|Reviews for Inertia Creeps|
| Azshalade chapter 27 . 2/24
Wow you write like a professional! I always look forward to your updates.
Poor Alois, if only Luka would leave him alone.
| Kendall chapter 27 . 2/20
I have been following this story intently ever since the first few chapters were released, and this is the best, most well-written fanfiction I have ever read. The storyline is so intriguing and suspenseful; so much so that I'm utterly, completely clueless as to how it will end. It feels as if I'm actually reading a best-selling book. I adore the concept, setting, and accurate, wonderful portrayals of all the characters. You're imagination and skill is simply to die for.
| AiMila chapter 27 . 2/19
It was nice knowing about alois past and how he is reacting to the experiment claude had him in. Wonder what other adventures we will encounter
| AnimeCujo chapter 27 . 2/19
Poor Alois, I just want to give him a big hug.
| Amaura chapter 27 . 2/18
SO MUCH LOVE FOR ALOIS AND THIS CHAPTER, GOODNESS GRACIOUS.
| Guest chapter 27 . 2/16
Awwwwwwe! I feel so bad for aloise, like he just needs a hug. At first I was dissapoinnted that this chapter was on aloise, but as I read on I loved this chapter. Can't wait till the next chapter! I was thrilled when I found out chapter 27 was out, and re-read some of the chapters. Keep writing!
| SeafoamHair chapter 27 . 2/16
AS ALWAYS, AMAZING! I can't get enough of it! I CAN'T EVEN EXPRESS HOW WONDERFUL AND PERFECT AND HEART-WRENCHING THIS FIC IS?! As an aspiring fanfiction writer, you give me so much inspiration. Your wording, character development, dialogue, plot twists... Ugh, I can't keep up, it's all too great! I really, really enjoyed having a chapter dedicated entirely to Alois. It was very interesting getting to see an in-depth look on his past, as well as Claude then versus now. Love, love, LOVE this! I can't wait for more! -Anna
| Kuro-Otaku292 chapter 27 . 2/16
AAAWWWWWWW ALOIS U POOR POOR CREATURE I JUST WANNA BUST INTO THT ASSALYUM AND RESCUE HIM AND TELL HIM ILL LOVE HIM AND LOOK AFTR HIM AND BE A WONDERFUL OLDER SIS AND PROTECT HIM FROM ASSWHOLES AND LOOK AFTR HIM AND AAAAAAWWWWWWWWW ALOIS U POOR CHIL DO U HAV TO BE THE VICTIM?!
Their thts my rant ovr bt aawwwwwww poor alois plz plz plz make him bttr or give a good friend bring in hanna to be his Sebastian who's with Ciel bt with no sexual context involved oh an I miss Sebastian bring him in.
This was an amazing chptr I loved the traumatic part u bttr do more alois chptrs cause I wanna no how he gts bttr an how long it takes...bloody luka.
Anyhow on another note if replyin to my message us hard between uni an fanfic I don't mind if u don't reply at all just keep this amazing fanfic going and dont u fuckin dare desert it! ! ! ! ! ! !
| Lunarlight97 chapter 27 . 2/15
I can't wait until part 2! I'm super excited right now! I just love this so much.
| alguien22792 chapter 27 . 2/15
Oh god, I hate Claude so fucking much. The way he toys with Alois feelings is just so urggg! I want to hit him...
| Ashes-To-Diamonds chapter 27 . 2/15
I got so excited when I saw the new chapter was up, and I definitely wasn't let down. I'm growing attached to poor Alois, I hope to see more of him in the future :) Wonderful job with this chapter and I shall wait with baited breath for the next.
| promocat chapter 27 . 2/15
poor alois!i do feel sorry for him now
| Humanized Serenity chapter 27 . 2/15
I was really confused once I saw that there was a lack of death threats in your reviews, and I read the note... So you did end up dividing into two parts! It must have been hard to find the correct place to do it! I remember you were really set on having everything in one chapter! Imagine how long it would have been, though, if Chapter 27 had been uploaded with Chapter 26! XD DO you remember how that was your original plan? XD I guess you will make it pass 30 chapters at this pace... Perhaps you can make it to 40!
Anyway, this only gives me another chapter or so before my heart is completely broken into despair and I have to cry and curl in a ball and die of angst. Oh God, I'm still not ready. And delaying the chapter is only making it worse! I want to get through that like a bandaid, quick and fast and just bring the pain, but the waiting is making it so much worse...! Oh God, the horrors that await me!
