|Reviews for What if|
| KireiHana1997 chapter 1 . 8/19/2010
This is seriously your first chapter? Three measly lines? This is hardly anything. Not only is it completely illogical that Kaiba would be like, "It's cool that you guys tried to kill me and take over my company on numerous occasions. Let bygones be bygones, right? Come work for me again!" but it's just so short and uninteresting that it doesn't draw the reader in and make them want to read more.
Instead of posting short 135 word chapters, wait until you've written a couple lengthy chapters before publishing the story. Make sure you have something interesting and tangible for the reader to grab on to. This seems more like a preview to a story, which is against the content guidelines.
Also, work on your spelling and grammar. You've got a couple mistakes in there.