|Reviews for Team Frostbite: Mystery of Lava Crater|
| PikachuRulz chapter 4 . 3/16/2011
Please continue this story...
I want to see if Bade will tell Clarice! XD
| Simple Shimmers chapter 4 . 1/3/2011
Emi: Um...I have a question...
Alex: Well! tell the author!
Emi: O-okay...Is this story related to pokemon mystery dungen?
Alex: *pouts* Yeah I thought that too but I'm being polite and didn't say anything
Emi: *Sweat drop* Um...okay?...
Anyway if you played the game is it fun?
Alex: My, Emily you sure are apologetic today..
Emi: Uh...I guess...When you play mystery dungen what pokemon are you?
Alex: Your acting wierd...Emily your not very peppy
Emi: *Face palm* Okay anyway...geez i'm out of character today...
Alex: . UPDATE!
Emi: O.O...Alexa...your acting peppy today...
Alex: *giggle* Emily your acting like how I normaly act!
Emi: * big sweat drop* yeah...I guess?...Update..please
| lex chapter 4 . 11/27/2010
i like it a lot and cant wait for your newest chapter keep it up )
| TheFoxinator chapter 4 . 9/26/2010
Hi, babe! *waves* I'm reviewing, just like you asked me too! D
I want to say that I am very impressed. I haven't seen any of your writing in a while, (seriously, where are you hiding out these days? I miss you!) and you've definitely improved. That's not to say you were particularly bad or average before, but you've steered away from the blunt descriptions that we talked about and I do rather like the outcome.
I like your story so far. I think it's interesting and I feel like you're going somewhere with it.
Now, I'm also going to critique, because I know you can handle that. )
In your authors note on ch. 4, you say you plan to return to Bade's arrogant side, though he never came off as particularly arrogant to me. He simply seems quiet and sweet to his friends. Though, admittedly, when I think arrogant, I think Anakin Skywalker, and that's an awful lot of arrogance to live up too.
You have a lack of commas, which isn't really a big deal, just something I noticed.
And I would like to know HOW they preform a lot of the tasks you have them preforming. Such as using an oven or hugging. How do they do that with paws? Because I would love to teach my dogs such skills. )
| phantom5niper chapter 1 . 8/29/2010
great so far keep up the good work
| kyomaki-is-love chapter 1 . 8/28/2010
Well, I don't know much about Pokemon, but I do like it so far! :)
I like the names you chose for the Pokemon, and their meanings. And Demitrius would be from A Midsummer Night's Dream, right? Or am I mixing up my (very little) knowledge of Shakespeare?
Waiting patiently for the next chapter... :)
| zetroC Girl chapter 1 . 8/28/2010
Awww! I LOVE LOVE LOOOVEE frostbiteshipping! It's my Eeveelution OTP. X33
I hope you update this soon! I want to see what happens. I rarely see any Frostbite fics, and thhatvmakes me sad.. "OTL
oh oh, one thing you might want to rethink when writing in an Eeveelution's POV.. When referring to 'hands', you should write 'paws' instead. They DO closely resemble real-life creatures, after all..
Can't wait for the update! :)