Reviews for Forbidden, Fleeting, Festering
DoveFeathersAndSnowFlurries chapter 1 . 2/1/2011
"Tony always knew it would be her, in the end" ... YES! love!
yen35 chapter 1 . 1/2/2011
Wow, a fabulous and HOT chapter! After I watched this episode, I was also thinking something like this may have happened cos surely after being in that hotel room under covers together, surely they couldn't have let go without 'getting it out of their system' so as to say. Hilarious when Tony said he only has a few lives to spare and thinking of himself as 'captain obvious'. You capture the characters perfectly and I love your writing style. I wish you were one of the writers on the show!
Kristen F chapter 1 . 10/20/2010
I loved it. But like u said it was a little harsh towards end lol. But u could continue or make a sequal I'm not sure how many months until vance breaks the team up cuz im alittle new 2 the show but u could make them leave an ziva go home an find out she prego an she tells them its michaels an wen the team is called bak her father won't let her but she talks him into it an michael goes wit her an the team is bak an gibbs don't want her because she is prego but she says she still an asset 2 the team an tony still loves her but is crushed wen he sees her prego an wen she sees him all her feelings 4 him come rushin bak but she can't tell him yet until she finds a way 2 get rid of Michael an then tony could kill Michael cuz he was workin against them an apologize 2 ziva 4 killin baby father an she could b really upset an go bak home an then idk somethin could happen an she could come bak or tony go there an they get stuck 2gether an u kno if u think ur dying u confess an mayb she goes into labor an he says he don't wanna b wit her cuz it's Michael kid an she tells him its his or mayb he helps deliver it cuz he was a cop so he has trainin an the baby looks like him an he asks her bout baby an she tells him then they face her father an she tells him she loves tony an he's upset but somehow idk tony could save her an her father sees how much tony cares an lets them b 2gether an they go bak an face gibbs wit rule 12 or they could hide it an Tony says he's helpin her wit baby an then wen they c the baby gibbs finds out truth an smacks tony is angry but gets ova it wen he sees them 2gether how happy they r 2gether idk it's just a theory lol if u don't like it its ok I just like long storys an it would b good I just don't write lol
cotedepablo911 chapter 1 . 10/2/2010
I LOVE THIS! It is SOOOOOOOOOOOOOO perfect! You did this PERFECTLY! *heavy applause*
alterangirl chapter 1 . 9/22/2010
I...oh wow. I just cried. Great job.
SemperFiNeverForget051909 chapter 1 . 9/9/2010
First attempt at an NCIS fic? You have to be serious, because you nailed it perfectly.

Tell me you're going to do a sequel for this. I'm in dire need of one, and it's already 5 years going into 6 since their undercover mission.

thump chapter 1 . 9/9/2010
nice first ncis fanfic, sad ending... maybe you can keep it going?
bethchilds34 chapter 1 . 9/8/2010
okay, that ending was really sad... did it really have to end like THAT? aaww :( luved the fic tho! amazing chapter!
Silvergrass chapter 1 . 9/8/2010
oh man! i loved it anyway, :)
Malik The Night Angel chapter 1 . 9/8/2010
i see a sequel! no im serious that was good! i can totaly see a sequel where she has to choose between him and rivkin(obviously going for the former of course.) but we need a sequel
Betherzz chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
it was a good story, a lot more angsty than i saw commin, i figured it would end up being the 1 night stand kinda deal, but not so hurtful with her running out the way she did, figured she would at least give him that 1 night, not just an hour or 2... thanks for the great read
Mrs. Fitzgerald chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
So sad but I loved it tho!
pia chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
i hope that this can be the first of a multi-chapter series. this was really great and i think that they could eventually work out. some things are worth fighting for, and gibbs and her father will just have to deal!
calincisfan chapter 1 . 9/6/2010
Very good first NCIS fanfic. You did a good job with the characters and I hope you continue.
Silencero chapter 1 . 9/6/2010
Brilliant !

"She was confusing, she was enigmatic, but one thing was for sure- to Anthony DiNozzo, Ziva David was a particularly desirable brand of forbidden fruit."

"Ziva tasted like he last remembered, a heady combination of sweet and salty. Like a drug, surely; a bite of temptation straight from Eve's apple, but Tony forced himself to disentangle their lips."

My two favorite lines.

I hope to read more from you ;)
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