|Reviews for Diner Man|
| Born in 20th Century chapter 1 . 2/12
Thank you for sharing this beautifully unique and amazing oneshot; it would be brilliant if you could write a longer Scorpius and Rose fic! :D
| Everlasting123 chapter 1 . 10/19/2012
it was so cool even thought they were human, so sad but simmply adorable
| Darren's Wings chapter 1 . 10/6/2012
kjnsd AWWW. This is adorable!
Heya, remember meeee? How are you, girl?
Writing just as lovely as ever! This was great.
| weasleyjumper chapter 1 . 8/13/2012
I'm a tiny bit confused about what time this is set in and which war this is, but otherwise, I think this really amazing, and one of the best fanfictions i've ever read. I read itr before but I forgot to review, seriously beautiful writing.
| jhgfyt chapter 1 . 7/21/2012
This is an amazing AU. I can imagine this being set in the 1920s with the war being WWI. You write such imagery and descr pire (I know that's not a word) that I was pulled in and it was like watching a movie.
| Airiblu chapter 1 . 1/25/2012
This definitely deserves more reviews. It was great, a really creative AU. Loved!
| Paper Pearls chapter 1 . 2/4/2011
You have a phenomenal writing style. There was an extraordinary atmosphere to this story, and the influence of all of those black and white movies could be felt throughout the story. Your descriptive language was beautiful too:
"Her accent is cultured, refined but there's a hint of something in the undercurrent that tugs at the edges of Scorpius' memory, calling out to him."
The idea that Scorpius would feel drawn to Rose despite not being aware of her identity made the bond between them seem all the more incredible, and it showed the strength of the feelings he must have had for her. Although I've never been a fan of this pairing, you made me feel as though there was something inherently right about the idea of them being together. Well done, because many, many authors have failed where you succeeded.
I think that you captured the spirit of romance very well indeed:
"That night however, finds him dreaming of a rich, velvety voice and long, auburn hair."
The image you created was so warm and enchanting that it seemed like the most natural thing in the world for Scorpius to love Rose, and it felt as though I was being taken through his dream too. Your word choice was exquisite throughout the story, and I think that the manner in which Rose made it into his thoughts in such a profound way was very fitting. There was a constant build up to the climax of the story, and so it didn't feel rushed at all.
Now on to criticism. Something that bothers me is the way that the Potterverse has been... well, Americanised in this story. The series is quintessentially British, and with all of this talk of dollars and diners, I felt that something was eroded. The idea of Scorpius Malfoy, Lucius' grandson, working in a diner was initially ludicrous, however the quality of your writing managed to dull my initial shock. To a certain extent, you dealt with the war you created fairly well. Unfortunately, I was left with a few questions: Why did the war begin? Why has Scorpius moved? Why didn't Rose want to fight too? After all, her mother did. Why are they in America at all?
"My father wanted to leave; he wanted to get away from the village, away from the memories of Hugo and go back to his childhood town."
Ron grew up in Ottery St. Catchpole. It's a town in Devon, England.
Nevertheless, I cannot stress to you enough how beautiful your writing style is. It's quirky, elegant and has a wonderfully measured pace. I particularly liked the way you described Hermione's grief:
"I used to hear her crying late at night when she thought the rest of us were all sleeping."
This was perhaps the most realistic thing about your story. You described Hermione's selflessness, the way she supported Ron, and also the maternal love of a child was perfect. I felt a great deal of sympathy for her, as your description of loss was incredibly moving.
Overall, it was a brilliant story and your talent with words was clear from the opening line that. Good job!
| Principi Phantasia chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
This is very touching!
I cried in the beginning, I so could feel the pain that Scorpius felt, being left with no explanations. :(
And then when they finally met, Rose completely ignored him and acted as if she didn't know him.. That is so sad! :'(
But then everything was explained, and I was so worried that it would have a sad ending, but I'm so glad it didn't!
This story is so unexpected.. I can never imagine either Rose or Scorpius ending up with those kinds of occupations :P
But this is a lovely story, beautiful and well written!
Totally one of my favorites :)
| whatabeautifulmess chapter 1 . 1/24/2011
Bless them! I do love RoseScorpius, and the AU setting makes this fic original and totally charming. You captured the characters do completely and described them so vividly that I can hear their voices clear as a bell (they alternate between cockney and Deep South America - which were you aiming for , or was it something else entirely?)
| kingslayers chapter 1 . 1/18/2011
| Hikoru Aniki chapter 1 . 12/1/2010
Very cute! Usually AUs just seem odd to me, but this really worked well with the characters. This was very well written, nice job.
| xXxtellmewhyxXx chapter 1 . 11/7/2010
aww cute. at the beginning i had the first scene of Taylor Swift's "mine" video playing in my head. ya know, when she walks into the diner/cafe and they meet for the first time. haha ]
| Penelope Fiction chapter 1 . 10/16/2010
Very sweet. I love Rose and Scorpius fics. Great detail and description too.
| greencyanide chapter 1 . 10/14/2010
thought i am all for Lily/Scorpius, this was a nice read. it's nice to see some really good fics about the Next-Gen, and all the emotions were in place. good job
| thenewkait chapter 1 . 10/14/2010
Amazing story. I loved it! I even started to cry a bit. Very good!