|Reviews for Just Beneath the Surface|
| AshWolf Forever chapter 45 . 2/8
Good luck Shembre Thanks for making my day!
| Zero Unit RGB chapter 45 . 2/5
I've always loved Kovu but I will accept his death like the immature adult I will become. And to prove that point, I shall go cry in the corner while munching on Popeyes' fried chicken.
This chapter was certainly exciting. I have to wonder about Chaka's thoughts and how and if he will change by the last/next chapter. If not, hopefully we'll see differences in his attitude in the epilogue. I'm also wondering about Kovu's next decision, siding with Council or son...Very difficult. On one hand, if he sides with Asuma, Asuma will either just agree with him or think that that was his father's way of saying he couldn't do it, like he never had faith in his son in the first place. But disagreeing will just seem like he doesn't even care for Asuma's feelings or he has a lot of faith so it can go many ways. Great stuff, can't wait to see what comes next.
| Emerald dreamer96 chapter 45 . 2/5
Well that was tragic. Them both dying does make it all seem so pointless and they aren't even done yet. I'm curious about Asuma and Kovu and how they interact. Not much to say really since death isn't quite the condition it used to be and this seems more a stepping stone to the real resolutions to their stories than anything else.
On a side note that scene with Kiara, Kovu and the babes was very sweet, hard to imagine that it all went so wrong later.
| readsmanyfavsfew chapter 45 . 2/5
Ah, the legacy of the progeny of Scar. Every one of his lineage was a snack for other creatures. Bit of dark humour I realized while reading.
So Kovu is dead. To be honest this wasn't that shocking to me, when Kovu said "I'll do it" last chapter I said aloud to myself "Whelp he's a goner". Not to say that it was a bad ending for his life. In retrospect I think it was one of the only ways his character development could be completed while remaining true to the story. Even if I was a big fan of team "Kovu Lives to the End". I guess I'll put the t-shirts and memorabilia for that ending away, sorted next to my superbowl broncos champions jerseys.
Well who knows, maybe the council can do some weird freaky jesus magic on Kovu too. (Re-reads the brutal scene of Chaka finding Kovu's dessicated corpse.) Actually, thinking about it, It's probably logistically for the best that he stays down...
Kovu's last words. "I wish I hadn't been so reckless. I'm sorry." They felt out of place until I realized he probably wasn't actually talking to Fola. And with more thought, they're rather a potent summary of Kovu in general. 10/10 This is one of the things I like about reading your stories, there's alot of analyzing and subtext to be gleamed by examining things more closely. Although that's fairly obvious given the title. Aaaand I'm pretty sure I've said the same thing in a past review, so now I'm just being redundant.
So now Kovu and Asuma are dead. The council of plot is demanding Asuma go back because plot, and Asuma is having none of it. It's kinda funny in a way. Asuma is so developed now as a character he isn't even going to obey the plot if it goes against what he'd do. And the inevitable climax with Asuma and Kovu is in the next chapter.
You really put quite a burden on yourself with this one didn't you? You've got 100,000 words of conflict coming down to one last conversation between father and son. I can't imagine the tremendous weight of writing even a single line of it. And to be honest, I can't really imagine what the outcome will be.
There are two major betrayals in Asuma's life. That of Kovu, and that of his pride.
Kovu's fairly obvious, but his pride is the other, equally depraved and sinister and somewhat hidden betrayal. Asuma was manipulated by everyone he knew in an effort to protect him. Rather than face a harsh reality with him, his family choose to manipulate, and pull strings with him in an effort to get him to turn out for the better. He always had his suspicions, so he grew up with a constant mistrust and it's kinda a no brainer that it would backfire like it did. Not to say that Tanga who was fooled by it wasn't just as equally betrayed, but it was kinda like a double whammy with asuma.
To me, it appears the council is essentially trying to manipulate him again. He's being forced against his will to go back and be the king that they want, and he's telling them "No, I'm done being manipulated. Not again, not ever." And to me, I wanna give asuma a standing ovation for really, truly standing up for what he wants now, and refusing to be manipulated again.
It'll be...interesting. To say to the least, what Kovu says to his son, and what the ultimate outcome of the story will be. I can't wait to read it. But I understand if you need to take your time.
| readsmanyfavsfew chapter 44 . 2/5
Late Review! My apologies!
