|Reviews for Harry Potter The New Marauders|
| billyvmom chapter 143 . 11/5/2010
I just finished your story there were quite a few things I liked about this story. I really took a lot of time to finish this story. I think you use the word sbrilliant, snogging, cuddling a little too much and have all the kids getting married too early but, other than that it was great.
| echo27fire chapter 37 . 11/2/2010
Wow, that was quite a bold move.
| echo27fire chapter 30 . 11/2/2010
Oh Ho Ho!
I'm really liking this story now.
| echo27fire chapter 13 . 11/1/2010
Just about to finish the first year. So far the story is great. I find it interesting that you put everybody into Ravenclaw.
Well back to reading...
| glasgowgirl chapter 86 . 10/24/2010
This was a great chapter. Loved this years TNM Halloween trick, taking all the students on a ride through the series of original books.
It was a really well thought out twist and superbly written.
Well done )...
| glasgowgirl chapter 82 . 10/23/2010
Okay, well haven't reviewed in a while, so thought I would do so now.
The story's been fairly fluid so far, with very little errors in the way of typo's/ The narrative, has been pretty much flawless.
This chapter however, in my opinion, was way too long, and should have been split into several chapters. I began reading this one chapter this afternoon, and it's now nearly 2am in the UK, and I've only just finished.
Thats even with me skimming over bits, that either weren't overly important, or not of intrest to me.
It just got too montomous after a while, and I wanted to either to be able to bookmark it, after only partially reading, or just ditch the chapter all together.
Otherwise, good work so far, just try to keep individual chapters shorter in the future )...
| glasgowgirl chapter 67 . 10/16/2010
Yay, I've been waiting for this all season while the Canon's have been struggling, for Harry, Ginny and Ron, to step up in the positions they were needed in.
Well written again, the odd typo here and there, but well done!
| glasgowgirl chapter 58 . 10/15/2010
Okay I'm assuming you're American or living somewhere that tends to use American terms. However, when writing a continuation of a piece written by a Scottish writer, who's story is based in England, you need to write using the terms that fit the scene and culture of these places.
For example, the American clothing term pants, in the UK these are known as trousers. Pants in the UK, are the termation we use for underpants/knickers whatever you wish to call them.
Here it would be considered unacceptable for an uncle to be buying his eleven year old niece such items, these kinds of item are left for female relatives to purchase.
On another point that ties in with this, you're having too many proposals while still in school or just after, that just isn't the way things are done here, that only really happens if some rich or religous kid gets pregnant. It's just not in our culture. Once or twice would have been acceptable, it just been done too much now, throughout this story and the sequel.
You just need to watch the termation you're using, remember google is you're friend, if you're unsure.
Otherwise, good and enjoyable writing.
| glasgowgirl chapter 55 . 10/14/2010
Also on another note. Do you know you have annomous reviews disabled? This may be contributing to the lack of reviews, on some very well written pieces of penmanship!
Just a thought...
PS. Well done on another well written and enjoyable chapter...
| glasgowgirl chapter 54 . 10/14/2010
Another few great chapters.
A few things I've liked.
It was good to see Aaron and Arianna, get there commuppence on their aunt and uncle, by evicting them, and giving them no inheritance. Which was exactl what they deserved, but it was also good, how you didn't make the twins overly bitter.
It was also a welcomed surprise, to see James being named as Prefect. I wasn't expecting that.
It's also been good to see the young couple's begining to bond more.
All in all well written and an enjoyable few chapters.
| glasgowgirl chapter 48 . 10/13/2010
This was a really poignant, and heart touching chapter.
It was extremly well written, especially since it is one of those really taboo subjects, than can go so badly wrong, if not prtrayed properly, and the way it was written showed Arianna and Aaron finally being able to get some closure.
You are very gifted in your writing.
An excellent chapter. Well done!
| polrobin chapter 1 . 10/12/2010
Do you this file in a compiled word or html (or epub) file? I tried using ff downloader and it crashed it (I think because the story's so big).
I read the first bit on my iPad and would like to continue with this book.
| glasgowgirl chapter 44 . 10/11/2010
Okay, going to bed now, staying up way too late reading your fic's is begining to become a habit now lol...
The plot line of the story's great, and this time consists of more drama scenes than the prequel so far, but to be honest, the goody goody TNM scenes, are begining to become a bit of goodwill overload.
I also think Lily's turning into a bit of Mary Sue, as you're potraying her, as just being to perfect in everyway. Everyone has at least some flaws, no one can be perfect...
The style of your writing is good, although there have been more errors in this installment than the prequel, but still relatively few, just the odd typo, grammar error or conflicting wording here and there.
All in all its a good story, could just do with a little more, of the WoW factor!
Anyways, I look forward to continuing tomorrow.
Well done so far!
| teachergirl chapter 83 . 10/11/2010
I know writing for all of these character is difficult, but having Hermione say, "You did brilliant" is completely out of character. First, it's grammatically incorrect. Brilliant is being used as an adverb; it should be brilliantly. Secondly, Hermione is a character we know well from canon. This is not how she would speak. Her vocabulary is incredible. She would be loquacious when speaking to anyone including her son. I know this is being picky, but it really bothers me when canon characters are portrayed out of character.
| glasgowgirl chapter 31 . 10/11/2010
I particularly enjoyed this chapter. The way you portrayed young Albus's power was very well written.
Another flawlessly written chapter.