|Reviews for Unsaid, Undone, Untouched|
| satomika chapter 1 . 5/15/2017
I wish they had kissed
| RunningForward chapter 1 . 12/28/2011
No more really needs to be said.
| MoonlitInuko chapter 1 . 5/23/2011
Thank you for writing this, it's well done and it definitely is what I think happened in the in between moments that we did not see, however...
I disagree with you that what happened at the end made their relationship meaningless. In fact I think the opposite. It may seem like the fact "Hiyono" was planted there by Kiyotaka and was an act would make it meaningless (which was the point), but instead of falling apart like most would in that situation they have held onto their relationship. Hiyono cried when they said goodbye the first time, to me that shows that despite the fact she was supposed to be acting, what she ended up feeling was real, and to me that makes the relationship mean something more than if she were simply a girl who got wrapped up in Ayumu's situation and started falling for him.
Regardless, I praise you for delving further than what the manga gave us. I loved reading it.
| bells-mannequin chapter 1 . 4/5/2011
really wonderful. I felt that way about Ayumu and Hiyono, too. Through the entire manga I was happy that there was this girl, Hiyono, who was neither strong nor intelligent, who believed in Ayumu, and who was so goddamn strong. And then, bang, this is not the truth anymore.
The way you describe Hiyono's feelings does those characters really some justice.
| KidTantei chapter 1 . 1/11/2011
OMG. That's so amazingly sweet! I love it :3 Your attempt is an awesome one, and totally surpassed the manga's way of ending their relationship. XD
| The Agent of Chaos chapter 1 . 11/13/2010
I agree with you! The manga ending is so weak! I really like the way you define their last interaction (). Loved it!
| Azalee chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
:') Very beautiful. Eyes is a very nice touch, Ayumu's influence over him is indeed palpable, and the end is simply sweet; sad but still hopeful. Well done!
| TruthSerum14 chapter 1 . 8/31/2010
I love your story. I felt like I almost was going to cry. I really loved it and I think your story does sound like the end of spiral, anyway, I love it! (:
| Drowning In Inspiration chapter 1 . 8/29/2010
It was really good, I hate Kiyotaka... This brought tears to my eyes. awesome job xxxx