that was good

Please more updates

Umm...so like-I think you need to like go back and read this story AGAIN! Half of the sentences do not make sense...like you've left words out, resulting in nothing but a lot of words on a page. Maybe you should like go buy a dictionary and learn to use it...like you really have no concept of the English language-like not capitalizing words, using the wrong homophone, and like using "like" way too much. Do I need to post what these big words mean so little kids like you can understand what I am saying?

please update

Kewl luv it I wanna no wat they did to dream boy!

All the best,

Guardian2Be

Your writing style is dry and boring. You keep /telling/ us what's going on, and not showing us. In the first seven paragraphs, you start with 'I' six times.

I ran towards and quickly got in.]

Got in what? The next paragraph clear that up a bit, but it was not previously stated that she was taking a shower. And, really, if she was going to be late to work/school/training, would Rose really take time for a ten minute shower? Seems pretty OOC.

Your grammar could be worse, but you don't know how to insert dialogue properly into a paragraph, or how to set it off with commas.

Other than that, not terribly bad. Cliche, yes. Boring, yes. OOC, very. It could be worse.

there I'm reviewing. pleeeeaaaaasssssseeeee kepp going

I can't wait for the nextt chapter! xx

this story is gr8t keep writing pleaz

Please update! I can't wait to see what they made Adrian do! xx

lol Rose is cruel! :D brill chapter! xx

lol Adrians reaction made me giggle :D I can't wait to read the rest; and thank you for adding True Love to your faves list! xx

Romantic and Dramatic, I like it, love it!

If I had dimitri in detention he woulndt have time to talk. I'd have him very very busy... with me... hhahaha

Ok, I'm sure whatever you have in store will send dimitri to the shrink. hahaha.