was a but a wee lad in my early teens and I had yet discovered the heart clenching beauty of yaoi and slash pairings. I think I started the game off the cuff of FFX/FFX-2 and anticipated a romance akin to Tidus and Yuna's. (can we say false advertising with Sophia's irrelevant ass being on the cover of the game with Fayt like she's legit - bitch, lol)
Anyway, I was mislead. In my ignorance I assumed Sophia was the closest thing to a love interest Fayt would have, which appalled me so I figured he was better off alone. However, my eyes have been opened to the deliciousness that is Alfay. On my first playthrough I don't think I ever even acquired Albel in my party permanently, so adventuring again and experiencing all the Albel-centric stuff is pretty fucking exciting.
In light of this adventure it only makes sense for me to fangirl with fanfiction, because what else am I but fanfic trash? I've just begun to scour the net in search of adequate stories, (and we all know finding truly good fanfiction can be like searching for a ruby in a pile of lum shit).
I found your story and binge read that bish, because YES, it is fabulous. You manage to capture both Albel and Fayt's characterizations perfectly - which I've found deficient in most other stories I've read thus far. I think you've managed to make Albel appear rude and indignant without appearing campy and overly indulgent with pettiness. He's also actually funny, and it makes sense to me for him to have a sarcastic, dark sense of humor.
The inclusion of the festival celebrating the dead in Surferio was brilliant and well woven within the plot - I could totally see that happening in their world, it had a perfectly whimsical and light presence, with an undercurrent of darkness - which is excellent for that environment/community. In fact, I found your ideas and characterizations to be so visceral that it's a damn shame there's not a direct sequel with this plot route in play.
The only real criticism I have is in regard to Maria's feelings for Cliff - to be honest, I found it on the contrived side, especially when she was talking about it in the cell when all hell is breaking loose. I kinda wanted to slap her but I thought she was well written beyond that.
You also positively slayed my soul with the latter portion of the story. Seeing Fayt unravel and appear so desperate, chile', why did you have stomp my heart out this way? T_T The whole time I'm like no, no, Fayt is a good boy, he is nobel to a fault, he would never have hurt those children.
And then when Laselle get's merced I'm still like, NOPE, he's been possessed by a devil in a cheap suit, it's not his fault! T_T And how Albel is conflicted and trying to remain unruffled despite how fucked up and hopeless things appear, MAN, this story had me raving to myself! LOL
I was really trying to insult the queen and errythang when she was talking to Maria. I'm just like, how dare ya'll, NOPE, it's not over!
So yeah, I absolutely look forward to an update, but won't hold it against you if you don't! (I swear on my daddy's grave that ALL the best fics end up dead in the water - I'm still lowkey waiting on a fic that hasn't been updated since 2009. T_T)
I thank you for writing such a passionate piece. It's going to be nestled in my brain for probably ever. _
| Lil Miss Morningstar chapter 21 . 3/17/2015
So I had a bit of a nostalgia trip of a weekend, and I found myself back into the Star Ocean section of ffdotnet since... damm... probably over five years. Anyway, after some browsing I found this lovely piece of work. Shame that it looks like it's been on standby for a while, but I figured I'd make some time to write a proper review.
At first, your little page breaks left me tripping, because half the time I had to read down and go back up again to check if it was still the same overall scene or if you changed scenes. Eventually I just forced myself to just go with the flow, even if a few more times later i did have to double back.
One wild guess of mine was that ffdotnet's formatting had been screwing with you at some point, and you just kept doing it like so for consistency's sake.
Now that I got that rant out of my system, oh the lovely bromance that had been going at the start. It was fun seeing Albel follow Fayt not-quite-so-reluctantly and even put up with some silliness from the old group's part. And then there's Peppita with her way-older-than-she-is wisdom. But the prize went to Albel hiding from Peppita's girly trips. Now *that* was a good laugh. Even big, bad Albel, can't bring himself to really harm a little pipsqueak, hehehehe. Or Fayt for that matter, no matter how much he says otherwise.
The next part that got the hooked on the story was all those flashbacks/visions that assaulted Fayt every so often. Granted a good part of these were a bit hard to discern because of the formating, since you liked to mix styles and it made it a bit difficult to tell what was vision and what was reality. And then when Fayt starts to sleepwalk, is when I really thought 'ohsnap-'. Add Fayt's powers going haywire, one smexy back-rub, all those mysterious murders, that fight in Sulferio where Fayt nearly lost it... dam good intrigue.
