|Reviews for Mindshattered|
| Lilywonders chapter 17 . 3/8
I cannot believe how amazing this was. I loved how much research you've put into this, along with the psychological parts. Definitely one of the best fanfictions I've read in a while. Great job!
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 17 . 3/2
"Sanji had hastily shoved past them and half dragged, half carried the still-trembling, not-entire-aware swordsman away from his bunk and towards the door..." Favourite part I this whole chapter. It just so perfectly shows the temporary bond (if i might say) that Zoro has with Sanji because of their "talks". And I love how he acts upon occurance and just drags Zoro to calm himself.
MY GOD I CAN'T HANDLE THE CHOPPER ADORABLE NESS IN THIS! When he tied the bandanna around Zoro's arm :3. And the Zoro-niisan moment when he saved Chopper :3333333. Okay I'm done with that haha.
I DEFINITELY CALLED THEM BURYING PERONA! And actually that might be my other favourite part in this chapter when Zoro was with her for 4 hours. I mean it's really eye opening and touching that he stayed with her probabaly drunk talking nonsense. But I love it because it shows he actually posesses feelings and such. Really hard to explain :P
This chapter was a masterpiece. More like this whole STORY. Wonderful (well not really the right word haha) plot and I can't express the appreciation for how much time you put into this and for that I respect you and look up to you Karma. As a writer you have really surpassed my desires in any fanfic :') This marathon of feelings will forever be a favourite.
| SkittlesTheUnicorn chapter 17 . 3/2
I wish there was like a super favorite button because this story was FREAKING AMAZING! Seriously, it's one of the best I've read! You kept the characters very in-character and the plot was developed brilliantly. I loved that you had them go back to bury Perona. It wouldn't have felt right if they just left her there to rot. I also really liked how you made the final fight have parts where it seemed impossible for them to win, unlike some stories I've read. As much as I wanted the Alchemist to go down quickly, it wouldn't really fit his character or how the fights in One Piece typically go. This could have been canon(thank god it wasn't though, because I would have killed Oda for doing that to Zoro). Overall, fantastic story. I love that you actually researched for it to get the facts right. It's definitely one of my favorite stories now. :D
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 16 . 3/1
YEEEEEE ROBINNN! Dammit I wish she DID kill Panaceam on her own. Would have made my day.
Whoa. Is if just me or does Sanji have a REALLY good way with words. "Yes you were the reason The Alchemist was here... But you were also the reason I lived" WHOOOA
So anyways back on Robin. She's talking about the Revolutionary Army I assume. And I can guarantee that through their expertise they'll get the most out of the Alchemist. I can't tell if it'll be hard or not since he may be still "broken" ior be far tighter lipped than anyone else. And that he won't be escaping anytime soon. Gosh that idea scares the heck out of me!
Though Panaceam was essentially forced into the lifestyle he has. Right? Because of his parents, he is molded into such an exact person. Creepy.
OKAY KARMA DONT U EVEN GO THERE THAT YOU ARE A BAD FANFICTION AUTHOR! DO YOU EVEN REALIZED HOW MUCH EFFORT YOU PUT INTO YOUR WORK?! THAT IN ITSELF IS THE REASON YOU EXCEL AT FANFICT THAN THAT OF MOST AUTHORS. PLUS YOU CAN ACTUALLY WRITE ACCORDING TO RESPECTIVE CHARACTER FACTS AND YOU'RE GOOOOOOOODDD! SO DONT EVEN GO THERE... PISSES ME OFF WHEN PEOPLE CANT RECOGNIZE THEIR GREATNESS.
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 15 . 3/1
So basically (The way shoenice says it) I'm sorta of bawling atm. I wish I could favourite chapters because MY GOD, I'm overwhelmed by this. The victorious feeling of Sanji's triumph is sooo relieving.
Really interesting concept idea for Sanji's signature Diable Jambe. His leg (knee down) freaking ignites yet there is no pain other than buring passion. Sweeeeet.
I shit myself when the Alchemist had Sanji up against the rails. I was scared he was going to "break" Sanji as well to get to the geezer. ;_; And 3 blunt kicks to Zoro's face... MOFOOO!
Anyways... Sanji basically broke the Alchemist. At least I believe so. It seems that since he is so precise with everything you break that chain, ruin his plan, he's fucked. In this case, it was the utter shock of the fact his "facts" about the whole crew could be wrong. Or that he'd never think they'd try anything besides those "facts". They'd be stupid if that was the case.