Great chapter. Kovu's character arc is nearly completed by this act. It's undeniable and irrevocable proof that he is not the character he was when he was desperately seeking simba's trust like he was in the start of the story. He's come to peace that he might not have a happy ending, and he's embracing it while remaining true to his family. I foresaw this type of ending for him. Being a martyr. It doesn't villify him, but it's not a total redemption for him either. There's one glaring relationship that he needs to attend to, and that's asuma. I'll be honest and say I have already read the next chapter at the time of writing this review, so I know now that the inevitable talk between Kovu and Asuma is coming, and the final stages of Kovu's developement will be completed by how that discussion between the two come out. While I'm not usually a fan of afterlives, I do look forward to what will happen there.
| sue chapter 44 . 1/20
Well I just LOVED this fanfiction, one of the best I've read. I'm looking forward to the next chapter! :)
| tmh1022 chapter 44 . 1/18
Oh no...both Asuma and Kovu dead? Could it be? I hope not...
As stated, very intense and well-written! Looking forward to seeing how this epic story comes to an end! (I don't mean that pejoratively if it sorta sounds like that lol...)
| AshWolf Forever chapter 44 . 1/16
I love this story. Thank you for making my day.
| WTF123 chapter 14 . 1/16
I've gotta say, I was a little worried about the premise for this at first, but this is turning out a lot better than I had expected. The writing style is near flawless, so far not an error in sight. The pacing is getting good, all of the characters are, well, in character, and the tension... My God, this is nearing Alfred Hitchcock levels of suspense. In fact, if Hitchcock were alive today, and he was asked to write the next Lion King film, this is the sort of thing I would expect to see from him, especially when it comes to the murder cover up type of story he excelled at. And apparently you do too.
Damn, I can't wait to see how this turns out.
| Zero Unit RGB chapter 44 . 1/15
There is some good stuff in this chapter although reading that Kovu called the lionesses 'idiots' didn't seem to fit with such a tense situation. I am at a loss for words when it comes to Asuma, the fact that Mufasa meets him and tells him that this life for him is gone, I do not have a clue as to what to make of that. Nonetheless, a great chapter, I actually haven't read a fanfic in a long while so this is a nice change to my usual routine. Can't wait to see what happens next.
| Emerald dreamer96 chapter 44 . 1/15
Well this was a rather intense chapter in its own way. Poor Kovu but he's right in that there isn't really anything left for him now. Might as well go out fixing one of his mistakes.
| Emerald dreamer96 chapter 43 . 11/16/2013
Some definite changes amongst everyone, can't help but notice just how flawed and empty everyone seems to be at times. Somehow I doubt that there will be any quick fix happy ending.
Fola surprised me, especially at the end. More to her then I thought.
Looks like there is going to be a battle, hopefully it won't be in vain of course having Kovu be the rescuer will be *interesting* Not sure who would be more furious...or dangerous. Of course they might not react well to Chaka either.
Seems its the endgame. Brings just how massive and long running this story is you must be getting emotional.
| Zero Unit RGB chapter 43 . 11/15/2013
Wow, the story is really progressing now and we can see a little more of the real Fola which is a very nice touch. I think that not only the story, but the characters, have progressed and developed so far and it's truly an amazing thing to follow. It's a fantastic chapter and very well written. I feel that some parts were a little choppy but those can be easily overlooked. I was just watching X Factor USA and now I feel like I'm reviewing like one of the judges. Anyway, I love the chapter, great job, keep up the awesome work!
| Incarnate Firefly chapter 43 . 11/15/2013
Finally, Asuma's salvation is here! I was kinda hoping that Fola's fall from the tree would cripple her, but I guess that would've been an even easier death than Sauda's.
One common thread I've seen connecting all the characters in this chapter is the self-blame. The plot looks like it's reached that point where the main characters realize that nearly all of them hold part of the blame. Even though it's clearly left its mark on the youngest generation of lions (Asuma, Tanga, Natin), this is good because it will draw the resolution more easily when the time comes for acceptance.
To best honest, I'm not feeling profoundly interested in Iken, and I don't know if you're going to reveal him in this story. I wouldn't mind if you do though. All in all, great chapter! Looking forward to more!
| Kusa chapter 42 . 11/6/2013
Well, finally got around to reading the new chapters since last time and I'm eagerly looking foward to how this plays out.
Keep up the great work.