|Reviews for The First|
| Kiki-Chwaan chapter 1 . 1/12
That was one of the best one-shots I have ever read! It was so amazing, I really liked the plot great job!
| Awkward Inc chapter 1 . 11/12/2013
That was... so fucked up : I kind of agree with ImmortalSephiroth's review.
| Champion of Justice chapter 1 . 11/13/2012
| jojo07 chapter 1 . 9/23/2012
Ah! It was sad in the beginning but it got cute! I loved it! I mean not cute...but...um...romantic? Hehe... I loved it!
| Coffee Detective chapter 1 . 7/22/2012
I believe this was THE FIRST m-rated fic I've ever read on this site. Damn, I love this story so much, and I remember crying after I read it the first time I read it. Even though you didn't do a full out lemon, I still loved it anyways since the depth of the writing and emotion was amazing. I hope to read more from you. You're like an idol, really.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/1/2012
I loved it it's my new fave naruhina story!
| Hinanaru for eva chapter 1 . 1/10/2012
| Anime-Frekkkk chapter 1 . 12/8/2011
what a wonderful story
| himekassy-chan chapter 1 . 11/21/2011
LOVE IT! SO BEAUTIFUL! I CRIED SO MUCH!
That Naruto how dare he! he hurt hinata so
much! but in the end they ended up together!
so BEAUTIFUL! its worth reading this AMAZING!
STORY! YOU DID AN AWESOME JOB! THIS STORY HAS BECOME
| HinataRevolution123 chapter 1 . 11/18/2011
Interesting yet cunning great story
| Topaz Princess chapter 1 . 9/1/2011
great story...reminded me slightly of me n a friend...the round about way of a proposal was very nice.
:) keep up the good work
| Lich Kings True Demon chapter 1 . 7/26/2011
Good story, though i did have to reread a couple a parts cause i got confused.
| Londish chapter 1 . 1/17/2011
I really liked the story, but sometimes it's a bit confusing :D
| HinaHyuga chapter 1 . 1/16/2011
Omg its like 4am and I was so into the story I couldn't let go. Wow! Like Omg loved it.
| ImmortalSephiroth chapter 1 . 12/22/2010
hmmm...what can I say, other than to say this is most likely a story of YOUR life, you just swapped the names of the characters. I caught a couple of sentences where you were writing in the first person (we, I).
Not to say your story is bad...it's just I don't like 'fanfics' where the only similarity the characters have to the show is their names. A high school version of Naruto is all right, if say for example Shino is that creepy kid in the corner who likes bugs...but not if Shino is that guy who wears glasses but ends up studying nuclear physics...
Anyway, while a well written STORY, this is not a FANFIC, because if I am right, you simply wrote about your own life and swapped out the names. Maybe you should put this on , the site for original fiction.