But I know this chapter will already be heartbreaking enough. Not as heartbreaking as what will happen NEXT CHAPTER, but still heartbreaking. Alois, I love you!
*deep breath* Okay... I can do this...
You are going all out with it, aren't you? No sleep in three days?! I've been awake ten hours and I'm already getting tired! MY POOR BABY ALOIS! *hugs* I WANT TO PROTECT YOU, MY BABY! ALOIS! *cires* Don't worry, we'll get away from the mean author! FIGHT IT ALOIS!
I want Ciel to read the journal... I can't remember if he will or not, but I really want him to. I really want him to read the journal and get connected to Alois through it and be pissed at Claude and just... WHY?!
"He certainly did not want them inside of him" Oh my God. You are killing me already. MY BABY! MY BABY ALOIS! *cries more* ALOIS!
You just wait Nel... You will pay for this! You will pay for hurting Alois! *hugs Alois again* Just remember... I can get pretty creative when I want to...
NO ALOIS, THEY CARE! Oh My God, if just the beginning is already breaking my heart, how will I hand the rest?
*deep breath* Okay... I can do this...
And the sad thing is that he is right about Claude... Oh Alois... Alois... *cries* I wish things had been different for you! Alois! *sobs*
Oh God, this is really getting to me... Alois' fear... To live in so much fear and have no escape from it... That must be so horrible... It must be a nightmare... A living nightmare, and Alois is lost in it and no one is coming to his rescue. He is in too deep to rescue himself... Alois...!
I'm loving the way you are telling Alois' backstory! It's really interesting, and the style is amazing! I'm honestly fascinated by it, and so I just want to keep reading and reading! I feel so bad for Alois, and I just want to hug him and things to end well for him even though I know they won't! It's becoming easy to see how Alois would begin to think of Claude as his saviour when he lived such a miserable life, despite Claude's own despicable traits. It's also heartbreaking to know that Alois is bearing everything on his own, trying his best to make Luka remain innocent and as unaware of their awful situation as possible. Alois is bearing all the burden so Luka can be as happy and innocent as possible, and that is heartbreaking!
This Group Therapy won't end well... Dear lord, shit will hit the fan right now, I'm telling ya.
Oh God, Alois having to deal with Luka like that is breaking my heart again. I wonder how he looks like to those outside, watching him. I wonder if Ciel will notice.
Fuck, doesn't let me copy anymore so I can't quote it (on the plus side it means no one can try and steal the fanfics, right?), but the line where Alois is so disappointed that Ciel doesn't see Luka because that's all he wants; for someone to see and understand, just broke my heart! It shattered into a million pieces! Alois, my dear Alois! He is so close to breaking, and I just want Ciel to notice and comfort him somehow and pull him from this depression.
I'll be needing to read that Alois/Ciel fanfic you wrote ages ago after this chapter.
Oh God... Did everyone else hear? The outburst? 'Luka' was sounding more like Alois, saying stuff about Claude loving him, so I definitely think that Luka is Alois... What was it? Id? There is a way that you can apply Freud's theory to literature, but I'm not sure (nor do I care very much at the moment since this is not a discussion or an essay or anything formal) if I'm doing correctly, so... Anyway, it's very clear now that Luka is Alois' unconscious, the worst parts of him combined which his mind has manifested into a "physical" form, so whatever Luka says, in a way or another, wanting or not, it is part of Alois' thoughts (he may not want to think about Ciel like that, but we hardly chose our own thoughts, do we?), which is also why his voice gets deeper when he is angry (his mind struggling to keep up the illusion)... And so yeah, I'm scared that he did say those things outloud. I hope he hasn't... It would be very bad for him, very bad indeed. Oh, Alois...! Why is Nel so cruel to you?
I would blame the evil jeans, but you had this planned long before they corrupted you. Maybe Bellamy? No... Bellamy would not do that, that's not him... You are jsut evil! *cries* My best friend is an evil writer who wants to see me cry...!
THis is how you get enemies, my friend... Mark my words.
OKay, I have to say, I love the structure of this chapter! I love nonlinear structures, simply love them, and so this chapter (which is also filled with Alois and filled with angst) is basically porn for me. NON LINEAR ANGST, YAY!
Oh God, it's starting... Alois liking Claude... And who can blame him? With the life Alois led, Claude was a saviour, the one good thing that happened to him. But his life screwed him up, and now Alois is dependent on Claude and then... And then... Oh God, next chapter will kill me after reading this; after discovering why Alois is so clingy towards Claude.
