Heh! A good story going on so far. Voices, oh voices.

Feels like this story was rushed from the original, but I never played the original game, so yeah. :P

You're welcome! And wow, an update so soon! Always a good thing I can't wait to find out what the dealio is with Roxas, Axel, and everyone. Seems we get to find out much sooner in the rewrite :D

Not bad. Some parts were getting a wee bit dull. You know, since this is a story, you don't have to include every single trial from the game XD The boss fights and scripted battles are all well and good-but stuff like lighting the lanterns? Only included in the game really to keep you busy. . . . Just sayin'. As always, Sora and Reina are adorable. It'd be totally awesome if you could update in a timely manner, but I'm sure readers understand. Good luck!

*le gasp* An update! Finally XD And not too shabby of an update either. Sora and Reina always tend to make me smile, they're a cute coupling. Still wonder how Axel, Demyx, and Roxas know Reina . . . though it seems the entire Organization may know her. Former member, perhaps? (Rhetorical question, does not need to be answered XP) Anyway, looking forward to more.

Not a terrible chapter, but not exactly an awesome one either. Then again, we're still in the introduction part, kinda, and that's blah... When I come to it I'm even considering skipping Yen Sid XD But anyway, yay you finally posted! It's been long enough I'm not sure totally what's gone on... Maybe you should put a short recap at the beginning, a small summary to remind peeps of what's gone on.

Ahhh! xD! Soooo amazing!
It wasnt rushed...well..kinda...BUT STILL! It was awesome!
Blah! Homework... .V.
Anyway, loved it!

Awesome chapter! _

Oh my gosh! Its amazing! I love this so muchhhh! Please update soon! I love this ten times better then the orignal(It was good too) But please hurry and make the next chapter! I cant wait XD

Well, there are a myriad of mistakes in this chapter XD Most prevalent were mistakes like this one: "'No, sorry.' She said." The correct version of this is: "'No, sorry,' she said." Since you have this correct at some points, I assume they are simply mistakes missed in revision or there was no revision at all, so I won't explain why.

There were random words missing, too, I think.

Aside from the errors, not too bad. Had to skim the preceding chapter to remember the changes though XD

Nice job xD! I giggled when Reina and Olette were bickering about Reina's love life :P! It was funny.

I'll be waiting for more!

i love this! i think its alittle better than the origanal but still its amazing! it was bearly one chapter but still its better than the old one! i love ya!

Even more mysterious than the first one! XD I love it though. Sorry I can't leave a longer review, but it's definitely an improvement :) I see you're doing first-person for the memories and dreams while the rest is third? I was considering doing that for WDTL myself XD

Ummm only thing I can think of at the moment that should be noted is that numbers under a hundred tend to be written out in word format instead of numerals... I believe you used "15."

Hello there I'm not signed in right now haha too lazy. I've read

Your other story too and i wanted to wait until u finished the rewrite of chapter one

you're new story does explain it much better keep it up with Rosas's point of view I've ways wondered what he was thinking during the part where he was supposed to disappear

On and can you explain to me how you used the break lines in between parts? The lines I use aren't working for me anymore when I try to separate the story from the disclaimer please update soon!

-BrooklynHiggans63

Great rewrite! Can't wait for more!