|Reviews for Stay|
| riderswaves123 chapter 3 . 8/16
"You need to tell your family what is going on and I will tell my dad." - Why do they "have" to tell them, huh? There is no reason. Bella can go to her father without an explanation, same with Edward. Their problems are between them alone. Why should they involve everyone? That makes the whole story a complete soap opera.
You made a few mistakes in this chapter. Example: At first you wrote this "I turned the knob, walked in and kneeled at her feet." Later you wrote this "No, baby! Please don't leave me, Edward pleaded and fell to my feet, gripping his hair,"
He already was on his knees. So he can't fall to her feet.
"I got up to go and get my suitcase and brought it out with me and went to the door. I looked back at him, he was sitting on the couch," - Edward was still on his knees as far as you wrote it. But suddenly he sat in the other room on the couch when Bella was almost out the "front"door.
I tried, I really tried but this is so bad written. I'm sorry. A much major writing would help that story. And it would be much better to only write it from one POV, Bella's. Just to get the angsty feel.
And after reading "My name is..." for the umpteenth time
| Scattycow chapter 4 . 8/13
Sorry, can't read any more of this.
| Scattycow chapter 3 . 8/13
"I deserve a man who doesn't stray"
Lol, he already did, you pathetic bitch.
What possible incentive does this skank have to never stray? He knows he will be forgiven, so why not do it? Five minutes of pouting and attitude while he gets his fill, before eventually giving the side piece up, is a small price to pay for a bit of pussy variety! Lol.
This woman makes me nauseous, sure the most pathetic Bella in fanfiction.
She deserves to be cheated on.
| Scattycow chapter 2 . 8/13
Should he suffer? For a bit? You are kidding aren't you?
What is it with women on this site?
What does Edward have to do before you get real!
Cheat on her? Nope, read that.
Rape her? Nope, read that too.
Beat her? Even read that.
I am actually waiting for a child abusing Edward to get forgiven. Still willing to bet my arse that he does.
It's ridiculous and makes women look stupid. What's worse is that his side piece gets all the blame; like she is the attached one. She has no responsibility to Bella, that's all on Edward.
Lol, he says he won't buy Tanya things because he knows it will hurt Bella? Doesn't stop him sticking his dick in her though, lol, too funny.
Bella's passive/aggressive shit is so immature.
| Scattycow chapter 1 . 8/13
Wtf! Why is she even giving him a choice?
What kind of pathetic idiot is she?
Where is her self esteem?
I've read some pathetic Bella's on this site, but yours takes the buscuit.
People will only treat us how we allow them to, so I have absolutely zero sympathy for this fool.
| snoopylover60 chapter 5 . 8/12
He screws around on Bella with Tanya for months... an she lets him, then lets him no that she will still marry him. It would do that cheating creep a world of good to see her with someone else. Let him feel her pain for awhile...
SERIOUS! She is worried that he will get the wrong impression?
| jk chapter 14 . 7/20
hmmm this should be fun...what should I do?
ummm you should stop acting like a fucking child, stop acting like this is a fucking game...moron
| jk chapter 12 . 7/20
it was sooo hot watching the two woman I fuck fight
Edwards a piece of shit
I hope he dies in the next chapter!
since Tanya "raped" Edward she was smart and fucked him without a condom right? so she could get child support out of him cause really why else would she "rape" a man she was already fucking
| jk chapter 11 . 7/20
I don't get why Tanya would have to drug and rape Edward...she was already fucking him...and Edward already admitted that he wasn't drunk when he fucked her...also even if she drugged him each time...he didn't know it he "thought" he fucked her and still went back for more...so either way...drugged NOT drugged he cheated..
I really don't get why you would even start with the drugging shit...it adds nothing to the story...also all you do is blame Tanya...and again ITS NOT HER FAULT...its Edwards. Tanya owed bella NOTHING. why do girls always blame the girl? its the guys fault! its the guy you should be mad at!
| jk chapter 10 . 7/20
love how Edward is all.."only I can do this to you baby" umm ya right
bella should be thinking yaaaaa but you get off EVERYWHERE
she didn't even make him get tested for stds before she forgave him
| jk chapter 8 . 7/20
there he goes again blaming it on Tanya..."what if SHE starts again bella? what if she tries to ruin us?"
doesn't he mean...what if she hits on me again bella? and I cant keep it in my pants? what if I start fucking her again bella? like I have over and over again?
Edward needs to die of aids
| jk chapter 7 . 7/20
Edward wanting to fuck bella in her mind is him trying to get her back/.? maybe he should do it without thinking about his filthy little cock...bella shouldn't feel SPECIAL that Edward wants to fuck...it seems he'll fuck anyone after all
| jk chapter 6 . 7/20
OF COURSE bella knows that you love her Edward! You proved it by fucking Tanya over and over again!.
used up piece of shit manwhore
| JK chapter 5 . 7/20
bella sure is forgiving Edward easy...all he had to do was break up with Tanya. WOW I doubt anyman has ever gotten off that easy for having a fucking affair
bellas a victim...that's how you wrote her.
and that stupid shit at the end of chapter 5? she falls to the floor and wails like a pussy cause Edward say her friends hand on hers? oh what a world what a world...so mother fucking stupid.
its like this story was written by a child
| jk chapter 4 . 7/20
Edward acts like its Tanya fault that he fucked her..."i tried to break it off but Tanya didn't get it" so I just kept fucking her...cause she made me feel "different"
this Edward? can die and I wouldn't even care!
seriously bella and ANYONE ELSE FOR THIS STORY...Edward can keep Tanya...and why does everyone keep saying that Tanya is a whore? what about Edward? hes the one in a relationship! hes the one with a fucking fiancé! hes the one that's living with someone! EDWARD IS THE WHORE
Tanya owes bella NOTHING! EDWARD IS THE FUCK UP, EDWARDS THE SKANK, EDWARDS THE PIECE OF SHIT, EDWARD THE ONE LYING TO BELLA, CHEATING ON BELLA, BETRAYING BELLA, BETRAYING THE VOWS HE PROMISDED WHEN HE PROPOSED, HES THE ONE THATS A PIECE OF SHIT, HES THE ONE THAT DESERVES NOTHING, AND YOU REALLY SHOULD GIVE HIM SOME STDS.
ITS NOT LIKE HE CHEATED ONCE WHEN HE WAS DRUNK, HE DID IT SOBER AND HE DID IT OVER AND OVER AND OVER AGAIN!