Reviews for Close Your Eyes, Open Your Heart
grapejuice101 chapter 15 . 7/21/2013
Yay I'm so glad u updated. I want more chaps asap plz
grapejuice101 chapter 14 . 6/28/2013
OMG I'm so glad you're back. I missed the story. Update ASAP please
Asutorido chapter 13 . 5/26/2013
So im like soraT.T and then im like Go Roxy :D
Akizakura202 chapter 13 . 2/9/2013
In my opinion, the RokuRei relationship was well-written :) Although I'm a SoRei fan, I enjoyed it nevertheless. I really want to write a RikuHiki moment now TT I like how Donald tried to sell the glass sphere XD I'm actually surprised he didn't try that in-game... But then, maybe he just recognized it wasn't worth much, or it's so sparkly he wanted it for himself... Could go either way.

That said, some parts could've done with just a touch more embellishment. I had to read the part where Reina saw Donald a few times - maybe you should've painted more of a picture of Donald at the stand before going on XD But other than that - good.
Akizakura202 chapter 12 . 12/27/2012
Not a bad chapter. I noticed a myriad of fragments, though, typically in relation to dialogue. These are common errors, though, and I can address them in the PM, if you'd like. I'm on my phone, now, do I intend to keep this short and sweet for now.

Admittedly, I forgot a couple things from before, but based on what I remember, the Heartless Yuuta may perhaps be Reina's father?

I'm a tad skeptical of Sora's feelings regarding his past Heartlessness. Maybe it could've been written slightly differently, but Sora didn't lose his head in the first Kingdom Hearts, this due to Kairi. He knows the feeling of loneliness, but I don't think he could fully appreciate the feeling of losing himself.

...If I had anything else to add, I can't recall at this time XD Looking forward to the next one.
accountdeactivated1234567890 chapter 11 . 7/30/2012
First off, words used to this chapter can be understood easily by readers. The description of persons, places, events and things were also good. The reader can imagine easily what the person, place, events or things look like. It's actually really great. You're actually good at describing stuffs! Also, less errors. But, you might want to avoid using the word 'anyways' because there is no word as 'anyways'. It should be 'anyway'. But, that's minor stuff but you still need to improve on that. Also, Auron's sword is called a Bushido sword. Katana is different from a Bushido Sword and I think Auron is a Bushido himself. Anyway, love this chapter. I enjoyed reading it because grammar and sentence structures were all correct. Also, you did not really pattern the original story of the game. You even added the Farplane from FFX and FFX-2. It makes the story not boring and anticipating. Keep up on that! Overall, you're actually a very good writer! I hope to learn from you someday! Looking forward for the next chapter! :DD
Akizakura202 chapter 11 . 7/29/2012
Very well-written chapter I liked the little spices you added in, especially with the conversations. I feel you captured Hades rather well. The chapter doesn't feel rushed at all.

Ah, the Farplane. That threw me off for a sec, sad enough XD Thought it was an accident until I realized you were describing pyreflies, not the Underworld souls earlier. I think it'll be a good incorporation, and I have an idea as to how you'll put it to use. I look forward to it.

Poor Sora.

The flashback... I wonder if that was a bewared "It's you!" or an excited "It's you!"?
accountdeactivated1234567890 chapter 10 . 6/29/2012
Love this chapter! The progress of the story is not that fast which is really good. Great improvements in the grammar though there are still some errors in the sentence structure but I can only notice a few. All I can say is great job on this chapter. Ideas were so fantastic that I can't even add a suggestion to the story anymore because everything is in there. Keep up the good work. Looking forward for the next chapter. :))
Akizakura202 chapter 9 . 6/3/2012
Yo :) I don't think Reina's past is becoming too confusing... She was friends with Roxas and Axel in the Organization, somehow lost her memories and ended up with Roxas in the simulated Twilight Town, and something's up with her father! Is he an OC or are you hinting at him being a Kingdom Hearts character O.o? 'Cause my mind's a-calculatin'...

I am questioning Riku's motive a little, now. He needed Roxas to merge with Sora so he would wake... but Sora woke and doesn't appear worse for the wear despite TECHNICALLY being incomplete. Now, if Anti-Form had presented itself already and Riku noted this, if Anti-Form were linked to Roxas' being outside... then I could see it. It would depend on your take on Anti-Form, ne? (P.S., it kinda is personal for DiZ... he intended to use Sora as an instrument for his revenge against the Organization XD)

Keep in mind that Namine has Kairi's face. He showed her mercy in KHII - hence, the fact that she's still around and not destroyed - so I think he has a little bit of a soft spot for her. Remember how he treated Xion, despite she being a reason for Sora's continued slumber? He was pretty gentle with her, pretty much let her choose. Namine also helped Riku recognize he could use both light and dark to his advantage - under the guise of Kairi - and even offered to put a lock on his heart to contain Xehanort's Heartless's influence. She was SUPPOSED to be righting the wrong she did to Sora, but it appears she may for some reason be going back on it. Why? What would make her betray her hero, the one who saved her from Marluxia? Riku would want to know these things. Food for thought.

Maybe I missed it... but what exactly are these responsibilities of the wielder of the Heartseeker? XD

Any-who! Enjoyable as always. Look forward to reading more :)
accountdeactivated1234567890 chapter 9 . 6/3/2012
I got surprised when Queen Minnie suddenly said that Reina looks like her father. I had a speculation that before Reina joined the organization, his father was once a Keyblade wielder and traveled the worlds. Reina might have joined the organization because may be she lost her heart when she lost her father. But, I think Reina is not a nobody; she just lost her heart. Well, that's MY prediction. Haha. :))
Akizakura202 chapter 8 . 5/18/2012
I was always a fan of SoraXReina, so thumbs up! :D

Not a bad chapter. Truthfully, I'm not so sure I see Sora so much as "being in denial" about his feeligns for Reina so much as he's so dense he wouldn't notice it. He's a naturally amiable individual, who makes friends with practically everyone-to have affectionate feelings for her wouldn't be totally outlandish. He's so innocent like that! ** He may notice that the feelings are a bit "special," though, eventually. Maybe a... "I don't really know what this feeling is... but I like it."
heartarrow56 chapter 8 . 5/13/2012
Good chapters! (7 and 8) Mulan was able to succeed in restoring her honor! Sora and Reina were cute together, but I'll have to see how this progresses to make a definate opinion. Well, update soon! o
heartarrow56 chapter 1 . 5/5/2012
I could tell that the plotline is different. I liked how Reina and Roxas's meetup with Axel went. I think that it would do some good if Reina had some flaws that are apparent and some we have to put two and two together to get. Just don't make it too obvious. I have no idea what her connection could be with Axel. I can't wait to see what's next. Update soon! o
Akizakura202 chapter 7 . 5/5/2012
Finally, haha XD If not for the recap, I might've needed to reread a bit.

Not a bad chapter. A little confusing at times... Some words were missing in certain sentences and were misplaced... The first paragraph, honestly, I'm still trying to make total sense of XD That really is the only way you went wrong-all else, not too shabby.

I do appreciate the devling into Mulan a little. A little taste can go such a long way

I find it interesting that Reina was part of the Organization before. I'm curious on how she came to be a part of it (was it willingly, and if so, why) and why she is not a part of it anymore. If DiZ and Riku had a hand to play in it, why? And... why is Roxas still running around again XD?
heartarrow56 chapter 6 . 9/4/2011
this story is good! i cant wait to see the next chapter! update soon! Bye Mee! o
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