|Reviews for Gatekeeper|
| Yoshtar chapter 1 . 1/7/2013
maybe you could do blood ravens? post retribution blood ravens of course.
i would pay to read well written Gabriel Angelos fighting.
| the Reader chapter 1 . 9/20/2010
Grammar and spellings are quirks. What matters to me is a compelling story. You deliver every time, keep it up!
| Sirwalterbeck chapter 1 . 9/18/2010
it kept me guessing who the marine was till the end
i think shrike would be great
| ICMT chapter 1 . 9/17/2010
Yaaa! High Five! I think something involving Creed and the 13th Crusade would go along with your theme, or perhaps the Grey Knights Vs. Angron on Armaggedon
| ClickaholicAnonymous chapter 1 . 9/17/2010
EVERY Terminator is outfitted with a storm bolter fitted to his power fist, unless you're implying that Marneus has one on each hand.
There are quite a few spelling errors here and there, but they're not all grouped together. My suggestion to you is proofread your story for something that doesn't sound right when you say it aloud.
As for his personality, I won't comment on that because I don't know Marneus Calgar at all, except for the fact that he is the Chapter Master of the Ultramarines. It just seems unlikely to me that ANY chapter master would fight quietly.
Overall it needs some more work, but it's a decent story nonetheless.
| Vinculus chapter 1 . 9/17/2010
First I though there was a techno-heresy because of bolters used by terminator and 2 powerfists, lol.
Anyway it's still a good story and a worth reading one.
I recommend the Forgefather, because he got wicked weapons. Keep writing!