|Reviews for Gardevoir protects me from everything|
| goldman is shiny chapter 1 . 12/3/2013
looks at gardevoir ...(Loud sweating initiate)
| Slightly scared chapter 1 . 11/25/2013
I don't even know what to tell you... this is just wow... thats some scary shit you wrote there. But it was so surprising in the end. I just... well I will now just stare at a wall and rethink EVERYTHING I know about pokemon...psychic ones in particular.. I appreciated the mind fuck caused...
| cresellia chapter 1 . 11/14/2013
This is my first time reading an M-rated fanfiction. I must say, you're writing style is really captivating, even with all the lemons.
| Jerry chapter 1 . 11/8/2013
Meh I wouldn't mind being a Gardevoirs Slave. Just as long as my ass is safe from "penetration"
| doubledamn chapter 1 . 11/1/2013
I'm conflicted. Is this a tragedy, a romance or a horror? Either way it is a good story, congratulations.
| Syn chapter 1 . 10/6/2013
A yandre gardevoir...What in the hell...
| DarkOneArtorias chapter 1 . 9/9/2013
This is a delightfully dark twist on the usual idea of the benevolent, loving gardevoir. I truly like the idea that the teenager views his imprisonment as an imperfect heaven and how he has everything he could ever wish for but freedom, and how his gardevoir truly does love him but appeares to have been driven insane by her own love and jealousy. This really is dark stuff. I like the dark. Nice job
| Leonardo Jurado chapter 1 . 8/19/2013
This story had some parts/words that could have been omitted/added to make it easier to read and make it feel more casual-sounding:
ex: Multiple chandeliers hanging down from what had to be a fifteen foot ceiling lit up the room. (could add a comma after chandeliers to make the reader have time to breathe)
ex: I didn't mind, home schooling meant I could spend more time with Rina if I worked hard and got everything done. (change the comma here to a collon, to emphasize the following phrase)
ex: Simply being around her is an overwhelming joy. I have no choice in this matter. (changing the sentence to "But I had no choice in this matter." would make the contrast of both sentences more apparent, and better clarify the irony of the rest of the paragraph)
ex: Rina has made me her slave and for all of my anguish, I love every minute of it and would have it no other way. (should change "I love" into past simple "I loved")
While dialogue is very minimum here, this story also has the problem of keeping speech from two different people in the same paragraph, confusing readers:
ex: "Hey, stop it already," I demanded. Rina shot me a puzzled yet annoyed look, waiting for me to finish. "I know you're my girlfriend, but this is scary. Aren't you supposed to protect me?" I asked warily. Rina's telepathy reverberated in my head in a tone I will never forget. "I am protecting you.
(this should've been two paragraphs, the second starting at Rina's telepathy...)
Story-wise, I'm a bit disgusted at how little the character's family had in terms of "screen-time", which makes one worry if either the main character didn't share much bond with his parents, or the parents were irresponsible, or if the writer wasn't arsed enough to describe the family in detail. Family dynamics are great ways to not only flesh out the character's past, but also how he'll act in the future, and I'm sad to see this hasn't been explored properly, let alone thoroughly. Readers with healthy families would be left wondering (if not banging their heads on the screen) why the main character remained passive and unobservant in the course of the story, making viewers relate to him less.
While the story deserves praise for a simplistic style of writing and has great pacing, it was difficult to read at parts, and could be said it was "way too simplistic".
| Wtf chapter 1 . 8/17/2013
| Sega Nesquik chapter 1 . 8/17/2013
Wow. Overly attached girlfriend in the form of a Gardevoir. That is all I can say.
| PokeGiggity chapter 1 . 8/4/2013
| Insane Gallade chapter 1 . 7/6/2013
rina is kinda cookoo, liek me.
| pokefuck chapter 1 . 7/3/2013
this was weird and awsome
| Gaaaaayyyyy chapter 1 . 5/23/2013
| Guest chapter 1 . 4/15/2013
What the fuck..