You are an evil genius, you know that?
Claude smiled. Wow... I can imagine how that must have looked for Alois... Claude coming to see him in the shed, then giving him the compress, staying with him, "standing up" for him against the manager, insulting the guest instead of Alois, then smiling... For Alois he must have looked like a saint... Oh, my dear Alois...!
The thing that hurts the most about what Luka says to Alois, about the insults, is that those are things that Alois thinks of himself... And that's just heartbreaking!
THANK YOU FOR TRYING, SOMA! BUT CIEL, GO COMFORT ALOIS! GO HUG HIM OR SOMETHING! I'll be needing to read lots of Alois/Ciel fluff after this. LOTS OF IT.
Soma is so adorable, though... So caring! I love him!
Soma acting friendly with Alois is breaking my hearts. They could have been friends. All of them. Ciel and Alois and Soma, the three bffs. he Golden Trio. Friends Forever. THEY COULD HAVE BEEN LIKE THAT! *sobs*
Oh My God, this is getting more and more heart breaking by the second. Soma saying he is there for Alois, that everyone can see he is not okay and implying they all want to help and that in the end of the day they are all in this together (WHAT TEAM?!)...! God, you are just setting us up for an even bigger heartbreak, aren't you? I know you are... Oh God...
Luka, shut the fuck you, you miserable little shit. Alois... Alois, just smile...! Alois...!
Oh God... Oh God... This scene... I can only imagine Soma's face... And how Alois is feeling... Oh God... I can't take it...! Oh my God, this is just too sad!
Alois needs a hug... He needs a hug...! *cries* I just want Ciel to appear and try to comfort him and Alois to spill the beans about Luka and Ciel ask where he is and Alois points and Ciel starts to tell Luka off even though he can't see or him, but he does it to try and make Alois feel better and reassure him that he cares and they are friends and...!
God, next chapter will break me. It will destroy me. Tell my family I love them, ok?
Someone learned a few lessons from Ciel. XDDD Oh God, the tea in the hands scene!
Claude explaining why he likes Alois is now making me understand why he likes Ciel as well. Their situations were similar, in a way... Their personalities, I guess, their actions, and so Ciel also caught Claude's attention... But unlike Alois, Ciel never gave in, and so I guess the rejection only made Claude's interest stronger until it morphed into an obsession... It begs the question that if were Ciel to give in, would Claude end up losing his interest as well eventually, or is his obsession too strong to ever fade away?
That last line by Claude, "making people disappear [...]" is very chilling... What the fuck did he do?
"Hit back"... That would be very important for Alois... If he hits back, then it means there is still something in him that Claude, the Claude he met, had liked (I'm assuming even if Alois hit him back Claude wouldn't be that interested, since I think Claude too has gone through the Change since arriving at St. Victoria's)... But if he doesn't... Then Alois will just think worse of himself... Which is why Luka is so desperate... It may not be important to Claude, but this moment is very crucial to Alois. It's also crucial to establish how much he has changed, how much he has broken, since the flash backs.
Great storytelling technique, sweetie ;)
Somehow, having Alois look at Luka while Claude is asking him where he is look at just made me feel incredibly sad... Sadder than any other moment during this chapter. I just want to hug him, because this moment I truly felt Alois' sadness and his helplessness and how hopeless his situation is. I just want to hug him and I just want him to be better... God, now I'm so sad! Which is very good news for you! If you can make people sad with your writing, than you are doing a good job!
I was right, then! There is a Pre-St. Victoria's Claude (though he, too, w
| Humanized Serenity chapter 26 . 2/15
HEY! Guess who is reviewing superlate as usual? Yes, it's me! Sorry, you know how crazy school has been... Today is my catch-up-with-everything-then-go-write-my-essay day! And now I'll catch up with IC! I'm sorry I didn't read it and review it until now! Sorry!
