|Reviews for The Wizard in the Shadows|
| HecateMist chapter 9 . 10/19
Oh my gods! Awesomeness!
| HecateMist chapter 1 . 10/17
N.B. Might be an idea to change 'ordinary looking young man' to something wiuh 'human' in it . After all, Frodo is techically a young man - a young hobbit man, but still.
And I don't think Aragorn would say 'rather'. Or did he pick that up from Harry?
This is one of the best fanfics I've read - and it is but the beginning. You say it gets better!
| greasy snivellus chapter 1 . 9/15
food. lol ok it's good
| Mr. Know It All chapter 15 . 8/26
It is so amazing to see how you've evolved as an author when I compare this to COTS and its sequel. This is a very good story, tis true, but the storytelling and believability of your characters and plots have shot way up. Basically, keep being amazing, and I would love to see you revisit this
| comilusionary chapter 1 . 8/2
I'm a little late, but this is probably the single best piece of Fan fiction I have ever read! I'm not gonna go into details, but this is a really good story with all the right details, events and pretty good grammar, and spelling! Kudos to you!
| guest chapter 6 . 7/29
You admit that having Harry volunteer all that information to Boromir was OOC, then you end the chapter with him volunteering a lot of information to Gandalf... Plus, the dialogue for both of those scenes just needs work... The conversation is entirely too one-sided.
That does not mesh with the character Aragorn described in the beginning of the fic (the one who rarely talked, if at all). He may need someone to talk to, but one would think he would talk more about people/losing them/ the emotions brought on by their deaths, than giving a ton of details about stuff that isn't relevant.
The blurb about the hallows could have been reduced to, "There was a magical artifact called the resurrection stone. Though it did not resurrect the dead in the truest sense, it did produce a shade/specter/spirit, but it was a cold copy of what that person was when they were alive." Master of death-unnecessary information. Wands can change hands-irrelevant.
On the other hand, stuff about people he lost-parents, Teddy, Ginny-entirely relevant and should be the focus. Basically, the dialogue should focus on things Harry would actually care about. Meaning, people should be the focus, not the afterthought.
| guest chapter 3 . 7/29
Oh dear, horribly forced exposition. This is one of my pet peeves(pun intended) in crossovers. Namely, if a reader is looking for a crossover, they must choose the respective fandoms. This, in turn, means that they are likely very familiar with the chosen fandoms... I have read HP; I don't need Harry to give a recap unless you have somehow changed canon events. What's more annoying is that it seems like people just do it so XXXX character can say, "Oh, you poor thing." Or something like that.
Also, I have seen several HP crossovers where Harry immediately gives an abridged personal history to a complete stranger. This, to me, seems terribly out of character. Harry is someone who has always avoided the limelight wherever possible. Why would he want to dredge up all of his past accomplishments if he wanted a vacation?
Personally, I think it would make more sense if he said something like, "Your world isn't the only one to have a dark lord[possibly insert some dark details about Voldemort]... Unfortunately, I was tasked with the role of defeating him." -still shows power/experience with dark magic, but doesn't go into annoying (and probably painful for Harry to talk about) detail. Then he can say, "After I won, I came here to try to get away from all the memories of loss. Unfortunately, I got stuck and have been looking for a way back ever since."
Then again, I doubt I could do better at 14. I shall continue on and see how your writing changed through the years.
| R chapter 21 . 7/23
The great harry potter is taken down by a shield to the head. Not very impressive
| R chapter 13 . 7/23
I'm getting profoundly annoyed. Harry's presence hasn't changed a damn thing to this point.
| Otsutsuki no Yami chapter 24 . 7/15
Until half this chapter it was all great until you mentioned Ginny enter Middle Earth. This was my turn to close this one and leave it.
| hearagain chapter 38 . 7/8
Lovely story. Had a bit of everything in it... including snark. Lots of snark. Thanks for sharing.
| james4218 chapter 23 . 6/24
| padfootl0ve chapter 31 . 6/22
The Princess Bride quote is awesome
| padfootl0ve chapter 20 . 6/21
Oh my goodness. Ginny sounded so much like Molly when she was dealing with Ron and Hermione.
| padfootl0ve chapter 12 . 6/21
The image I have in my head of snape berating people about potions from his other portraits is just perfect. thank you. I needed that in my life.