But I'm legitimately serene right now. Now that the Alchemist is all battered up. And I'm really proud of Sanji. He pulled through so in the place he least expected to gain oposition in. His freaking kitchen! Well you learn new things each day eh? Fantastic chapter, you owe a thousand cookies for this one Karma(;
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 12 . 2/26
Dear god don't go to Saboady. He'll somehow be waiting there to ambush and it'll replay encounter Pacfista again.
Wait but this is post timeskip right? So they hve developed new powers and skills that Zoro doesn't know about. Aw Zoro didn't get to improve at all dammit.
Ah I wonder if the Alchemist has Haki... Probably. He's TOO OP!
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 11 . 2/26
"This man was human, Zoro was sure of it...but he was the most cold-blooded human Zoro had ever seen in his life."
That phrase to me is really contradicting. Because I would believe that saying cold blooded implies he has feelings of malice. Only slightly though. I would say something along
the lines of "He was human. But the most non/in human Zoro had ever met". Keeps it really creepy y'know? (;
I'm confused. Did I miss something? Because Zoro seems to be unchained right now and he can move freely within the cell.
Oh my fuck. Thats how he dislocated his shoulder but fuck someone bad is going to happen. Like the Alchemist is still upstairs and can hear them or something I'm scared.
I can't accept this.. At all. It hurts my brain to vision Zoro like this. The detail you put into this ugh. :$ DEADLYYY
Well that clears up things. He potioned (that even a word?) the water. This is the thing about Zoro's logic about willpower. He begged himself to not eat it and he did with the regret beause it was potioned. But when it comes to something as miniscule as saying "Don't know" as "betrayal". Honestly I can't see it. But I can see how much you want to specify Zoro's inner strength (as I would say).
Gah so cruel. I really wonder how Luffy would hold up in this situation.
I wish I could be there to give Zoro useless attempts that he wasn't totally wrong. BecUse this bastard was the cause and there wasn't anythin he could do about it. He should know that he gave it his best shot. And basically everyone already knows all thsir attacks right?
I have to remember Zoro is telling the story to Sanji. And he wants to be left behind because he betrayed them. But that seems wrong because wouldn't the Alchemist just go after the crew? Thats why he warned them of how dangerous he was. Because he knew every loophole to the Strawhats. TTTT
Well damn. What happened to Perona? She dead now right? :( That actually makes me sad beause she was still there a few weeks ago. Plus shes a stick so barely any meat to go through before it hits bone.
| SuperFamily chapter 17 . 2/26
Kay, so I never review fanfiction. NEVER. Congrats! You're the first person I've ever reviewed for. Feel special and bask in that glow...
This story was great! I really think you did a great job, delving into Zoro's psyche, and dealing with everything on an intimate level. There are some points that felt like you didn't give them the attention they deserved. Off the top of my head, I feel like Zoro should have had more issues than he did. Like, after effects of what happened, if that makes sense? Yeah we saw some, but I feel like to a degree, they should have been more pointed at Sanji because the alchemist was a blonde, and Sanji is blonde meaning association or whatever the proper term is. Sure they're distinctly different, but I'm pretty sure, not really sure there should have been some kick back on Sanji because of it. Also, I feel like maybe Zoro should have had some more mental lapses/issues/etc than he did, but then again I don't really know about this sorta thing.
All in all, this was a fantastic, and well-written story. It's beautifully done, well enough to imply Zosan for the people who ship it, and vague enough to be nakamaship as this fic is. Because this story is so dark and scary, I can honestly tell you I probably won't want to read this again, regardless of how compelling I found it. Nevertheless, I enjoyed this story, and commend you on a job well done.
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 10 . 2/25
Makes sense now. Shitty Alchemist. Magic makes things too op. I should have know he was some sort of chemist after he made that Hawk/Falcon's eye potion. But seriously wow. Without even purposely doing it, he found the loophole to Perona's powers. -_-
At first I thought that you weren't going to do to good making the Alchemist really uh terrible. But now I see that he's one of those expertised hunters who are merciless. Not even. He's going to "break" Zoro with that emotionless mind of his purely for business. I'm not aure if thats conparable to sadism though.