You know how much I love this beginning, right? The development of Ciel and Sebastian's relationship, how it is getting to the point of love but not quite there yet, but at the same time there is the trust that comes from only having each other (in a way)... I love it! And I love the way you do it and the way you established that! It's really good! I really love it! And while there is relationship and character development in a realistic pace, there is also cuddling You know I love them when they cuddle! XD
THE THING WITH FRECKLES KILLS ME EVERY TIME, DAMN IT! I don't want to see their bound broken! I don't want them to end like in the manga! No, this confrontation killed me the first time I read it and it's killing me now as well! *cries* FRECKLES! COME BACK! YOU AND SMILE ARE BFFS (shh, don't tell Soma and Alois)! DON'T DO THIS! *cries again*
Oh God! This is one of my favorite scenes in this fanfic! Sebastian and Ciel talking without Claude noticing! YAY! Ciel is so clever! And I love Soma playing his part so realistically and just helping Ciel out! Such a good friend! Ah, I simply love this scene, you know that, don't you? It's so cool, but there is also some suspense because, what if Claude catches them? I mean, I know he won't, but what if?! There is always that nagging thought there!
OKay, so now I'm onto new territory! HI JOKER! I love you so much, Joker! *starts crying* I feel like crying everytime one of the characters appears because I know how this is going to end and I'm not ready for it! I just want them all to hug and hold hands and be happy! Run away and join the circus but not die! *cries* Joker...!
Oh shit, he saw the paper. Play cool, Sebastian. Play cool. What paper? I didn't see any paper. There was nothing there.
Shit, Joker is smart. I love him. Why did he have to die in canon? He could have been such a great big brother figure for Ciel!
As always, Ciel is the brain Sebastian, just be there look pretty! XD Just kidding... But yeah, it's better for Sebastian not to do anything too harsh before hearing the plan, or else he might fuck something up. (will censor that?! I AM A GROWN WOMAN WHO STILL NEEDS TO DO HOMEWORK BUT I CAN CURSE WHENEVER I WANT)
SHIT! WHAT THE HELL?! WHY IS CLAUDE ASKING THAT?! WHAT THE FUCK?! OH MY GOD! YOU NEVER TOLD ME OF THIS (I think. Is my memory that bad?)! NEL, I CAN'T HANDLE SURPRISES AND BOMBS LIKE THIS!
Ciel, you left Sebastian all confused. He doesn't know what to do! XD
Claude is definintely angry... Dare I say jealous? Like, VERY jealous?! Or envious, actually. My Creative Writing teacher explained the difference between the two of them yesterday and I dunno, should I start using them correctly when I'm not doing serious writing or can I just use whatever I want? Anyway, Claude is a little green monster right now! (not like the Hulk, though. We love you, Bruce!)
BIG BROTHER JOKER TRYING TO HELP AND PROTECT THE OTHERS! *cries again* WHY?! WHY DO YOU DO THIS TO ME?! YESTERDAY WAS VALENTINE'S DAY, DAMN IT! MY HEART IS NOT SUPPOSED TO BE THIS BROKEN FROM THE CUTENESS AND THE BOUND AND FRIENDSHIP THAT I KNOW WON'T LAST!
I wonder if any of your readers read my reviews and if I spoiled anything for them... Sorry?
Claude's obsession is sick and I'm loving it. Is it wrong that I almost wished we had more of his POV? Just because it is so sick, obsessive, possessive, and so twisted that I cannot help but want more! You know how I love those sort of things! It's even worst when you think that Claude thinks he is doing all of this for Ciel's sake! That in his head is protecting and doing what is right for Ciel! It's so messed up and I love it! LOVE IT SO MUCH! *hugs you* THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR WRITING HIM LIKE THIS! MY CRAVINGS FOR SICK AND TWISTED AND OBSESSIVE CHARACTERS IS BEING FULFILLED! (it's no wonder I love the Bellamy/Ancel dynamic so much...! But sorry, Bellamy, you aint never getting our tea and carrot loving ginger story time lord!)
I don't know if I ever mentioned it, but I just love the voice you use for the circus kids! I love how it is so like them and it so different from the one Ciel uses and the one that Sebastian uses! Like... They don't sound the same, and that is awesome! I hate it when you are reading something and all the characters sound the same; there is no distinction between the character's speech because they all sound the same... Like... Their patterns of speech, they way they construct sentences, the fluidity of it... It should vary from character to character, but that can be very hard to do, which is why a lot of times characters end up sounding the same, and if the person doesn't have "says (name)", you can't really tell them apart. Not here, though. Joker has his way of speaking, and although it is similar to Freckles, it is not the same. Soma has his own speech pattern, as does Alois, and so does Luka... Claude and Ciel and Sebastian too. All the characters have their own speech, their own voices, and you can really hear that when you are reading! I love this in the story! I simply love it!
