Interesting story. I enjoyed the way you dealt with Tom, although it got a little dark — thought at first you were going for a humorous approach. Much of the rest of the story seemed, if somewhat lacking in tension. Of course, I think this was primarily about the sex…..

The way Harry is causing Moldyshorts to act in the story reminds me of one of Bobmin’s stories, the dragon ones, where Harry is describing how his dragon affected him seemed like a forbidden potion, the Lust of Eros, if I remember correctly… It was described as a potion that would make a “retired vicar become a rampaging rapist” or something to that effect.

only on chapter two and i have found a new love. im usually harmony lover but i found this on a recomendation and i have to say it it definitely well written. only thing i think you need to improve is showing the passage of time more clearly.

This entire chapter basically shows how schizo modern women can be.

Although I found it interesting that Voldemort was ultimately defeated by lust basically, I would have liked his siren powers in battle or some other way of extending the story before killing Voldy... I loved the story anyway... :D

Best Regards,

Another brilliant story from you. If you could come up with your own scenario and characters you have it in you to be a professional author.

Loved this fic. I cried a couple times especially when they were forced to separate at the beginning.

I’ll probably end up reading it again soon lol.

:) :)

Very much liked the story. Thank you author.

Harry Potter is a fucking horny teenager. He is nowhere near the concept of mature like

In a technical sense, it is well-written.

But it's also light crack-fic filled with endless lemons and fluff.

From the moment they bonded, all obstacles and challenges were removed from the story, effectively ensuring there would never be any tension or any elements that make for good storytelling.

The build-up to them going to Hogwarts is fairly well done and we are led to believe that Dumbledore was going to be a particular hindrance to them. But again, because their bond makes them basically impervious to outside influence, this renders any potential threats benign and it all fizzles into nothingness.

Dumbledore literally does nothing the entire story outside of a few harmless chitchats with Harry. Ultimately, we don't even really know what any of his plans were outside of some vague notion of 'regaining some control'.
Voldemort is rendered into sex-crazed fiend after the bonding who is ultimately harmless to anyone outside his immediate proximity. He is then summarily destroyed in a paragraph or two at the end.
The kids in the castle pose no real threat to Harry or Daphne and are really just a source of angst and to be paired off with one another, making for endless filler.

The 'bond' between Harry and Daphne is honestly abhorrent. Harry isn't even a person; he's a sex-driven maniac who has carte blanche to act as he sees fit and has his every whim and desire satisfied by Daphne wherever and whenever he wants it. Daphne, by extension, is just a sex-doll to be used at the whims of our 'hero'. If she disagrees with any of his thoughts or desires or rejects them outright, our mighty hero will die. There's 'creating a bond' and then there's whatever the hell that is.

This story worked before his transformation. After that however, it's 50% lemons, 25% on the lead-up to the lemons (foreplay, if you will), 20% teenage angst filler and the remaining 5% is minor, easily-solved conflict.

If the author had of dialed-back the whole Siren 'urges' from 11 to 2-3 and removed many of the protections the 'bond' gave them, it might have worked. Perhaps instead of Harry needing to fuck her every couple of hours *for hours at a time*, a week might have been more reasonable. Perhaps some separation with that type of time-frame might have created some actual tension. Alas, we get them fucking like rabbits in hallways, toilets and closets at seemingly every moment of the day.

TL;DR: Skip this unless you really, really like lemons.

The scene with McGonagall is impossible to read. I physically could not get through it all. There should be a hazard warning for it.

Harry breaking down into a blubbering pile of worthless protoplasm, barely able to speak and clawing at himself like a mental case makes his character irredeemable. There is no coming back from that. It was all brought on because you inexplicably made Daphne have a schizophrenic moment where, after weeks of perfect relations with Harry, she just snaps at him for no good reason.

He was literally about to die because Daphne said no to him and that she didn't value his opinion.

Even if this type of nonsense about Sirens were real in legend or whatnot, you still have the artistic license to change it as you see fit. Having this level of utter dependency between characters, on par with a baby needing an adult for survival, reads poorly at best and utterly cruel at worst.

Always refreshing to see a fic where Ron is actually a good friend, even more so when Hermione is a bitch. Normally it’s either Ron sucks and Hermione is good, or they both suck.

closure for dumbles maybe.
the thougt you "Gave" Umbitch give me goosebumps for real ! dude
i Kinda Liked the Story but the mix between Lemon and not was weird.
Thanks for the Story

An excellent must read!