|Reviews for Acquitted|
| SherryGabs chapter 1 . 9/26/2010
I like the plot to this and would love to read more.
It may be just me, but it kind of felt like it was speeding along a bit too quick. Slow the pace down and let the characters do more internal thinking or show some actions or emotions along with their dialogue.
You also should put some kind of scene spacer/breaker (like ***'s or ooo's) or something between paragraphs when scenes are completely changing. It got confusing when they were in the bullpen talking about a safehouse, to then suddenly being in the safehouse and wondering where Gibbs was. Those spacers or breakers make it clear the scene is changing.
Not flaming, just trying to be helpful. Hope to read more soon.
| Meilea2010 chapter 1 . 9/23/2010
Interestin story. Damn lawyers and judges. Our justice system sucks. When do we get the next chapter? Soon, I hope.