Reviews for Pactio! Stand by, Ready
erica.phoenix16 chapter 10 . 1/15/2013
This looks good! :)
Nora Anak chapter 1 . 10/14/2012
Wait, I'm confused, does negi have amnesia or is he just pretending cuz if he does then how does he know about the pactio?
dopplerdee chapter 10 . 7/27/2012
Great story
attis89mackan chapter 10 . 4/9/2012
Good chapter:)

Negi got a device and he still need to stand on his staff to fly?
Taeniaea chapter 10 . 4/9/2012
cool story
Redmoon2 chapter 10 . 4/8/2012
Well, i gotta say the story went pretty so far. I am bit surprised that Negi a Device as well, but it least now negi can fly. I do hope that as this story progresses, other negima characters (protagonist/antagonist) such as Fate Averruncus, Asuna, Setsuna, etc will show up in this fiction later on. I also hope that Negi will get stronger as the story progresses. All in all, great story XD

I am looking forward to your next update for this story and I wish you luck on that!
M. Touhou Magicus chapter 9 . 3/15/2012
*Bows* I am glad that I am not being annoying.

Now then, time to continue where I left off.

-Review for Chapter 3-

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I see only one small problem that is worth noting here, however, the other reviews have already pointed it out. So, I’m sure you’re tired of hearing about this from everyone by now, but it is indeed the Magic Archery Series: Wind Arrows and not Light Arrows that can bind they‘re targets. However, I think they are only meant to restrain the targets movement more then anything. I doubt they can seal magic power; like Negi was trying to do with Jewel Seed, but this only speculation, I haven’t seen anything that says they can’t.

-Review for Chapter 4-

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["Sorry Asuna-san. I didn't mean it." Negi called reflexively] a perfect example of how instincts can override memory sometimes.

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Having Negi volunteer to help around the shop? That is definitely something he would do, after all he doesn’t want to feel like he’s not pulling his weight, even if he doesn’t remember who he is.

-Review for Chapter 5-

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[Seeing that tree and awoken another name in Negi's memory, The World Tree] If that triggered a memory, then shouldn’t the Axe of Lightning spell have triggered something too?

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["Oh my, you seem to be more than just a mere boy. Why don't you be smart and walk away from here before you get hurt from playing with things you don't understand.(Awkward)"] Why is awkward AFTER the end of this sentence, what’s awkward, Is it because Arf couldn’t sense that Negi could use magic before?

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[Negi upon hearing the other mage's name had clutched his right shoulder as a wave of nausea assaulted him.] I’m glad you decided to do this instead of having Negi get mad and attack Fate, because he doesn’t remember why he hates Averruncus (I‘ll refer to him by his surname to avoid confusion).

-Review for Chapter 6-

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I think you may be undermining Negi’s physical abilities a little, other then that, no problems.

-Review for Chapter 7-

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[The young mage from Whales] there is no ‘h’ in Wales.

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[She rushed the downed boy as she changed from her wolf form back to her human form. The boy was alive she noticed before grabbing the Jewel Seed and rushed next to Fate.] The way the first sentence is worded leads me to believe that Arf struck Negi while he was down, as if she was trying to kill him. For these two sentences to make sense together, it should be ‘she rushed to the downed boy’. Implying that Arf merely ran over to Negi to get the Jewel Seed, rather then hit him and then take the Seed from him.

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["Thanks Onii-chan, but I'll just watch for now."] shouldn’t that be Onee-chan?

That’s all for now, I'll post the reviews for the rest of chapters next time.

I look forward to the next chapter.

-M. Touhou Magicus
attis89mackan chapter 9 . 3/12/2012
Great fic:)
Kaizer23 chapter 9 . 3/11/2012
Well this chapter surely grabbed my attention despite what happened in the last chapter. Although now that you mentioned it here, will Negi actually be learning how to 'fly' (or at least, without his staff)?

Anyway, despite the long break and lack of updates, this has been one of the better chapters I've read. So keep it up!
Nfromnanofate chapter 9 . 3/10/2012
I go to and search for negima crossovers and what do i see, A new chapter of Pactio! Stand by, Ready! YES! Great chapter. though i always thought that negi and nanoha would atleast have the same magical energy, specially since both negi's parents are... not exactly normal in a sense. though it was a nice touch that negi can't fly Yet since he was the same at this point. though am sure that he atleast knows or is already practicing to perfect "Imperfactus Ensis Exsequens"(Sword of conviction-incomplete). Looking forward for the next Chapter D
Taeniaea chapter 9 . 3/10/2012
cool chapter
M. Touhou Magicus chapter 1 . 1/27/2012
A quick note before I start my Review for your story thus far;

When I leave a review, I will usually point out errors, such as spelling mistakes. I might also give advice from time to time.

Please do not be offended by this; I am merely trying to help when I do this.

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Review for Chapter 1:

Hmm… right after the Gate Incident, huh. This was a good place to start from, as it can open many possibilities for your story.

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[He had a white cloak covering most of his body] Actually, it’s supposed to be more of a tan color.

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Feel free to ignore me on this:

I think that the ‘Probationary Contract’ should NOT have actually yielded a card, because in this instance, the contract seemed like it was suppose to serve as a trigger to help Raising Heart awake Nanoha’s Magical Abilities more then anything.

Furthermore, you have yet to show us Nanoha’s Pactio Artifact is (in the latest chapters); I sincerely doubt Nanoha would get Raising Heart as her artifact.

My apologies if I’m missing something in the story.

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Am I saying the contract was a bad idea? No.

Am I saying that this part should be rewritten a little (so that it does not include the card)? Possibly.

Am I saying that Nanoha and Negi should attempt to make another Pactio later? … Maybe.

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Review for Chapter 2:

[Lyrical Magistra] If the “Magistra” is supposed to refer to the ‘servant’ of a Pactio Contract, the right word would be Ministra. However if you actually meant Magistra, which means ‘Mistress’; you may want to rewrite the last part in the previous Chapter, the way it is currently written leads me to believe that Negi was supposed to be the Magister (Master) and Nanoha was supposed to be the Ministra (Attendant).

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That’s all for now.

I look forward to your next chapter

-M. Touhou Magicus
Dragon God xxx chapter 8 . 1/15/2012
Boo! Negi lost! That sucks. Good chapter though.
Arc-Angel-Of-Fire chapter 8 . 1/15/2012
So beginning doesn't know magica erbea and is unable to be badass at all

Is this the beginning before or after they go to Wales

Because if its after than you are very seriously handicapping negi
Kaizer23 chapter 8 . 1/14/2012
Honestly, I thought that Negi would have won that battle, but then again...

Anyway, glad to see you updating your story. I'm just wondering how this Negi would develop when compared to the canon Negi. And as far as I can remember, time travels much slower where Negi is when compared to the magical world... would that mean, that his students would have already gathered together and begun looking for him?

Great job anyway, and update soon!
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