Another interesting part was your reasoning behind Aquaria's Queen's actions. In your story, she did not feel like the relatively weak-willed figurehead that she felt like (at least to me) in game. She knows that Fayt's group saved her kingdom from war with Airyglyph, and later the universe as a whole, but they did bring the wrath of the Vendeeni and several other problems with them. In a way she hates them for basically being used, but she can't do anything bad to them while they are still viewed as saviors. A lovely plot twist right there.
The other characters do feel like they are spot on. I must fully agree with Sophia being a clingy, hopeless fangirl (she grated on my nerves to bad in game). I had my doubts on Maria and her crush on Cliff for a bit, but in hindsight I can see it happening. I mean, who wouldn't have a crush if they were rescued by some good looking guy? Nel was a bit more of a workaholic with a dash of paranoia, but that could be due to the situation and the imminent betrayal. The rest of the gang was their oh so lovable selves. Excellent work.
Quick suggestion: if you ever go back and edit past chapters, maybe you can keep all flashbacks separate from the main storyline, and keep then in italics. And when a character is thinking on a given dream, the reference could be written with normal formatting, without going back and forth.
Anyway, if you do decide to pick this story back up, i'll see you then. Cheers.
| Jigoku Hikari chapter 21 . 9/13/2014
I have to tell you that I like this story very very much. I love the way it's written, the tone and voice. I like how the characters are kept IN character, and this is so very believable, like it could really HAPPEN in the SO universe. So you get a standing ovation from me, because of the awesomeness that is this fic.
And coming from a girl that is primarily all for Cliff/Albel, in this case I have been converted. I'm SO rooting for Albel/Fayt to FINALLY get together here.
I will patiently await the continuation of this lovely fic.
| R4m 0f Th3 F0r3st chapter 21 . 7/31/2014
Gaaaaaah i need mooooooore! Mooooore!
| Guest chapter 21 . 2/4/2014
I just went through and read through this story for old times sake. Still just as excellent as it was when I first read it. I really hope you update again someday!
| blackkyu chapter 21 . 12/17/2013
Heh, cant wait to see whats gonna happen next. It would really be a shoker if Sophia was quilty, but i doubt that. Anyhow, till next time!
| hihazuki chapter 21 . 11/19/2013
I've been going through my alerts and came across this fic again and read it all over again from scratch. It reminds me of how much I was infatuated with SO3, and with Albel/Fayt in particular. Reading this brought back some of the feels. I wish you'd update the rest of the chapters!
| Heartless Lotus chapter 20 . 6/21/2013
Oh my god...please update! This story is so captivating and I love everyone in your story (even though I usually hate Sophia, I love her in this story). I wanna see the end of this story, no matter if it's tragedy or happy ending. I wanna get mad at the queen, but as she said, she's from underdeveloped planet and she wouldn't understand the risk of Fayt's power.
I nearly cried when it's being revealed that Fayt is the killer. Nooooo- poor Fayt QAQ
And when his relationship with Albel is getting better too! *cried in the corner of the room*
I want to comfort Maria so much TTOTT
| Albel Venex chapter 20 . 4/8/2013
I just stumbled upon this story not so long ago and I just can't wait to see where it's going to go. It's such an original, interesting story; love it can't wait for the next update! :)
| rhf1229 chapter 20 . 3/26/2013
wow. im sooooo excited about where the story is going now, especially all of this stuff with the Queen! I really like how you've written her, it totally fits with her behavior in the game and her suspicions about off-world people. And where is she getting her information about "underdeveloped" planets? The plot is thickening! Thanks for continuing to update; I love this story! The plot is so original
| hihazuki chapter 20 . 3/7/2013
I'm glad you're still continuing this story! It had to take me awhile to read the previous chapters to remember what happened because it seemed so long ago that you last updated. Finally, Maria has the guts to tell him the truth! And Fayt, when is he going to be coherent again?
Looking forward to your next update!
| celina hamzeh chapter 1 . 1/26/2013
| rhf1229 chapter 19 . 12/20/2012
it's been a long time since I've had a chance to read this story, but holy crap! I re-read the entire thing in a couple of hours to get caught up. The way you write the characters is really incredible. Sophia, Maria, Cliff-everyone gets so much depth and background, not to mention Fayt and Albel. Fayt is so awesome in this story-strong, conflicted, and confused at the same time. I'm so glad you're updating this story, and I can't wait to read the next chap! :)
| PaganWanderer072 chapter 19 . 11/29/2012
yea new chapter! looking forward to the next one!
| hihazuki chapter 19 . 11/21/2012
I love how Albel would still behave rashly like he always does to everybody to Fayt. That smack on the head is epic. I wonder what would happen next.