Reviews for Missing Scene Slither
abfirechick chapter 7 . 4/15/2017
You have done a great job, especially for your first piece. If you want help grammatically there is a program called Grammarly which is fabulous. The basic version is free.
One suggestion is that when you someone speaking break it into different paragraphs instead of one large one. It makes it flow a bit better and easier to read.
For example, when the doctor is explaining everything . to Rick.
You can have one person speaking and finish one thought than create another paragraph then have them continue the next part of the explanation.
Just an idea.
Good job.
Guest chapter 8 . 9/30/2015
It's a shame the TV episode didn't show a little more detail. It makes more sense after reading the missing scene, and shows the feelings of all those involved. Very enjoyable reading, you can visualise the scene, through the writers words. Excellent reading
Callie chapter 2 . 10/1/2014
Was he "overeating" to the stress or "overreacting" to the stress? There is a big difference.
Arika chapter 8 . 8/19/2011
Can't wait to read your new one!
Katy M VT chapter 8 . 8/6/2011
I hope you're still planning on doing that. That would be awesome. I love that epi.
scootersmom chapter 7 . 7/13/2011
Great job with your story! I just found it on fanfic and was so excited to see someone writing some new simon and simon fic! such a great show! I really enjoyed your story and agree that the show did not show nearly enough of the repercussions of being given a drug like that!

I hope you write some more stories!
Ecri chapter 7 . 7/13/2011
I just found this story and read it straight through. I wanted to thank you for writing it and beg you to continue, and to write more Simon and Simon missing scenes.

I'm a big fan of the show, and you're absolutely right about the show and how the brothers seem to bounce back from things that really should take more time! I've been lurking the internet for years hoping to find a story based on this exact episode and you really did a wonderful job with it. I love the relationship between the brothers and you depicted it wonderfully. Fabulous job. Keep writing and posting!
norineh chapter 7 . 1/29/2011
I enjoyed your fan fic. It sounds like you've been busy, but yeah, I think following AJ's recovery would be interesting!
charlieboy chapter 6 . 12/5/2010
I could see/feel the panic in A.J.'s eyes...the fear that Rick has, concerned that he won't always be able to be there ... You are doing excellent!
charlieboy chapter 5 . 12/5/2010
LOL Yes! I can picture Rick doing just that to wake A.J. up. Excellent chapter, and yes...Mom is going to KILL Rick for not calling right away.
charlieboy chapter 4 . 12/5/2010
Excellent description on what is going on with A.J. Love how you are writing this!
charlieboy chapter 3 . 12/5/2010
I love it! I can imagine Rick being just like this, feeling, thinking this way about his brother A.J.
kgar chapter 5 . 11/24/2010
Hey, Thanks for the reviews. It is exciting to know someone is reading and enjoying my first attempts at fanfiction. I promise it is almost finished and I am not going to post until I am done. Should be sometime this weekend. Have a great Thanksgiving!
charlieboy chapter 2 . 11/24/2010
Wow, this is great! I like how we're able to see/hear Rick's thoughts. I am looking forward to reading more.
charlieboy chapter 1 . 11/24/2010
kgar...I just started to seriously watch Simon and Simon the last week or two. Like you, I had forgotten about this gem and now look forward to each episode during the I do not have netflix! lol
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