Having a max of 2 girls is fine. I mean even I have to agree I like watching harem animes but we have to agree 2 girls sounds hard enough as is, but I’ll accept 3 girls for the harem. I can’t wait for this rewrite you know. It seems like it’ll be fun to read.

Now my opinion about harems, 1 girl is already a hassle, 2 girls seems like a tough spot, 3 girls just sounds like a giant dam is filled up to the brim of overflowing but still remains inside. 4 girls... 4 girls sounds like it’s just a constant battle between who gets to have main character-kun for any given moment. I mean, I like watching harem anime but sometimes can we be realistic? Says a guy in a review on a fan fiction. I mean we all know it’s fiction... but can we at least set some boundaries!

I believe the cloth Archer had was known as "The Shroud of Martin" so you could refer to the "cape-ish part" as a shroud.

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YES. THIS STORY IS GOING TO BE AWESOME. EMIYA SHIROU WILL TEACH NARUTO THE ONE TRUE SECRET OF THE UNIVERSE: THAT PEOPLE DIE WHEN THEY ARE KILLED! I AM WRITING THIS REVIEW IN ALLCAPS.

BUT SERIOUSLY, THIS STORY LOOKS LIKE IT COLD HAVE POTENTIAL.

OH AND BEFORE I FORGET, JAPANESE NAMES...

They don't hyphenate them. They just don't. It's not done. I'm serious here, it's not a thing.

if you feel that way with the pairing why not make or find women that out class others girls in all areas?

this was good start to story I thought Not to much a fan of harems but still a good start

While I do think that your character is naruto in name only, I feel that this is not a bad thing, and can't hold it against you. the whole point of fan fictions is so j you can tell a story that is different than the original, so keep up the good work.

nice cant wait for more

good story so far please update again soon

dude this fic is good, keep up the awesome job... my own fic got reviews like urs...but i kept at it... give my fate fic a read (currently in hiatus XD)

interesting story

hi, have you considered arcueid as a beserker class? (she is a beserker class in fate/extra)

Good story.

Quite enjoyable. I've only seen the anime and Unlimited Blade works myself. Can't wait for Rider's Arc. My fav F/SN character. Closely followed by Archer/Emiya.

I really like the idea, I love F/SN crossovers, but I think this first part was a bit rushed anyways. You should read 'The hill of swords' by gabriel blessing for inspiration. It's a F/SN-Familiar of Zero crossover that is made of awesome. If you want information about heroic spirits there's a fic here on that is full of profiles like the ones in the visual novel. I believe it was called 'In the throne of heroes'.

keep up the good work.