Sorry, I'm too new to this stuff to really know what's overused and underused. Maybe I'll get back to you with a PM when I've had more time to read. Is that alright, or would you perfer that I just stay quiet?

Guilty as charged: I'm wayyyy to lazy to write up a bunch of my own OCs going off on their own special adventure. Still, I think it's fun to see someone else write your characters. And if it weren't fun for them, they shouldn't put a giant sign on their profile that says "Accepting OCs."

Oh dear God, my head hurts after reading that. Yeah, I can tell you tried hard: nobody can be that terrible unless they made an effort at it.

I think you're too self-concious. I'd give your OC at least an 8. Then again, I'm fairly new at this, so what would I know? Still, that was an honest opinion from a random reader. You should give yourself more credit.

That was sad. Poor Zach, his head must hurt so much after Alex broke the 4th wall on him.

The beginning of the story is usually difficult. I think the only thing harder than writing a satisfying beginning is writing a satisfying end.

I saw a bunch of pretty good pokemon in the under-used list. Make me wonder why they're under-used.

Hoorah for juvenile kleptomaniacs! (I think I spelled that right...)

I was bored, but I'm still alive... barely. I keep reading, though. You know what they say: if it doesn't kill you it makes you stronger.

I was hoping the pseudo-legends would all release their attacks at once and this would end in another explosion.

Oh God, it was only a matter of time before the speshul powahs appeared...

Team Galactic really is evil: they create all these pokemorphs and release them onto ! Then the poor readers suffer at the hands of the pokemorph Sue! Curse you, Team Galactic!

Couldn't he have exploded in the end? You should end all of your chapters like the last one.

The perfect ending to their perfect little lives.

This is becoming a little sad to read. But I will forge on, because at the same time it's so interesting!