Reviews for Hello, GoodBye
Dennisthepinkgoldfish chapter 2 . 11/9/2010

you updated!

i was beggining to doubt...

but you did and it was such an epic chapter!
anon chapter 2 . 11/9/2010
You know I've never really tried one of these before...ITS AMAZING! I'll be back for more!
Cosmos Angel and Yami Darkness chapter 2 . 11/9/2010
Keep going please
xXxOtAkU-444xXx chapter 2 . 11/9/2010
I like it! **
jumping-jo chapter 2 . 11/9/2010
looking forward to this story...its got potential to be awesome and cool love to see how hogwarts reacts to him
Clockwork Rebel chapter 2 . 11/8/2010
Awesome update...I really like the story this far

Update soon

Stay Awesome

~The Awsum
Celelanthir chapter 2 . 11/8/2010
I like this story so far. However, what about Ottawa?
cross-over-lover232 chapter 2 . 11/8/2010
hm a suitable chapter for how long you kept us waiting. hopefully the next chapter will be um much it did suprise me to come home from work and find it waiting on my birthday!
ShadowfireNightblade chapter 2 . 11/8/2010
...What about Canada...
David305 chapter 2 . 11/8/2010
It's a nice idea! Your story has promise.

As for the French accent, though: The trick to dialect writing is that you must be very familiar with the dialect, and the way it "mispronounces" English. If you aren't, the speaker can seem less like a foreigner, and more like a mentally challenged person with a speech impediment.

French people do not drop the Y. (Both "'Ou" and "'Oo" are incorrect for "You.") They are perfectly able to say You, Yes, year, etc. Few French words begin with Y, but they're just as normally-pronounced: Yacht, Yaourt, Yeux.

The French routinely drop the letter H, as it doesn't appear in their language. Thus, "'Ogwarts," rather than "Hoggy-warts."

Additionally, the two "TH" phonemes are not part of French, and so are substituted: the voiced TH found in This, That, There, oTher is usually replaced with a Z: Zis, Zat, Zere, Ozzer. The unvoiced TH found in Thin, Think, Through and baTh are usually replaced with an S: Sin, Sink, Srough, baSS.

French also lacks the short-I (as does Spanish). So EE substitutes for I: "Eet will be alright, 'Arry, mon amour" should be "Eet Weel".

BTW, there is still no word "alright" in English. It's "all right." and "Where all going to be apart" should be "We're all going". We're is the contraction for We are; Where means In what place.

"He gazed at it said" probably should be "gazed at it sadly."

"putting the bird in a shoe box with blackest" you probably meant, with blankets.

Having a beta reader would be wise. For more on how, why (and why not) to get a beta, you may click my user-name, and read the short essays on my bio-page.


Deviously Ruined Rose chapter 2 . 11/8/2010
how old is felix though?
ImploringIdeal chapter 2 . 11/8/2010
Nice fic. Will this be a manipulative!Dumbledore fic. I can't wait to see what happens next. Update soon!
Yuna's Reincarnation-1 chapter 1 . 11/8/2010
harry being friends with tom that is ironic lol update soon
Clockwork Rebel chapter 1 . 10/20/2010

Write more soon, please
Chrystel Malfoy-Potter chapter 1 . 10/20/2010
This looks great. Can't wait to read more.
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