Reviews for Heavy Breathing
LillyHalliwell chapter 4 . 2/24/2017
Great story!
meburleson chapter 4 . 1/27/2015
Love it! Excellent chapter and ending. Is there a sequel to this? If nit, I'd love love love yo read one. I enjoy the angst story turned romance a lot. Lol, maybe a little more angst for me, but that personal opinion. Your sex scene is perfect in my opinion, they'd been leading up to it all day, both unsure of their own feels and each other's, plus add in the circumstances and alcohol and well, you did it perfectly. I love the copy room therapy. Ingenious idea!
meburleson chapter 3 . 1/27/2015
I'll admit the Spanish threw me off quite a bit, but did not affect the story for me. I understand what she got from him, not the words spoken necessarily, but that the goal of finding out who he worked for was achieved. I love the food elements, makes the story seem more- "real" perhaps. I love that Auggie is there for Annie. I'm amazed at Annie's healing ability. I sure wouldn't want to be manhandling some dude twice my size (guessing) just a few days after being shot. Great chapter. I only have one more to read. This saddens me.
meburleson chapter 2 . 1/27/2015
Hmmm, something I disliked about the chapter? Ummm, that it wasn't longer? That Annie can't cook and woke Auggie up to loud annoying beeping? I just don't know what there is to not like. It is a great chapter that captures the characters perfectly, seriously, perfectly! I can only hope to be half as good at capturing their voices as you are. Seriously, wonderful job!
meburleson chapter 1 . 1/27/2015
Love this! Love the part where Annie uses their sparring sessions to help her through the tough spot. Oh and the bit about him getting the bath salts for her! Super adorable part. I can't wait to read more!
joellen818 chapter 4 . 9/1/2014
This was awesome! I loved this story. I am adding it to my favorites. It really fit with their characters. Great job!
YoreReader chapter 4 . 12/18/2013
I think the progression to intimacy is very organic. Yes, I do agree that spending time with someone you're attracted to is tempting. Proximity can add to the the temptation. I think making love was natural for Auggie and Annie.

Now, did I hear you say sequel? That's a magic word. I hope you do but no pressure.

Thanks for sharing this story. Obviously, I love it. Great job!
YoreReader chapter 3 . 12/17/2013
I sound like a broken record but I can't help it. I love this story because Auggie and Annie feel so real, I could hug them both. Their talks, their gestures, they are so alive. You give them life and I treasure it because it seems like bonus episodes to me. Thank you.
YoreReader chapter 2 . 12/17/2013
Still loving it.

And I hope you forgive me if I don't add to the list of things or lines your readers dislike because I don't have one.
YoreReader chapter 1 . 12/17/2013
You really have a hold on Auggie's and Annie's characters. It's like I'm watching an episode as I read your story. I love the way you have them interacting. It's friendly but there's attraction simmering underneath.

My favorite scene has to be the one where Annie's fighting for her life and hearing Auggie's instructions on how to fight.
Tony7323 chapter 4 . 8/21/2013
Good Story I Liked It Nicely Written Good Job.
xJacquii chapter 3 . 7/30/2013
The bit when the young woman walked in would be so awkward! Just before I read that part I was thinking that the chances of someone walking in while Annie was in the bathroom by herself would be pretty high.
"Am I your type?" - Me: Aww :3
Yess! Annie and Auggie kissed :D
xJacquii chapter 2 . 7/30/2013
"You have any other interesting tattoos?" Annie asks.
Auggie grins at her. "You'll have to find that out by yourself."

Adorable-ness overload! 3
xJacquii chapter 1 . 7/30/2013
Great chapter! I was crying from the part when Annie fell to the ground to when she rang Auggie from her emergency cell.
Auggie is so sweet! - bath salts and suggesting that she should stay at his place :)
The last part was SO cute!
a.brief.dalliance chapter 4 . 7/27/2013
This was a lovely read, thank you!
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