|Reviews for Hello, GoodBye|
| David305 chapter 2 . 11/8/2010
It's a nice idea! Your story has promise.
As for the French accent, though: The trick to dialect writing is that you must be very familiar with the dialect, and the way it "mispronounces" English. If you aren't, the speaker can seem less like a foreigner, and more like a mentally challenged person with a speech impediment.
French people do not drop the Y. (Both "'Ou" and "'Oo" are incorrect for "You.") They are perfectly able to say You, Yes, year, etc. Few French words begin with Y, but they're just as normally-pronounced: Yacht, Yaourt, Yeux.
The French routinely drop the letter H, as it doesn't appear in their language. Thus, "'Ogwarts," rather than "Hoggy-warts."
Additionally, the two "TH" phonemes are not part of French, and so are substituted: the voiced TH found in This, That, There, oTher is usually replaced with a Z: Zis, Zat, Zere, Ozzer. The unvoiced TH found in Thin, Think, Through and baTh are usually replaced with an S: Sin, Sink, Srough, baSS.
French also lacks the short-I (as does Spanish). So EE substitutes for I: "Eet will be alright, 'Arry, mon amour" should be "Eet Weel".
BTW, there is still no word "alright" in English. It's "all right." and "Where all going to be apart" should be "We're all going". We're is the contraction for We are; Where means In what place.
"He gazed at it said" probably should be "gazed at it sadly."
"putting the bird in a shoe box with blackest" you probably meant, with blankets.
Having a beta reader would be wise. For more on how, why (and why not) to get a beta, you may click my user-name, and read the short essays on my bio-page.
| Deviously Ruined Rose chapter 2 . 11/8/2010
how old is felix though?
| ImploringIdeal chapter 2 . 11/8/2010
Nice fic. Will this be a manipulative!Dumbledore fic. I can't wait to see what happens next. Update soon!
| Yuna's Reincarnation-1 chapter 1 . 11/8/2010
harry being friends with tom that is ironic lol update soon
| Clockwork Rebel chapter 1 . 10/20/2010
Write more soon, please
| Chrystel Malfoy-Potter chapter 1 . 10/20/2010
This looks great. Can't wait to read more.
| xXxOtAkU-444xXx chapter 1 . 10/12/2010
I like it! **
| ImploringIdeal chapter 1 . 10/12/2010
Interesting start. I can't wait to see where you go with it. Update soon!
| nurr chapter 1 . 10/11/2010
...I like it. I really really like it. I hope you update soon!
| Vanmoriel-Elentari chapter 1 . 10/7/2010
Awesome fic, I'd like to see the next chapter XD! Please continue, you're right, I've never seen a Harry-is-a-capital fic, and this is the first one I see. Plus, I think it's interesting that Harry met William Shakespeare? And he was friends with Voldemort? That makes it even more interesting!
Please continue writing!
| ShadowfireNightblade chapter 1 . 9/29/2010
...Forgive her...She has no patience...
| XxAlysxX chapter 1 . 9/21/2010
I rather like Harry-is-London. Its unique. Btw I'm guessing Paris is a boy? 8D
| Dreamers0rule0the0earth chapter 1 . 9/18/2010
i like this story, and i can't wait for more
| Jossi-kun chapter 1 . 9/15/2010
Cool story, I'm looking forward to how Harry will grow up now that he's w/the nations.
| Tohruismyoneechan chapter 1 . 9/15/2010
OMG FREAKIN GOD YES! This is awesome I love it already! :D I cannot wait until the next chapter! You are doing a fantastic job! 3