Reviews for Waiting in Darkness
zeldalink531 chapter 4 . 6/29/2012
This was really wonderful. I liked it a lot. :)

It was just a little hard to follow with the abrupt point of view changes.

The page break were where you meant to change it, right? But I kept noticing them changing in the middle. I kept having to reread to check to see who was saying and doing what and when I thought I had it figured out I was wrong. So you might want to go back through it. Maybe it was just me.

But other than that it was great.

Where was Navi in all this? Not that I minded. A little hard to have a relationship when a little blue fairy is buzzing around you all the damn time. lol
JaidenAye chapter 4 . 3/16/2012
You've got an alright story, but I found it hard to keep up with it through all the strange divides and rather abrupt perspective changes.
FREED0M WRITER chapter 4 . 2/16/2012
wow i really like your writing style and i like the relationship you have made between Link and Dark cant wate for a sequel XD
PrincessAgainstThePatriarchy chapter 4 . 1/31/2012
cuteeeeeeee! :D
inspired-by-Dream chapter 4 . 8/26/2011
Not bad really, only that it's kind of sort

The characteristic and movement and the thoughts were all described quite well,

And sequel!
DangoGonzo chapter 3 . 7/24/2011
Scintillating, now that's a word I haven't heard in a long time. Great work!
Kat chapter 4 . 1/15/2011
Wow. Good short story. Intense. would you mind doing a sequel to this one? Please?
Paranoid Zephyr chapter 4 . 11/13/2010
whait, where was navi during all of this?
RandomDraggon chapter 4 . 10/25/2010
awwww cute X3
deikitty chapter 4 . 10/20/2010
aw...i liked this alot. it made me smile as i remembered my own first kiss. it brought all those memories flooding back to me, and made the story feel strikingly believable and real. nice job, keep it up! -
Sage of Fortune chapter 4 . 10/16/2010
That better NOT be the end! :O

I really enjoyed reading it all, and I hope that you will definitely consider continuing it.

If you do decide to continue let me know! Subscribed and faved.

You really Can write.

Sincerely,

VSoF
DTDY chapter 4 . 10/13/2010
Wonderful. I love how they are growing so close.
darkwolflink1 chapter 4 . 10/13/2010
aaww fluffy and a bit fo sex chucked in nice work.

wow keep writting, can you make the chapters a bit longer?

i can't wait for the rest.
the upward glance chapter 4 . 10/12/2010
Awwwwww...

"Just me and Link"

Endings always make me misty-eyed...

That was a lovely little chapter.

Their waking up together was particularly precious and wonderfully described.

I really could feel the gentle morning sun, and the comfort and warmth of another being...which is quite a fear considering it's 2 am and I'm sitting on the couch by myself, reading this, and watching Friday the 13th: The Series. (Doesn't that paint a sorry picture? Lol)

I literally went "Gahhhhhhhh!" when there intimacy was interrupted. That was a really humorous moment.

Mmmmmmmmm lemony goodness.

Though, I must say I was hoping for some Dark-on-Top Penetration...*blushes at smutty desires considering his innocence*

hehehe...

But still it was very erotic.

Especially the "Now you're mine"

It sent delicious shivers down my spine.

And Dark's clawing Link's back...

Yum...

Ahem.

Anyway!

It was expertly written as always. And although I'm sad to see it end, it did seem like the perfect ending.

I like how it started with Link's POV in the first chapter and ended with Dark's. I don't know if you intended that, but I enjoyed it. :)

I hope to read more fantastic work from you in the near future.

Happy writing my friend!

:)

XOXO
the upward glance chapter 3 . 10/7/2010
I LOVE this story so far!

:)

You characterize Link and Dark Link very well.

I enjoy their banter and cheeky antics!

You write with a great style, descriptive and precise.

You incorporate elements of the game wonderfully!

I find it kinda fun because it's been YEARS since I've played Zelda! It's like a trip down memory lane. :)

You are handling this budding romance expertly.

It's not moving to fast, and there is a sense of innocence and gentleness that I adore.

The bedtime scene was perfect!

I'm very excited to see where this story goes.

You are a great writer and it's a great first story.

:)

XOXO
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