Reviews for Quiet In The Storm V1
Wolfone10 chapter 4 . 8/7/2016
Well I don't think sasuke fan-girls would have anything to worry about with the impromptu rectal exam, after all I'm sure his butt has had a LOT worse done during his three years with orochimaru! ROFL
Wolfone10 chapter 1 . 8/7/2016
If the hokage KNOWS the secret of shadow clones in this one, then HOW IS PAPERWORK such an enemy? I mean it becomes LAUGHABLY easy to do it and watch naruto 24/7 AND read his porn all at the same time! Actually 99.9% of these fics have paperwork being such a hassle... THEN WHY DO IT?.. Have a shadow clone do it, have an underling do it, have a monkey summon do it, or hell, burn it all and just tell everyone DENIED(after enough times even politicians GIVE UP).. ALL easy plans!

As for naruto and needing a new id? Not really, if your REALLY worried about civilians and retired ninja attacking him so bad? LOOSEN THE SEAL! Give the fox a chance to GIVE as good as naruto GETS! Attacks WILL STOP when the body count rises, if for no other reason then people won't wanna DIE! (garaa proves this, even in canon, the civilians don't DARE move against him).. very easy equasion, instead of being the village's punching bag, until he can "prove them wrong" (snort...yeah right).. You make him the village's TRUE TERROR until he can "prove them wrong".. you still keep MOST of the encounters the same with others from other villages, BUT instead of hate and disgust from the villagers you get TERROR and FEAR! BUT naruto working to "prove them wrong".. and that it was done to PROTECT him(which by itself can instill fear, because for the villagers, naruto was made this POWERFUL by their OWN HIGHER-UPS in order to protect the boy FROM THEM).
Guest chapter 3 . 5/27/2016
I love your story, but why can't he have more hair?
streetfihhtersabrina chapter 1 . 7/17/2015
I think this is quite better then your latter version, which is still good, I hope you can contuinue with this plot line, there is quite abit of potential if you open your mind, not trying to imply anything rude,
Blackbird89.1 chapter 8 . 4/17/2013
This is really great. Can you please update more.
readwritemanga chapter 2 . 10/20/2011
I hope you make Naruto un-bald
spoony285 chapter 8 . 2/11/2011
finish the wave arc. its interesting enough.
Zinnv chapter 8 . 2/6/2011
honestly, though i do like the idea of a narutoxfu with the mute thing thrown in there, i do agree with your story probably needing to be stopped and redone. the general idea is good but the story itself so far has been a bit clunky with how the plot has been delivered and you have not done the best job explaining different facets of the plot. like i said though i like the general premises of what your doing with the plot but it definitely needs to be fleshed out quite a bit more on just what exactly is happening. i wish you luck and good writing and i look forward to possibly seeing your new version of this in the near future.
Hyrulian Hero Akai chapter 8 . 2/4/2011
Making a whole chapter an authors note is against rules. Be careful in the future. At least do yourself a favor and finish up the wave arc so as not to leave on a cliffy for those who are following this story.

~Akai
The Master Fletcher chapter 8 . 2/2/2011
I personally think that u should just start the re write now, I can't wait to read it!
LS14 chapter 8 . 2/2/2011
everything you said sounds fine to me not as majore of a change that i thought it would be
Starfire99 chapter 3 . 2/2/2011
Alright, I'm confused. Naruto isn't supposed to be able to talk. It's the entire premise of the story, but you have him speaking to "Ayame" in this chapter.
Twilight- The Moon Spirit chapter 8 . 2/2/2011
Well it is understandable
InARealPickle chapter 3 . 2/2/2011
It was bad enough that you were trashing English grammar. At least it's your own language. But then you had to bring in Japanese and fail hard at that too.

First of all, of course everyone calls Iruka by his name! Iruka literally translates as dolphin. Saying that everyone calls Iruka, Iruka... well it's redundant.

"Morning, Sensei Iruka." - When you use a Japanese honorific such as sensei, you place it AFTER the person's name like this

Iruka-sensei

Now sensei is unique because it can also stand alone. However, if the students were just going to call him Sensei, they would not say his name as well.

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Now after his exam, your writing becomes a bit hard to follow. I have absolutely no clue why what happen did, or how a mute Naruto managed to summon and talk to an ANBU.
InARealPickle chapter 2 . 2/2/2011
What happened to Kakashi? o.O
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