|Reviews for Metaphors|
| Guest chapter 2 . 11/9/2013
| felines chapter 2 . 8/21/2011
Great ending! So wonderful.
| felines chapter 1 . 8/21/2011
Aww. It's so cute! And so cute how Hermione called herself Nee.
| SpiritedWind chapter 2 . 8/12/2011
AWWWW...so SWEET! It would have been nice if they recognized each other but oh well. Hilarious, great story. Good job! :)
| IW90 chapter 2 . 2/27/2011
Aww... This was so cute!
| Ferretess xxx chapter 2 . 2/6/2011
i love this story, so cute. :)
| potterride chapter 1 . 1/16/2011
that was the cutest thing i have ever read! I love NEE. awww shes sooo cute...that was sooo original and so hilarious. I smiled at every word and every sentence. It
| ReviewsGalore chapter 2 . 12/29/2010
The following is a graded review. Your fan fiction will be ranked in five categories on a 0-10 scale. This review is only the opinion of a single reader and you are free to disregard it if you wish. For more information, see my profile. Feel free to reply or to contact me with any questions or concerns.
Story: 8/10. Cute idea, though there is only so much that you can squeeze out of this one joke and I think that you push it to the limit. I’m not sure that we need two scenes with Dudley picking on Harry and Harry using the metaphor thing. Seems redundant. I did, however, really like how the fic ended and the setup was pretty clever in general.
Characters: 6.75/10. I always find Harry and Hermione’s interactions interesting and amusing, but I don’t really learn anything about them in this fic that I didn’t already know. So many of their interactions are general cutsey kid stuff that it is hard to learn anything about them as characters.
Creativity: 8.5/10. I really like the idea of metaphors being monsters as well as the idea of Harry and Hermione having this brief meeting and not realizing it. This fic was a pretty fresh read for me, but I think just a few more little creative touches would help it.
Writing: 8/10. Your writing is very readable with few mistakes, but there is something about the dialogue that doesn’t quite ring true to me. Maybe it is just the baby talk. I also think you could use a few more descriptive passages.
Believability: 6.5/10. I can generally believe that this scene would happen, but I am not sure that Harry and Hermione act like real children. They seem to be written in the way that people write children when they haven’t observed them much but want their story to be cute. It’s like their main motivation is to be adorable. Also, I am not sure why Harry seems to remember this incident when he is nine but has such trouble remembering it two years later at eleven.
Overall: 7.5/10. This fic has a good concept and is entertaining, but I’d like to learn a little more about the characters.
Thanks for paying attention to my concerns and good luck in the future.
| Stina Whatever chapter 2 . 9/12/2010
| Pleck chapter 1 . 9/6/2010
Aww! I feel like I've read it before...I wonder if I have...only one thing though: both Hermione's parents are dentists
| Stina Whatever chapter 1 . 9/6/2010
| nadaooooo chapter 1 . 9/6/2010
Aww! I loved it! Really original storyline, so cute! XXx