|Reviews for NaNoWriMo Warm ups|
| Blazichu chapter 1 . 8/31/2010
Poor Aph...she certainly does need more love.
There were a couple of lines that I had a hard time hearing the characters say, if that makes any sense; like the penultimate "I guess you could say that". Maybe I'm just being weird, but it seemed to detract from the ending, which, otherwise, was very strong.
The setup was nice, too; I smiled at Ratchet's attempt to fix the computer, and Aphelion's solution. My inner friendship hound was giggling away at "Clank always managed to calm him down, no matter what." By the way, I loved the way you phrased that. It seems a little plain, at first, but it's a simple way to describe a simple phenomena, and fits well.
If this is just a warmup, I'd love to see what else you've got in store!
| ITman496 chapter 1 . 8/30/2010
Yes, Aphie needs lots of love DX
You did a good job though. 3