|Reviews for Defining Sexuality|
| savo90 chapter 10 . 11/4
I've made it into Chapter 10, and I fully intend to complete the entire story. The content is really good, in my opinion!
However, to provide some constructive criticism, though I do recognize that this story is about 5 years old: There are a lot of run-on sentences, and I do mean a lot. Basically all of them use the connector "as," more often than not being used to convey the meaning of two actions being completed at once. While the story's content holds my interest, this constant use of the word to create run-on sentences serves the exact opposite purpose and distracts me from the story. As small an annoyance as it is, the multitude of them is the real kicker.
I see that this author has written several other stories, and though I haven't gone into them to check out how the author has improved over the years, which I'm sure she has, I do hope that she has grown out of this particular habit.
| 2015 reader chapter 5 . 3/13
Sometimes silly stories of the Harry Potter crew in the muggle world are a fun read. You captured my interest, though I stopped reading because couldn't get through the run-ons. Ease up on using 'as' and 'and' to conjoin sentences. It made things quite confusing.
| Fantomette34 chapter 16 . 3/2
J'ai adoré votre fic, les relations entre Hermione et Severus, même si j'ai du mal à imaginer Minerva dans le rôle de la méchante...
Bravo pour votre travail et merci pour le partage !
| LoveInTheBattleField chapter 16 . 5/27/2014
This nice and hot.
How God Created Mother
God took the fragrance of a flower,
The majesty of a tree,
The gentleness of a morning a dew
The calm of a quiet sea,
The beauty of a twilight hour
The soul of a starry night
The laughter of the rippling brook,
The grace of a bird in flight,
Then God fashioned from these things
A creation like no other,
And when His masterpiece was through,
He called it simply...MOTHER.
Happy Mother's Day!
| Inner Self chapter 1 . 3/19/2014
Why is hermione taking this class?
| tainted-tash chapter 16 . 10/19/2013
Loved every step of it :)
| tainted-tash chapter 15 . 10/19/2013
| tainted-tash chapter 14 . 10/19/2013
Why do I get the feeling he's really alive?
| tainted-tash chapter 13 . 10/19/2013
WHAT.?! WHAT THE FUCK JUST HAPPENED?.?
| tainted-tash chapter 12 . 10/19/2013
That was beautiful :)
| tainted-tash chapter 11 . 10/19/2013
There really is no better wizard...
| tainted-tash chapter 10 . 10/19/2013
Back with a bank I imagine
| tainted-tash chapter 9 . 10/19/2013
It's hardly surprising she wants Severus, he is her equal.
| tainted-tash chapter 8 . 10/19/2013
Something more, indeed
| tainted-tash chapter 7 . 10/19/2013
Ron. Gay. Huh?