Whoo so I got the Alchemist portrayal right with potions and all. Lol Ed was ringing through my mind wen you mentioned the cape not Alchemist. So bascially he's going through the stages of his tactics. It hurts to read blah.
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 9 . 2/25
Zoro's protecting them from getting off the ship. So they won't face the consequences. And he's scared because he'll have to face "him" again. How'd I do on that guess? :D
Oh the theories I come up with. AHH SO EXCITED TO READ ZOROS PART. ON TO THE NEXT CHAP!
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 8 . 2/25
I know its a horrible time but I just freaking lost it when Sanji "smacked" Zoro's face to wake him up. Its the funniest word on the planet to mee my godd XDD
WHAT did bounty hunter johnson feed zoro... Thats sick. It was probably Perona's urine.
Yay the backstory! I knew Sanji would tell Zoro first (aside from this crisis) because they have established a special um relationship. Be it that its quite descructive or not. HEY ZORO'S SKULL IS NOT THICK. He's as perceptive as Robin and Nami etc. He's just an idiot when nothing matters. Same with Luffy, sorta.
Lmaoo he'll sic Chopper on hi. XDD
So um.. How does Zoro shit? Explaining that would make this all the more realistic hah. Or does he even have enough "food" in his system to produce any waste at all?
Whoo it all turned out fine and Dandy.
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 7 . 2/25
OH SHIT OH SHIT OH SHIT NONONONONONO HE COULDNT HAVE FOUND THEM. USOPP PLEASE SHOOT THEM PLEEEEESSSEEE.
I'm such a retard. Zoro's obvious motive was so the bounty hunter wouldnt get him.. Or did he state that himself? Wait no thats selfish. Hmmm...
Imagine if Usopp actually saw and he told Nami and she whipped up her mirage tempo to screen them? Oh great he lost them... To have found out their location in the next few minutes :') What is this guy made of.
Surprise, surprise! Luffy and Zoro have regained their connection. Does this mean hat Zoro will convince Luffy? HMM
OH NO OH NO LUFFY U DUMBASS. U JUST FUCKED UP ALL SANJIS PRECIOUS WORK! This is way too intense. I hope you don't cutoff what Sanji had to do to Zoro.
Really good chapter.
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 6 . 2/25
Whoa I thought Zoro was going to ask Sanji to do something ridiculous like kill him because he'd only get in the way...
But I'm like breathless now. I have no idea what to think of this because they are nakama and would never leave the other behind. BUT Zoro's reason is so valid, like luffy would actually consider it and all. I say this because of their past quarrels at Alabasta and Post-Water 7. Its all a very strict agreement. So I don't think Zoro is doing it because its best for them, but because his end of the pledge is kind of ruined TTTT
Oh lord, you really brought out serious Usopp and Luffy. Hmm so I suppose it's going to play out how the majority would believe so. Luffy saying no due to the nakama bond..
The "ulterior motive" must be linked to Zoro's blank moments. It's like he's lagging haha.
They told Luffy. And he didn't freak. Wow. Much sugoi (doge) .
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 5 . 2/25
You say "...at best" a lot. XD
Christ! Zoro ignored LUFFY? Like whoa, whoa. Something is definitely wrong and I think that it's not from the starvation recovery OR the storm (concussion?). Like Zoro can sense that "he" is coming or something. That'll be extremely scary. Like the crew can handle it right? It's sort of weird having only Luffy and Sanji there to fight. This is all so nervewracking my godd.
| Princess-Orlaith chapter 4 . 2/24
Inciteful! I adore Sanji's part in this soo much. How calm and reasonable he's being to aid Zoro in a medical manner yet he's trying to let marimo keep his pride. It's scary though because Zoro doesn't even truly understand what happened. He does!'t acknowlegde how hard its on all of them because of his state. but anyways... WHOOO ZORO' AWAKE! Makes me really relieved even though I liked the angsty him not knowing who they were. HOWEVER I'm glad to see that Zoro was really terrified for a sec there over "him". Because he's the one person who has been able to scare Zoro. And I mean "horrify" to the very core. Again Sanji's loveelyy referals to his past experience. Good thing Zoro isn't really the nagging type.
I just have to say that the descriptions are a little lopsided and confusing. Overal your great in those adjectives and such but sometimes a bit too many are added and it becomes misleading. Try to keep it light ;)