|Reviews for Outside from the World|
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/19/2017
Loved it !
| jess.c.kong chapter 1 . 9/18/2014
Very interesting apocolyptic story...I like your writing style. I could definitely see this spinnimg into a multi-chapter fic. Can't wait to read more of your work. Thank you for sharing! :-)
| RinneLin chapter 1 . 6/28/2014
Love it. It's poetic and it makes me loose myself in my thoughts. Melancholic. Poignant. You get the feeling of helplessness even though you don't know what is happening.
| Liebert chapter 1 . 11/25/2013
omg this is perfect, thank you for sharing!
| Adamantyne chapter 1 . 9/23/2012
Wauw! This was amazing! I loved every single word in it and just after the first few lines I was captured. It's very minimalistic and I really love that. You know, not really any feelings being described and most of it left for the reader to interpret. It came as a shock to me when Hinata died. I'm pretty sure that was the place where I almost had tears in my eyes. You choice of words is beautiful and you say a lot without even saying that much. This was a real pleasure to read. I loved it!
| Lazy Gaga chapter 1 . 5/22/2012
Almost cried, that was so good! You've done an AWESOME job with this! Really! I loved how angsty the whole thing was, and the fact that you never really truly knew whether they made it north or not! Great job!
| lustofficial chapter 1 . 1/21/2011
was one of the best Shikamaru centered fic I have ever read.
| AWickedMemory chapter 1 . 9/23/2010
Oh~ I hadn't realized it was AU at first, so I was like, "wtf happened to Konoha? O_O" XDDD
Awww, poor Hinata...! I totally did not expect that. XD The protectively brotherly relationship they both had with her is sooo cuuuute~ T.T
"Pale and soft and filled with light." That... is a perfect description of snow. XDDD
| Okami Rayne chapter 1 . 9/23/2010
Brevity! Another piece of your beautiful writing that creates these stunning visuals that stuck me in and keep me hooked. You have such a unique and poignant way of writing, Luv – such a pleasure to read.
I initially felt for Shikamaru the same way I did for the character in “I AM LEGEND” (at least the movie version lol) where this guy is essentially the last of his kind in this abandoned world.
“It was nearing six months to the day the world ended with a bang. / "Not with a whimper," he added, mumbling to himself.” – I love this reference in here! *dances about*
“He could declare himself king and rule a vast empire of one.” – Beautiful but so sad in a wry, tragic kind of way. Wonderful.
“Grim lines sprouted from the corners and creased their foreheads, spinning the tale of a lifetime lived far beyond their actual years, a life tired and unforgiving. / A life he currently lived.” – You tie in these sentences so powerfully. It’s magnetic. So much communicated in a few choice words.
It’s amazing how you manage to convey so much in these short scenes – true talent, my lovely.
“For a moment they felt the happiness they thought they had forgotten.” – This is such a beautiful line. I kept rereading it.
Hinata added such a great dynamic into the trio, given the unspoken gestures and understanding between Neji and Shikamaru, it was a great balance to have her raising the questions the others didn’t.
God…Hinata’s death…again, you manage to make such an impact on a reader without the need of many words. That haunting way she just accepted her fate. Tragic – and Shikamaru and Neji’s reactions were so real. The fact that they couldn’t look at each other – and then how Neji sought him out and those unanswered questions hanging so forlornly.
Your writing always transports me to this in-between place that I LOVE. You create poetry in the writing and the interactions and it’s such a wonderful thing to escape into and experience. You chose such an interesting idea and you created a brilliant, moving, engaging piece out of it.
Absolutely Love It.
Thank you for writing this, Brevity. I greatly anticipate future fics, Poppet!
~ Rayne xXx
| OverDramaticWriter chapter 1 . 9/22/2010
That was absolutely beautiful. -runs to read more of your fics-