Reviews for The Good Left Undone |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I'm enjoying thr story but no offense you're kinda shit at writing fights. Like why would he use both flash grenades and tear gas? Neither of which are very effective at taking down jedi bc as shown in the very first piece of Star Wars media ever A New Hope it goes out of its way to show that they don't need eyesight to block blasters. I know you gave the reasoning of shell-shocked but that all still feels incredibly weak to have a highly trained jedi shadow go down to a couple gimmicks which have been shown to not be super effective against jedi and a singular blaster bolt especially as you had just made the point she was actively reaching for the force at the time. Also why did neither Celeste nor Aayla use the force outside of Celeste using it to grab her lightsaber. Prolly would have been pretty useful in a fight for their and the crew's that outside of sage mode I don't think you've done a good job with Naruto's scenes at all. He IS a one man army. You've acknowledged this and he has already shown his abilities to the most dangerous people in the galaxy so there's no holding back or anything. So why does he keep being so fucking passive in combat scenarios. Especially as this is supposed to be an older, harder more jaded Naruto. You have him do one big thing and otherwise just watch shit play out and passively interact. That doesnt fit either your characterization or the original one of him. You somehow did a way better job with Sasuke fighting the clones which is weird bc that isn't near as important of a scene. It just feels like you're forcing your way to the endgoals you want to write than actually following the flow of the story and letting the characters be the characters. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OH THANK GOD I WON'T HAVE TO READ A WHOLE "WILL HE, WON'T HE" ARC BC THAT SHIT IS JUST FUCKIN FRUSTRATING |
![]() ![]() Also you nerfed Naruto big time once he is in Star Wars…. DO NOT READ THIS TRASH |
![]() ![]() Story ruined lol you are having Aayla and other people use chakra. Zero chance I am reading this garbage |
![]() ![]() ![]() Man this is so good... Please update this amazing fic |
![]() ![]() ![]() i know this hasn't been updated in forever but damn i gotta say it. imagine a Fuinjutsu upgraded YT-1300p? Their storage capactity would be virtually unlimited. and they could store the ship in a pocket dimension when not in use. he could probably also alter the mass and effects of gravity on the ship along with the durability to make the fuel efficiency and speed... out of this world. imagine if he could figure out a reflector shield seal that could store and send back blaster fire anytime they get shot at it gets absorbed into the shield ready to be resent back at the attackers so they wouldn't have to use their own ammo supplies. in addition to that if he masters Hiraishin he could place jutsu shiki on different worlds so that they could have instantaneous travel. it would have to be a much more complex version tied to the ship with some kind of sensory and anchor point array but dannng would it come in handy. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Just when I thought Sing couldn't get stupider. She saw Naruto's power and still wishes to kill Aayla? |
![]() ![]() What happened dude did you die or something? |
![]() ![]() ![]() So far this story is pretty interesting, however the fact that ppl writing reviews just take canon Naruto peak strenght for granted when it was clearly shown that he was from an AU is ridiculous. Also people seem to clearly forget the fact that blasters are easily as dangerous as some more deadly jutsus from Naruto. Not to mention the heavier stuff from their futuristic tanks and crap. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Naruto on this story is way over his head the villain he is fighting is beyond anything from the Shinobi world. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really want to like this story, but Naruto's shifting power levels are just too contrived |
![]() ![]() ![]() Did naruto get weakened cuz it took multiple days of continuous intense combat to drain Naruto of his chakra and stamina |
![]() ![]() Me acabó de terminar de leer esto... Ojalá hubiesen más capitulos |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think you are underestimating the inhuman feats naruto is capable of. For example there should be no way that a storm trooper could survive a rasengan just like that. Second naruto as a shinobi is superhumanely fast even without chakra. |
![]() ![]() 1) Your choice of writing by chapter 41, I won’t be continuing this. 2) Your inactivity, I will presume that you are no longer writing. 3) Your lack of writing, and the ideas which match some of my own, I will using these as reference points, and even be using them myself. If you want, please express your opinion. Otherwise, hold your peace. |