|Reviews for There|
| arianakaylani chapter 1 . 10/29/2010
| Ouch Charlie chapter 1 . 10/27/2010
Wow, I could imagine how hard it would be on Liliana just from this, good job!
| Written Sparks chapter 1 . 9/19/2010
This is a good idea but I think a little more description would help flesh it out. Keep writing!
| VaneBEAR chapter 1 . 9/13/2010
Awee! So sad:( Poor Sirius, and little Lilliana.
| The Fourth Black Sister chapter 1 . 9/12/2010
Wow that was very well written. I look forward to reading more with this character. Great job! :D
| lilylou101 chapter 1 . 9/11/2010
Aren't you going to continue this? Its really interesting! Although Lily seemed a bit older than five..:) Great job though!
| beedivine chapter 1 . 9/8/2010
Aw poor Sirius, and, well, poor Liliana, too. (And Yay for the name Liliana, it's always been one of my favorites. ;) ) I think the whole storyline is very intriguing and original. Nice job.
I am curious though, who is Liliana's mom? Just some random person, or a character we know from the books?
| hiddlestons chapter 1 . 9/6/2010
I like your plot, but you tend to switch between past tense and present tense, and it gets a bit confusing. Also, try to work on describing the setting along with other things a bit more. Other than that, nicely done!
| alieboo chapter 1 . 9/3/2010
Awesome! You should do another one becuause i like the way you put it!