|Reviews for introduction|
| Mattie chapter 1 . 6/28/2011
The fuck is this?
| Kimiko Nanasawa chapter 1 . 12/28/2010
Why oh why are you writing stories? I hope you're a troll, I hope to God you are.
I don't know whether to laugh or cry at your horrible storytelling. Please stop; you're killing my brain.
| Jawshy chapter 1 . 10/31/2010
Gouge my eyes out now, what the hell is this crap?
| Moon-sama chapter 1 . 10/31/2010
I have detected ALOT of errors in you're writing.
First, you need to learn how to use a spell checker. If you do not have OpenOffice or Word.
Second, please please OH PLEASE, use a dictionary. If a word is hard to pronounce, or if you do not know what it means, use that.
Third, Don't make the characters so OOC (Out of Character).
Fourth, use PUNCTUATION and check your GRAMMAR.
Consider this constructive criticism. It helps alot with writers.
I don't know if you weren't paying attention, bored or just simply, trolling.
| Alice Blue Rain chapter 1 . 9/17/2010
Please tell me you are a troll. Please.
NUMBER ONE. PLEASE DO NOT USE SMILIES TO INDICATE ONE'S EMOTIONS. x.x
NUMBER TWO. At least TRY to use proper spelling and punctuation.
THREE. Make chapters longer.
FOUR. This girl is, face it, this girl is a Mary Sue.
Please take my tips to heart.
| Muhammad Izzat Awwal chapter 1 . 9/15/2010
I hope you will make story that includes you in it(The Umineko story).
Because the way you write seems like you are going to enter there.