|Reviews for Ombra Scura|
| Sparkily chapter 24 . 10/27/2013
In varia? hmm... i'd say Fran but if he isn't included then mammon
| DisilludedNight chapter 32 . 12/6/2012
Update, update I love this story!
| Anna the Viking XD chapter 32 . 4/6/2012
Lol I rolled off my bed laughing update soon
| 6Fortius9 chapter 32 . 4/1/2012
Your story's nice, but I don't really get the Ombra Scura parts. Also, Elena's pretty useless (not trying to offend you, just stating) in the whole story since she never once helped to fight. From what I've seen, actually, she doesn't even seem to know self-protection. I do sincerely hope you will make her seem stronger instead of being grouped along with Haru and Kyoko and the useless-people-who-just-stand-by-the-sidelines-and-do-nothing, cause it's really frustrating how not important she seem. On the topic of Haru and Kyoko, you made Haru seem like a bitch at the beginnings and as though Haru was just her friend to use her. Slightly irritating. Also, You didn't give her a heartening episode with the big boss Tsuna either even though all the rest have one. They don't seem close, honestly, at all, and from what I can see, she simply sees Tsuna as something she needs to protect in order to save herself. They don't have much interaction, you see. Overall, you seem too focused on Gokudera and her relationship to care about the other characters' bonding with her, and that's quite sad, considering how they might just kick her out should Gokudera not be there. I think you would also want to focus on the other bonds in the Millefiore Arc, or maybe even add 'Extra' episodes in so as to bring out better her ties to them. That's the end of what I want to say.
| Isa chapter 31 . 1/30/2012
I'm in love with this story 3
(I just read the entire thing in one day, BTW.)
It's funny, well written and just flows so well :D
Please update soon~!
| Tonaku chapter 31 . 1/1/2012
3rd one! Miaow!
...yuus, I'm still interested! _
however...biggest mistake I've ever made when reading this...was listening to Xanxus sing while reading the last chapter...'...it made it a TON creepier for me...
| 10th Squad 3rd Seat chapter 31 . 12/18/2011
I missed this!~Sorry this took so long.
What happened to Hayato?D:
| leogirl321 chapter 30 . 11/10/2011
Watch the grammar. Reread it a few times or get a beta tester but otherwise. I really like it :D update ASAP
| 10th Squad 3rd Seat chapter 30 . 11/4/2011
FRan and Elena!Both Frankie...
| LifeIsARayOfSunshine chapter 30 . 11/4/2011
An update YAY! It's been so long! ;_;!
Anyways Yay it's the future arc! It's about time, and huh I since Elena all missing in the past I wonder if anyones looking for her. ;D.
Thanks for the update hope another one comes soon!
| 10th Squad 3rd Seat chapter 29 . 10/22/2011
Kinda cute,alittle confusing but I can manage.
| LifeIsARayOfSunshine chapter 29 . 10/22/2011
NOOOOO What Happened?
I really like this chapter!
Wait... SO does Gokudera Know that Elena has a crush on him or what? and who was talking/thinking. In the parts in between Elena at Gokudera's house?
Hope you update soon!
| Meet Albert. The Cupcake chapter 29 . 10/22/2011
YO. YO. Yo. YO.
You said funny and advisable for this review so..
Hey can I tell you something? I spelt advisable correct. ;)
I'm proud of my self. Unlike French. French hates me.
Anyways. That was nothing, just a little you know, off-ish with what I'm going to write, so now.. Here's the actual review.
Let me go to the toilet first though.
I'm back yo.
Okay. You know BEG? They should do Hello Baby. Because it would be funny. Because BEG is funny. XD
OKAAAAAYYYYY THE ACTUAL REVIEW:
I would write it, but you keep texting me while I'm doing this you know? It's distracting. I JUST FELT MY BUTT VIBRATE. IT's you.
-Don't leave me hanging there. I DID NOT LIKE IT.
-Remind me to get catch up in all Elena's plan to get Hayato in her pants. OKAY?
-It's weird that you already put them together in a bed... With out any.. [TEXT from you] you know.. goodnight kisses. SHEESH.
-I think this chapter is short. WHYYYYY?
-Is 'Class dismissed' supposed to be in italics?
-WHO IS YUU AND WHY IS HE GONE?
-DID I JUST SKIP THE FUTURE ARC ENTIRELY?
-I reread it. ELENA BECAME QUEEN VICTORIA.
-Did you just do a time skip after the Queen Victoria bit? Because that just did not MAKE SENSE.
-' I screamed to , due to this mission' I think you missed a word out in this sentence...
-.' Recently being reported missing' should you have put a comma after recently?
-' situation is their household.' missed 'at' here.
- 'everyday every time' i think you need a comma after everytime
-' Reborn - something that is said every time something is said that is relevant ' its a bit confusing but i get it...
-Because of Elena's dead chicken thought, I want chicken now..
-'escape but i' comma after escape?
-I can't do anymoreeeeee. Mainly because I read this bit shockingly. ;)
Isn't me going to the toilet funny?
GG. WOAH. JESSICA YOU BEING SEXY? o3o.
Have you heard their new single?
| RememberTheMuse chapter 28 . 10/19/2011
This is probably the best Katekyo Hitman Reborn story I have read! Can't wait for the next chapter! D
| 10th Squad 3rd Seat chapter 28 . 10/16/2011
Yes. I did see Dino with a moustache," I answered indifferently.
"Ha… I figured."
Now that was funny...
And they kissed!C: