|Reviews for I'm Coming|
| CloverThyne chapter 1 . 6/21/2011
oopsy...im not logged in...but gaaaahhh i luv this story! keep on writing and your summery didnt suck or else i wudnt read it ..
| Bbee7 chapter 4 . 4/27/2011
Could I please continue the story?
| Diana Mendoza chapter 1 . 4/26/2011
Nice! i really like the first part when Amy and Ian are together, its not that cheesy, really!
| fangirls see differently chapter 4 . 4/26/2011
| fangirls see differently chapter 3 . 3/9/2011
Um, the Vespers?
| fangirls see differently chapter 2 . 2/2/2011
Okay so what is the bad news? I wanna know!
| JascyGrason chapter 1 . 12/19/2010
There, i reviewed. ))
| Klbooks chapter 1 . 10/16/2010
Ahem. This wasn't too bad, but not the greatest, either.
I'd like to make a point, though: It's *NOT* good to change Point of Views so much. It can get annoying, and distracts from the story. Try making a chapter in one point of view, or if there are too many different scenes, try third person, maybe. If you can, use a break, and see if you can *not* put the character's name at the top, and let the reader learn through something the characters say, or what the main person thinks:
Argh, I told myself, get your act together, Amy!
See? You know the person is Amy.
| 29491d6087 chapter 1 . 10/6/2010
Your grammar was pretty good. Apart from what PurpleTea88 said, there's nothing else.
You did pretty good with your Author Notes. They were bolded, and only at the beginning or/and at the end of your chapter. However, you should label it as an A/N. Oh, and you also forgot to
Your summary didn't need to say why you rated it T, and there should have been a space after the period.
Your story sounds good so far.
| PurpleTea88 chapter 1 . 10/5/2010
You should put commas at the end of dialogue instead of periods.
For example: "Thanks again for the night, Ian," I beamed.
Other than that, it was pretty good...