|Reviews for Soldiers of The Dawn|
| Skellington32 chapter 5 . 10/16/2010
Excellent story line bud, but it seems your more or less trying to get your dialogue to move the story. You need to go more in depth to what the characters are doing, which will anchor the dialogue a little more better. Also, everything seems to be happening a little too quick like your trying to get to your climax much more faster. Slow and steady wins the race, let your readers actually have a chance to be engrossed into the story before they realize its over by the time they started reading.
| Big-D Cowboy chapter 3 . 10/2/2010
Liking where this is going dude. Keep up the good work bro.