|Reviews for Ten Songs, Ten Stories|
| LoveforPenandDerek chapter 11 . 11/7/2010
that unsub don't know who he is messing with
| LoveforPenandDerek chapter 9 . 11/7/2010
| LoveforPenandDerek chapter 8 . 11/7/2010
| LoveforPenandDerek chapter 7 . 11/7/2010
| LoveforPenandDerek chapter 6 . 11/7/2010
| LoveforPenandDerek chapter 5 . 11/7/2010
| LoveforPenandDerek chapter 4 . 11/7/2010
It was interesting to read about them in high school.
My problem with this one is that the dialogue had a mistake in technique. You want to put Hotch's words with Hotch's thoughts. Instead you have Hotch speaking and Haley thinking and that confuses things. This is not just my opinion but the rules of dialogue.
It should be like this:
Haley Brooks stared. He was tall, his dark hair brushed back into a floppy feathered style that pop stars would envy. He just joined the drama club four days ago. It took a minute to remember his name…Aaron…Hotchner. Debate club guy.
He flashed a brilliant, confident smile.
"Of course," she answered.
Her girlfriends giggled madly behind her. Haley didn't know much about him, just that he was a bit on the geeky side and that his singing voice was decent, but nothing special.
"Please?" he asked again.
Haley took his hand.
| LoveforPenandDerek chapter 3 . 11/7/2010
Not sure who Cooper is. Is he from the spin off? This drabble was nicely done. It showed all Rossi's pain over his job. Working in the BAU seems to be a heavy burden to bear.
| LoveforPenandDerek chapter 2 . 11/7/2010
It was interesting how hotch differeiates Reid from Spencer.
| LoveforPenandDerek chapter 10 . 9/27/2010
Love it. His caring for her is beautiful