OH MY GOD, JOKER IS SO SMART CONNECTING ALL THE DOTS AND HE IS UNDERSTANDING BUT ALSO PROTECTIVE AND I LOVE SO MUCH! SO MANY JOKER FEELINGS! I WAS ALREADY OVERWHELMED WITH FRECKLES FEELS, BUT NOW IT IS JOKER FEELS! YOU DID NOT TELL ME I WOULD HAVE THOSE! I HOPE YOU ARE HAPPY!
I'm going to make you pay... There is still a lot of planning I need to do for TS... So many details I still need to figure out... EVERY TIME SOMETHING BAD HAPPENS CONSIDER IT REVENGE FOR MAKING ME FEEL! IT'S ALL YOUR FAULT!
He used his nickname but what he said... THe feels... They are too much... Too many... I'm emotionally compromised... How will I be able to handle the next chapter? Shit...
Character development in this scene! Well, not development in a positive way... But development as in change because of what the plot, change in a way that is consistent with the plot and realistic! I love how you don't write it, but rather show the reader how Sebastian is becoming more and more numb to all the horrible things he does in Ward V. He is becoming more like the demon Sebastian from the manga, which is awesome! That was one of the things you wanted to do with his character, right? Make him go from a normal human being to our beloved demon Sebastian! When I was reading that scene I thought "Sebstian has been leaving his morality and what part of him cares about morals behind whenever he goes inside Ward V... But is he remember to get them back?" And I don't think he is. It's like he leaves them behind at the door, and although he tries to get them back, he ends up forgetting a little each time, and soon he it's not like he will be forgetting, he just won't care enough to get it back. This is what I'm getting from Sebastian in thsi scene, and I think it is awesome!
Oh Ronald...! I want more of you in the manga! You are so cool and funny and sweet! Ronald
Ciel with Freckles and Soma and the two of them smiling. Do you enjoying torturing me so? Showing me these cute moments knowing they will never last?! Not even another chapter or so?! ARE YOU REALLY THAT CRUEL?! Thre three of them enjoying the sun outside being happy and smiling and I just wish Alois was with them!
I just have to say, you should never worry about dialogue again. I mentioned the speech thing, but I also must mention how I love Ciel and Sebastian's banter!
Oh, Ciel! Oh my God, I'm laughing! Ciel making everyone believe he was in love with Sebastian (in Stockholm Syndrome in love, I mean) and everyone cooing over him! That is such an adorable image to picture, and Ciel probably just wants to punch them all! Awww, Ciel!
Of course Sebastian would get a kick out of this. XD
Sebastian has left his humanity behind, but Ciel hasn't... THis reminds me of the secne where Sebastian killed all the zombies and there was so much blood and Sebastian didn't care but Ciel was horrified... I'm getting this impression right now, which is good! Canon parallel!
Ooooh! Ciel is making Sebastian feel again!
THEY ARE HOLDING HANDS! *squeal*
And now Sebasitian is comforting Ciel. DO YOU WANT TO KILL ME?!
AND CIEL IS COMFORTING SEBASTIAN! DEAR LUCIFER, I THINK MY HEART CAN'T TAKE IT! THIS IS SO CUTE (all things considered)!
Oh God... That ending... Wow, that was a powerful ending... The bitterness in Ciel's smile... It makes one wonder if he regrets changing Sebastian, even if just a little. Like, the change may have been necessary, but you can't help but wonder if Ciel doesn't mourn the old Sebastian, who was naive and innocent and so untainted by the evils of St. Victoria's. It must have been annoying dealing with him at times, with all those trivial things such as morality and etc, but it must also have been... I dunno, nice(?), to have see someone from the outside. Sebastian was the closest Ciel could get to seeing hour outside people were like after spending 8 years in St. Victoria's, and even if he is so tainted by the things inside, it must have been comforting, or just endearing, to see someone who hadn't been touched by those evils... Perhaps he didn't noticed at first, but now that Sebastian has changed, that he can talk about the things in Ward V with little emotions, that the patients fearing him doesn't bother him, perhaps Ciel began to miss the old Sebastian and... I don't want to say regret, because that's not the right word; Ciel knows changing Sebastian was something he needed, something necessary for his escape, so there is no regret in that sense... But perhaps there is guilt over the fact that Ciel was t
| Ptolemy-the-new chapter 27 . 2/15
yeah! im so happy u updated! but... sadly im one of those ciel worshippers so i'll browse through this chapter and wait for the next. keep updating plz!