|Reviews for The Six Phantoms|
| Doni chapter 12 . 8/12/2012
Dark, but handled well. Nicely done.
| don'tlikehugs18 chapter 12 . 7/17/2012
I really enjoyed reading this. It felt more like a short story than fanfiction.
| spinner12 chapter 12 . 2/22/2012
I liked this story. You did a good job on it.
| spinner12 chapter 8 . 2/22/2012
Very compelling to this point. I like how you interwove the plots of the different mysteries.
| spinner12 chapter 7 . 2/22/2012
I'm glad you rated it M. Not terribly graphic so far, but definitely disturbing to consider.
| spinner12 chapter 6 . 2/22/2012
'Sherlock, right now I can't make you go away!'
John is so cute.
'Didn't he die at the swimming pool when Sherlock did?'
I must have missed something here. Later you say he was dead, so I'll assume it was a Fall sort of scenario hinted at in the first lines of the story.
| spinner12 chapter 1 . 2/22/2012
'and I'm currently seven months pregnant.' Oh, what a picture!
| Anon chapter 12 . 1/25/2012
I enjoyed this story. Nice to find something that was fairly close to canon, rather than all the fluffy slash fic that's about. The dialogue was pretty much in character and I liked the story about the sister. If I had to suggest an improvement, I'd say I would've drawn out the confrontation with Moriarty. Maybe had him capture Sherlock, John or maybe Minerva and rebuild to another climax. Thanks for the good read.
| lochrann chapter 12 . 12/15/2010
Really good story. Although the darkness and content was quite disturbing it also made scence and was written in a sensative and fitting way, so well done there. I also really like the idea of the Moriarties Sherlock meet beeing basically puppets. Very good read!
| ghostbeach chapter 12 . 10/9/2010
this was really good! I loved the story line and the mystery involved...It did wrap up a bit fast but whatever the cuteness at the end makes up for it... it was well written and I like Sherlock and John's relationship!
| paper.creations chapter 12 . 9/17/2010
Marvelous ending! I loved when Dimmock and Lestrade were fighting over who got to go with Sherlock to the uncle's house. It was adorable.
The whole case was brilliantly put together, I quite enjoyed watching where it went. And a different Moriarty, very interesting. And I loved Minerva as a character.
| Agent ERA chapter 12 . 9/17/2010
Loved it! Wonderful ending. Perfect characterization.
| Cacodaemonia chapter 12 . 9/17/2010
Oh man. Yes, very dark, but also very, very good! The ranges of emotions you put the characters through was really a joy to read, and as I said in a previous review, the plot had me biting my nails. Fantastic. :)
| Saturn-Jupiter chapter 12 . 9/17/2010
It's a tragic, tragic thing. I'm broken inside. I spent ten minutes writing a review and then when I clicked 'submit' it didn't. I didn't save it and I can't remember word for word what I wrote. I spent about a minute wailing at my computer for having inflicted this terrible suffering upon me. I had 4000 characters left. Having used 6000 to review. I guess I'll just have to see if I can do better to annoy Fanfiction because it annoyed me.
Right so, I'll work through each chapter individually, which is the largest reason why this is the largest review I have ever written in my life outside, perhaps, of my GCSE coursework and even then, I'm beginning to doubt that claim quite severely. So, Chapter Nine. Several things struck me about this chapter, and each of them are beautiful.
Firstly, the little conversation about passwords. It struck me as being humourous and very believable. It seems perfectly plausible in my head that Sherlock should express a sense of relief that he can finally lecture John about his poor security safeguards against bad, bad things like identity fraud. Sherlock's ability to hold this conversation whilst continuing to focus on Joanna is, similarly a very nice little detail that I greatly appreciated reading. Sherlock doesn't multi-task. He multi-thinks. Genius.
Secondly, and I'm not quite sure why I like it so much, the 'Click' that breaks up most of the paragraphs in this chapter really strikes me. Partly because it's so simple. It's one lone little word, occasionally repeated and yet it adds so much tension towards the end when we're, as readers, beginning to link up the pieces that I'm quite proud I guessed at in the chapter before. I suppose it's effective because it's onomateopoeic but there seems to be alot more to it than just that. It links back to the texts that appear on screen in the Tv series, to an extent, and I can't quite explain why I like it but I can repeat once again that the tension it creates is wonderfully unique.
Next, the confirmation of my worst fears for poor little Joanna. Even though I saw it coming, their reactions caught me completely off-guard. Dimmock's vicious attack of the computer's power and John's inability to even look at the screen is wonderfully powerful. Their reactions make this scene more powerful than describing the photos ever could. In fact, leaving the photos undescribed makes the entire chapter a million times more effective. Sherlock's reaction is perhaps the best of the lot. It plays up the fact that he is both human and inhuman. His face is turned 'ugly by rage' - an image which is frankly superb, I absolutely love it and will probably use it myself at some point in the future - and yet he can continue looking at the screen. His reaction is perfectly human but his ability to continue looking is precisely the opposite. Wonderful.
