|Reviews for Wandering Eyes, Following Hearts|
| MadameCissy chapter 1 . 10/29/2010
I loved every word of this. Mostly because it was so true to real life (well for me anyway) and every thought, every feeling people can/could experience when unexpectedly finding themselves in love.
I can see the attraction - it is almost as they are drawn to each other without quite knowing why. Marlene's behaviour shows she is scared, nervous but she also shows a great deal of persistance when she approaches Alice in the end. Well done.
| Pesky Ixy Pesternomi chapter 1 . 10/27/2010
I always find your Marlene/Alice stories interesting, possibly because I've never read femmslash before yours and don't really know much about it, but idk it kinda makes sense to me. So if nothing else, you're convincing, and that's the mark of a good author. :)
| TannaCarien870 chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
Odd paring, but well written! Good job!
| Jemennuie chapter 1 . 9/2/2010
This is an interesting pairing, and I think you did a really good job of characterizing the uncertainty when one isn't sure whether if someone likes them (or reciprocates the crush, in Marlene's case). Things like the first time Marlene looks at Alice and Alice thinks she must have something caught in her teeth, how Marlene does subtle things like stand in front in battle and Alice comes up with different explanations for it, how Marlene acts differently around Alice, all of those seemed really realistic and its an aspect of romance that's not covered very often in fics. I haven't read your other Alice/Marlene fic, so maybe that's where my upcoming piece of constructive criticism comes from, but I don't really get a sense of *why* Alice and Marlene like each other from this one-shot, and I also don't really get a sense of Alice and Marlene's distinct personalities, excluding the short description of Marlene being friendly and outgoing. However, I don't know if that was really supposed to be the focus of this fic, and I did think this was an interesting one-shot.
| Charlie'sDragon chapter 1 . 8/30/2010
Oooh I loved this. You inspired me to write my own Alice/Marlene fic, by the way.
Your descriptions and characterizations are always so good.
| icedintheveins chapter 1 . 8/29/2010
Wow. I am NOT a fan of slash in any form except for Gellert/Albus, but that was so well-written, so inspiring, and so touching I felt myself inwardly cheering when they finally kissed. It was truly amazing. :D
| xxx-angelin-xxx chapter 1 . 8/29/2010
This was really sweet. I liked the way you described their feelings and actions; beautifully witten;)
| Dream of Many Dreams chapter 1 . 8/28/2010
I like it! It was sweet and cute and romantic.
| Morghen chapter 1 . 8/28/2010
Wow, this was really great. I really liked how you led up to the kiss by having Alice notice Marlene looking at her more than normal; I found that it made their relationship more believable. The characterizations for both of them were great. Great job!