|Reviews for T-bone And Turmoil: What if Scenario|
| ulyferal chapter 1 . 10/9/2010
Well, yeah it definitely is telling us the episode but I understand your need to lay the background first. However, before you do anymore, go back and fix this and do the rest correctly or no one will read this. Your grammar isn't too bad, (you've failed to watch your capitalization here and there.) but you never write in block fashion, running all the conversations together this way. It's impossible to read and no one will bother. Check out other stories for proper format. Mine and Grey Dog's are good examples of proper story format. This does sound like it's going to be good. Everyone loves a 'what if' story. One more note, when you're doing someone's thought either use a ' ' or italics to show that its separate from out loud conversation with the " ". One final word: PROOF YOUR WORK BEFORE POSTING. Use a spell and grammar checker. There is really no excuse for shoddy work.
| GreyDog chapter 1 . 10/5/2010
Yeah that sounds good, you should seperate when they are talking so it will be easier to read but, great idea.