Reviews for He Came, He Saw, He Went
blameless nameless chapter 1 . 2/21/2011
This was a lovely take on the Lucius/Lily pairing and I enjoyed how you mapped out their little half-romance throughout the years. Also, it was interesting to see how you used the prompt and song.

Thank you for the good read!
Giraffe Dinosaur chapter 1 . 1/15/2011
How quaint. I find myself suddenly shipping Lucius/Lily.
controlled climb chapter 1 . 9/24/2010
Now I know why you like Lucius so much! He's so yummy in this... /nomnom

I love how you've showed pretty much the whole relationship between the two, without going on and on and on and on... xD His opinions on Mudbloods is so sad though :c And you know... his heart being broken and all that xD

"She was the perfect experiment."

ASDFFFF. I love that line. I don't even know why / It's just all like POP to me xD

Yet another fantastic story, m'dear. Looking forward to reading more
Morghen chapter 1 . 9/24/2010
Oh, I can't believe that I actually felt bad for Lucius when he saw Lily getting her dress.

:P

I really liked this. I could see Lily kinda baiting him in even though she didn't really love him. I liked how feisty she was in this! Most first years would be nervous around Lucius and she didn't seem to care too much - it was great. I LOVED the little Sirius liking Lily mention! Great job!

:D

-Morghen
over-rehearsed chapter 1 . 9/15/2010
Mew, daaaaarn girl, you've got talent...

D

Finally finishing judging... ;)

SPELLING AND GRAMMAR: 5/5

It's actually really good grammar D

CREATIVITY: 5/5

I loved it. And never would have thought of it D

BELIEVABLILITY: 3.5/5

I just thought that Lily was a little young at the beginning for that. However, I know the restraints, what with Lily being 5 years younger?

FLOW: 5/5

I thought it flowed well, what more is there to say?

USE OF PROMPTS: 4.5/5

I could definitely tell when you used them, and that's all it is, really. Except the song... it was a little hard... I couldn't tell at the time, but now I can when I look back.

OVERALL: 4/5

D Brilliant job, love.

27/30

D
WhiteFerrets chapter 1 . 9/5/2010
Sp&G: 5/5

Creativity: 5/5

Believability: 4/5

Flow: 4/5

Use of prompts: 4/5

Overall: 4/5

Total: 26/30

Another great fic here, it's excellent. I noticed one grammatical error, which isn't enough to drop a mark, so that's awesome. This piece is imaginative and a really interesting take on Lily/Lucius. A lot of the time, they're just a "rebelling" pairing, but I love how you made it so much more, so much deeper, than that. I love how you show the progression of the relationship, too, starting at curiousity and evolving into "liking", evaporating into nothing. It's really realistic.

Your use of the song was really subtle, perhaps a little too subtle, but I love your use of "truth". Overall, I enjoyed it a lot, and you've done a great job.

Thank you so much for participating. We should have the results up within the next few days.
xxx-angelin-xxx chapter 1 . 9/4/2010
This was so unexpected. Yet I really liked how you tried to keep it canon.

Best line: "There were two truths. He'd loved Lily. But she hadn't loved him."

I liked how you had him and Lily friends. How at first she was an experiment but then he started to really care for her. And how all these include her relationship with both James and Snape.

Lovely fic:)