Sherlock's inability to work out why it is wrong, and John's ability to know precisely why is brilliant and it plays up the tension for the oncoming reveal that, surprise, surprise, there is some very illegal child pornography going on, or at least, something going along those lines, your vagueness is superb for playing with the reader's thought processes in this chapter.
The slight 'strangled' tone of Sherlock's voice and the reactions are beautifully and delicately written, they make up perfectly for the lack of specificity as to whether it is exactly what I have proposed in the previous paragraph. The entry of Mycroft into the end of this story is sudden and intriguing, had you not uploaded the succeeding chapter virtually straight away, I'd go on a small rant about what an amazing cliffhanger it presents. Being as I'm already pushing the character limit to ridiculous levels, I'll just hopalong to Chapter 10.
Mycroft's character here seems right, even though his behaviour is unprecedented, having not even been hinted at in any other form of Sherlockian media. It does just seem right. His thanks for John is the offer of money; he clearly does not understand that John is happy to follow the convention of 'helping a friend' and not expecting any thanks. Mycroft is a wonderful character to explore and here I think you've really done his character justice. His slight concern and panic and discomfort with thanks, they're all wonderful little details. All the while, his language continually plays this matter-of-factly man whom we are all familiar with. The combination is amazing and I'd be more than happy to see some more Mycroft development on this site in the future.
Now, the interview. Dear Lord, the interview. Sherlock's reactions are pure goldeny gold. Never before have I read this and thought, 'my God, I would genuinely pay money to see that in the series'. His rage and anger and explosion of violence seems, at a first glance, to be wholesomely out of character. However, a quick glance to the original short stories, more specifically Charles Augustus Milverton (not sure if I've got the name entirely right, but it's something like that), and we can suddenly see the outburst of violence and anger as being very Sherlock Holmes-y behaviour indeed. And it is worth remembering the gravity of the crime he's dealing with. He's used to dealing with murder, child abuse is another thing entirely, and it's very obvious that he is neither comfortable nor happy with letting patience and logic rule over his emotions in this case. Again, golden golden moment, that little bit.
And poor Dimmock, I really must devote a small word of praise to his rejection. It's a wonderful, wonderful thing and my heart really does bleed for him. At least, it did until I read shiny new Chapter 11. Entitled Moriarty, I was immediately under the suspicion that at some point, Moriarty would appear in the Chapter. Infallable genius at work there, methinks. :)
Anyway, so yes, the first bit, before Moriarty's entrance is wonderfully tense and horrific despite the lack of description that you'd normally expect to see for that level of tension. You must be praised for that alone really, but the review is virtually all praise so I'll continue. Sherlock and John's shock is simply fabulous and it was heart-wrenching to read the beginning of this chapter, I'm sure I felt a bit of my heart fall off and bleed for the poor Joanna. You'll be happy to know that it actually didn't, if only because it means that I was alive when writing this and not a zombie.
Returning to sanity once more, I must say that, though the taunting quips and fight scene and disarming are amazingly gripping and enticing and real 'on the edge of my chair' material, the whole thing felt a little anticlimactic. I felt as though there should have been more taunting or more description or something to make that bit a little bit more meaty, something for readers to really, really bite into, because, for all of its wonderfulness, it didn't feel as though there were enough of it. But then again, us reviewers are always shouting cries of 'more, more, more!' So, I wouldn't worry about it, it was still one of the best climaxes I've ever read on this site, in fact, it beats the climaxes of a few of the books I've read so, no worries there really.
And I must say, I absolutely must say that Sherlock's snap of 'I'd like to see you try!' is so mindboggingly powerful that I'm still reeling from the words. There's nothing particularly special about what he said, it's a pretty run of the mill threat really, but there's something about the 'snarled' that makes it seem so vindictive and angry and hateful. It reads like a lion roaring or a vicious animal hissing, snarling, growling. It's a powerful, powerful line and it bugs me that I can't work out precisely why. It is a wonderful, wonderful thing, that line and it really does provide the perfect ending for that scene. While I'm mentioning the ending, I liked Moriarty getting shot. I'm usually opposed to all violence but a shot to the knee won't kill him and he really is a very unpleasent person so, I'm quite happy with that result. :)
The epilogue is fantastic. It's nice to return to the little quips and witty remarks that made the beginning so wonderful to read. The story comes full circle and the conversation about parenting is comedy gold, particularly as, because of the awkwardness of the conversation, they resolve to get a cab, as though that will solve the problem completely. Superb.
I loved reading this story and even reviewing it was a pleasure. I'll be more than happy to read your future works and I must thank you once again for an amazing story. The entire thing is a wonderful piece of writing and it was enough to make me review twice (as the first once didn't send).
Thank you once again,
| YoNoSoy chapter 12 . 9/17/2010
Ooooh! The last chapters were so exciting! :) Glad they found the girl. And the whole conversation in the end was nice. Yes, John would probably be a good father. :) This new Moriarty is intriguing. It would be nice if you wrote more fics, this one was very dark, but entertaining and interesting to read. :) Thanks for sharing.